i love this story you did a good job writing this story

I had i feeling this story was heading for a crossover. not a major one but one smaller then small. I sea it is Ah! My Goddess hint there. or maybe it is both with the hint of Sailor Moon and Ah! Mt Goddess in it.

Overall, this was pretty good, though it moved to fast in some places. Good work.

I'm not one for Romance stories, though I have to admit this is an awesome fic! This Fic has 'Eternally' changed my outlook on Romance stories

The reader skims a few lines, gaining a quick understanding of what is going on in the story. Suddenly, he reaches the end of the story.

"Oh, that was so cute!" he exclaimed. "Kind of a weird story, in its own way."

#Reader's flashback#

The story begins uninterestingly, with a premise that seems dauntingly familiar, for some reason. Cautiously, Laqjr continues to read the story anyway.

After reading a few paragraphs, Laqjr finds that the author has a very interesting perspective on the situation, though not entirely new to him.

#End Reader's flashback#

The story had held some kind of magic behind its words, captivating Laqjr in his trials and efforts to complete the story in the time between his classes.

#Reader's flashback#

A 'new' plot twist has manifested itself in the reading. The story is so filled with familiar ideas and scenes, that Laqjr wonders if he read this story before.

But no, it could not be so. The fic which Laqjr thinks of is not an OMG crossover. He continues to read, predicting in his mind all the while a certain suspected plot twist...

As expected, the plot twist occurs, somewhat midway through the story - chapter 10 out of 20. Laqjr continues reading, wondering breifly at the outcome of the story.

#End Reader's flashback#

The ending was not too terrible, and had a small portion of a waffy fealing to it. After some time, though, the story spun almost exclusively OMG, which disappointed the reader somewhat. Laqjr looks forward to this author's next story, and hopes it comes out soon.

_ -Laqjr

WOW!

Well that wasn't a bad Ranma fic although for more than a few chapters it seemed like you did alot of Ranma bashing but then later on it proves to be wrong. I just love stories that work out in the end...well sort of. Umm there were more than a few spelling errors here and a fair share of umm grammer errors some of which could be caught in a word processor some of which could be corrected by a good prereader. Any way I loved the tie into Ah! My Goddess. There was a bit of confusion when you started bringing in the flash backs from 1500 years ago in the story but again thats something that worked out and explained later, you did a great job at this. Umm oh yeah other than your chapters being a bit short, some of which could have been tied together, it was a great story. I hope you don't listen to some of the bad reviews your story got because people like this Ranma guy and Kanjumiko don't know what they are talking about. Any way great job and...

Have a nice day :)

...ok you threw me for a loop there you had me freaken fooled for what 11 chapters...sorry.

well you are still a long ways away from redeeming yourself for earlier problems but so far you are doing a good job towards it.

Well at least you some what redeemed yourself by killing shampoo.

I hope that wasn't Ranma you were refering to as the "bad guy"...

Why am I not surprised to see even more hate for Ranma from you. It is very clear you hate Ranma for some damn reason and it pisses me right off. I know this has been writen for a while I am just sorry I didn't get to this before you finished it maybe some one hitting you with the cold hard truth would have snapped you out of this stupid trend you started.

Well the story idea is a bit odd but not bad my only problem is WHY THE FUCK DO YOU CONSTENTLY BASH FUCKEN RANMA! I mean come on you little prick all you have done is have the other characters move on with their lives and bitch about Ranma for causing all their problems. Hell you don't even fucken go into what the fuck Ranma had to fucken go through the whole damn time. Ya think he would actually want to marry the fucking bitch Shampoo? HELL NO! Ranma's only intrest in her was for a cure. And you have fucken Ranma FUCK HER! Now I can let that part by but the other things HELL FUCKING NO! you made a mockery of the Ranma characters with some of what you did. I mean for one thing Ranma would never fuck that china bitch because he had no intrest in her same as Ukyo yeah they were friends but he wouldn't fuck her. Nor would he Akane until they where married. You have no fucking class or tallent, and deffinetly no grip on the Ranma series.

KAWAII DES NE! Aw that is...oh! *cries* Beautiful, u r the most talented author I have ever seen!

Sorry, this story just didn't do it for me. The chapters were too short, and failed to contain enough of a empathic connection. By this I mean no one ever thinks about things and _why_ they matter to them - you just give cursory descriptions lacking in emotional depth. Also didn't like how you gave away the ending at the bottom of prologue. Plus using other anime names for new characters... ugh. Ranma also seems emotionally immature given the time passed and life experiences which occur over such a period. I'm pretty sure Nodoka would have acted somehow in the beginning, and you never even mentioned her. After all, her son got someone pregnant, how manly.