 Charmina 2/4/10 . chapter 1Wow, that was so beautiful... And so sad... Amazing work! |
 Kyra2 2/7/05 . chapter 1And everyone died.
Very good in a morbid sort of way. |
 Bleecker Street 9/25/02 . chapter 1Wow. Write more...I like it. Do you mean to imply a relationship between Ron and Harry? Gasp. Just one question- why is Ron cooling Harry's brow? Got to know, write me back...my email's at my profile on this website. I think your plot sequence could be slightly improved, but not really. |
 tempestuous 9/9/02 . chapter 1this made me cry.
i can't even begin to list all the things that made this a haunting, wonderful work of art.
i wish i could write with a fraction of your talent. |
 Diablogyrl 8/29/02 . chapter 1Deep, girl. Deep. Thumbs up. |
 Pale Rider 8/28/02 . chapter 1I liked this; the dialogue and interaction between Harry and Ron seemed very natural. I found it to be a little confusing, though, particularly at the end when I couldn't decide whether Voldemort was on his way or had already been defeated. I don't think the inclusion of lines from "The Hollow Men" added much, either; you have to be careful with that sort of quotation lest you come across as pretentious. Aside from those two issues, however, I really liked this. Thanks for writing. |