Wow, a Willis fic, and an awesome one at that.

I've always been a big fan of Willis, and I'm glad that he's getting the attention he deserves. I also like how you portrayed the other DigiDestined later on (though I can't help but wonder what happened to Iori and the foreign DigiDestined)

Speaking of the internationals, nice touch bringing them into the story. No one ever uses them, including myself. It was funny how Yuri was confused by some of Willis's American talk XD. I especially like how Rosa was handled.

I also love your descriptions and the flow of the plot. It was all very smooth and detailed, though the plot felt slightly rushed in the last chapter. It was also neat how you used Gennai's clone, I never thought of it liek that but it makes sense. And the decision that Willis made in the end...it makes perfect sense, though it is sad.

Extra kudos for the OCs, especially Sariel. They were well developed and believeable, unlike the OCs in many stories.

Cya!

It WILLIS not Wallace so fix it up

Okay, I know you posted this the other day, but I forgot to comment.
You already know I think the ending is great. It made me cry a little bit at the end. So sad, but so hopeful. I love it
Sois, you must write more. I demand it! :O

Wow. It took a long time for this to come out, but it was well worth the wait. Throughout the whole thing, you kept us all guessing on what was going to happen, never truly revealing your hand. A little more depth on Gennai and his clones and a little explanation on what happened to the other Chosen (especially the Internationals and an answer to the somewhat nagging question of whether or not Iori died) would have been nice, but this was written mostly from the perspective of Sariel and Wallace, so I understand that. And Sariel's comment at the end was lovely, but it makes me wonder if she's dying herself. Odd, but beautiful.
Wonderful story. I'm glad to see such a spectacular end to what's probably the only good Wallace fic out there to my knowledge.
My Grade? A

I can't believe I forgot to leave comments on this chapter earlier. Well, you know I read it, and I just read it again so it was fresh in my head for reviewing.

This was a very good chapter. The suspense built up really well all the way through the last half of the chapter, and I think you ended it nicely-er, evilly. I can't wait to see the resolution in the next chapter. I'm dying to know what's going to happen. No, really. I have teh SARS and if you don't write fast enough, I might die before you finish. :B

An amazing story... is Milleniumon behind any of this... I think he is...

Whoa! Whoo! What a great chapter! Aw man, that was great with Wallace as the Kaiser. And Oikawa has to be Butterfly. (Why didn't I see that before? Oikawa became a bunch of butterflies? And why didn't I see it with the "G" too? Argh! Akino wa baka!)

That thing with Hikari and Miyako was incredible! I never would have suspected them. And poor Daisuke-kun. I hope he'll be okay. But for the time, I have a good reason to think of Minamoto Kouji beating the crap out of Yagami Hikari. So much for the Crest of Light!

Oh, that was such a great chapter. Nice ending to a bad day. I thank you for making my day at least bearable.

Great chapter, and I can't wait to see the next!

This fic is good, and getting more interesting by the chapter. / You stole, however, my "Captain Butterfly" title. I shouldn't of put off reading this like I had, but now that I have read it, I'm kicking myself. And so am I.

We like your story.

Whoo! You don't have any idea how long I've been waiting for this! This is just like Pretender!

Now that they have Ken, I wonder what's going to happen next. And is Iori still alive after the explosion? I hope Wallace can complete his mission without any casualties. Keep going!

Sweet Lord Jesus H. Christ on a pretty pink tricycle. You did it again. You know I've been waiting forever for you to finish this chapter, and by all means, you did NOT disappoint. It was very well written. And the end... I can't believe you did that to me! AGAIN! Augh, cliff-hangers. Well, I guess if I could wait to see what happened to Wallace in this chapter, I can wait to see what happens in the next chapter.

I know you have work and are busy and stuff, but I hope you won't give up on Peregrine. It's a really good story, and I love it.

My favorite line from this chapter: "Damned teenagers! Get out of here! No making out in the back of a RADIO SHACK!"

A very nice mixture of humor, seriousness, action, and suspense. (Lots of suspense at the end :P). I love it. Keep up the great work!

I read this when it originally came out and never commented (bad, bad Riah-chan!) I really like several things about things story... 1- It's a Wallace story and I love Wallace. 2- You were very accurate in your portrayals of Las Vegas (I was born and raised here so I'm pretty particular about it's portrayal.) And 3- (this is more unnerving than anything but) my name is Sariah and I live in Las Vegas... I felt weird after reading chapter 4.

Looking forward to the next chapter!

Riah-chan

Definitely the best Willis/Wallace fic I've ever read in my entire life. _ And I wholeheartedly agree on the fact that he's ignored too much - heck, Michael makes more of an appearence in fandom (not series); if only for a bashing purpose. People seemed to have entirely forgotten the creator of Diaboromon/Diablomon, the owner of the only two twin Digimon, and the young blond star of the third Digimon movie. I'm glad you've taken the initiative and written something about him - he really deserves it.

Though, I probably would've liked this even more if Lopmon & Terriermon got to join Willis on his journey (and why not? It's just the three of them, and they're the best friends he has - even more than Davis/Daisuke and the others), but I guess I'm just a sucker for twin Digimon brotherly stuff (I'm pretty sure that Lopmon's a guy. He was referred to as 'brother' when Terriermon described Kokomon/Chocomon. Now, unless he's a Digimon that changes gender when he evolves into Lopmon and back again as Endigmon - which is a rather perverse thought I'd rather NOT entertain - I'm pretty sure he's a guy, and a COMPLETELY different Lopmon than Susie's, which I STILL believe was female because her trainer is. Even Antiramon/Antylamon was drawn differently than its card...perhaps to suit the 'cute bunny' image better?).

Ok, going off topic here - anyhow, this was superbly written, with actual grammar & spelling to boot. _ Definitely one I'd keep a lookout on for Willis fics. Very nice job!

yeah - go wallace fics - the dude can do no worng. this is an absoulutly awseme fic, very well written and is one of the best things i have read on the site in a while. i look forward to more.

Akino: *best Sydney (from Pretender) voice* It seems our precious Iori and Yuri are evil, and they have attacked Wallace. Also, despite the loss of my precious Takari, I seem to detect a trace of Kensuke and Kenyako. I hope Wallace can save everyone. And I wonder what Project G is. Parker?

Gatomon: *in best Miss Parker voice* What, Akino?

Akino: *voice from before* We need to research this Project G.

Gatomon: *still Parker's voice* What are you telling me for?

Akino: *same voice* You're the one with access to all the top secret Hypnos files.

YOU ARE EVIL!

Of course, there's me, who a couple of days ago suggested that if chapter 3 was beginning to become too long, you could split it up into two chapters and add a cliff hanger to the end of chapter 3. Me and my big, big mouth. Augh. ;_;

Let's see. I liked the e-mail at and "no such address exists" part. The end is very EVIL, but also very well written. Poor Wallace. I hope he doesn't wake up in some scary weird evil place. Who would save him, then? ;_;

You MUST write more. Especially after that EVIL CLIFFHANGER!

Love,

Marron