Okay, this is is interesting but there are few things that seem to be off... When i read that Harry, Ron and Hermione bathed together in the prefects large bath/pool I thought well that's weird. When i read Harry was washing Hermione's hair while she washed Ron's i snorted in disbelief. Then reading the three of them live in the Head boy and Girl suite and sleep in the same bed like one happy family i thought now come on... it was really off putting. But, i am going to read on a seeing if it gets better.

Harry Potter was 'born as the seventh month dies', meaning at the end of July(from memory it's like the 29th). And if his birthday were on the 11th of july then he would not be a leo, he would be a cancer, which is a crab! And for the record, altough I don't mind some creative changes to characters, Sirius' eyes are BLUE, NOT brown in the book!

what was the name of that song?

HAHAH I LOVE WAHT HERMIONE SAID LAST !! XDD


“Give them Voldemort and they can withstand the most horrible torture and agony. Give them their kids for a day and they fall down easily.”


ngaw im so happy foh all of them !!

tho i did find it incredulous that lily got preg so fast ... esp wen she jst came bak from the Underworld. O_O"

nwaiiz; this was a wonderful story ! had heaps of humour in it, and heaps of suspense.

thanks so much foh it !

OMFG SEVERUS IS HERMIONE"S FATHER ?!?!? =O

IS HELEN A WITCH ? O_O"

WOARRH

WAHT A TWIST ! =OO


HAVE TO KEEP READIN !

ngaw ... ron ... ngaw

LOL.

i can't seem to stop commentin =OO

damn, this story is too good !

LOL ron is hilarious !

can`t seem to not comment xDD


gna keep readin. xDD

*tries to keep a straight face ...


bursts out laughin at ron again* xD

ngaw sirius black is so cute here !! =DD

HAHHAHAHHAH ALOLOLOL AT RON HAHAHAH XD

great story so far =D loving it ^^ =)

gna keep readin now =)

very well done. i loved the whole goddess thing. you are very creative. if you had gotten a beta reader it could have been better. but it was still a very good story.

i have 2 things to say 1 praise 1 criticism. i praise you on this "Voldemort used ancient magic to make him almost invincible and protect himself from harm or death. That same power also brought about his downfall but not his death," since this was written before Deathly Hallows that was very perceptive of you to conclude this... i must also praise you on something else that i just remembered lol, the fact that Hermione concluded the whole dietes er w/e thing that was a very nice piece of thinking on your part. my criticism is that Harry's birthday isn't on July 11th, it is July 31st at exactly 12:00. yo can deduce this from the first book about the 3rd-4th chapter. hagrid visits harry as he turns 11 they go shooping then a month later harry goes off to hogwarts on september first. other than that your story is very good. i personally love hermione and sirius together. well hermione with anyone except for harry and ron is a good pairing.

just thought i should let you know that chapter 10 (telling harry) of 'To spill or Not to' isn't working as there are no words for it.

kk

get a beta. or go back over your work. i mean really this is a good story but you put it to shame with all of your typos and everything else. please i beg of you get a beta. i would offer but currently i am beta'ing 9 stories so i am currently unavailble. lol.

-kristen-

it was adorable i loved it a couple more turns that would make for a corny movie but a wonderful story as it is thanks for the grat read!

Very good so far! I really like it!