YAY!! *dances* Jah... I came up wit' Volcanians and Kat and me use 'em all th' time. I love the 'Nicking' I fell out of my chair... again. Well, it seems like a habit fer me. Ilike the kid though. ^_^

Sorry 'bout not reading for a while. Have been mucho busy. And I got two more chapters up on my part. Um... I got a little confused at the part where the commander looked at Pike pointed to Kit and Skim talked... I figured it out though (I think) Anyways, I really like you're story and hope it keeps going. ^_^ I gotta read yer other one.
Sond

lol...this is a good story. Continue when you can!

Right. Same old, same old, good job, pat on the back, here's your fortune cookie and whatnot...

's getting interesting now. All ready to have a big war, strange creatures in caverns, and a scribe's assistant in leather armor.

I'll check back in a week/month/year and see if you've updated.

Right. Same old, same old, good job, pat on the back, here's your fortune cookie and whatnot...

's getting interesting now. All ready to have a big war, strange creatures in caverns, and a scribe's assistant in leather armor.

I'll check back in a week/month/year and see if you've updated.

Another happy chappy (heh heh, it rhymes)...

Just out of curiosity, what the hey's and Armor Sentinal!?! What's an "Elite Guard"!?!

And assassins...I wouldn't think Hyrule would use assassins...cuz...they're all, like, noble and stuff. With knights. AND nights. And sages...

But oh well.

Um, I'd just like to say I'm afraid...little men with swivel chairs, and baritones with black armor and gold trim...

Humorous, yes. Crazy? Yes. Nice job?

Yes.

Well, I think that I found one or two mistakes with you missing 's at the end of a couple words. And sometimes the order of how you put words were confusing. I'm not being mean, am I? I hope not. I just thought you would want to know.

I really like how you put Draeb in there. I fell over laughing pretty hard at that one. Of course I shouldn't fall over if I have mono.

Anyways, I really like how you did the Assume thing. Of course naturally I fell over laughing once again. (A common thing on my part).

Well, I'm off to work on chapter 6 and to read the next chapter. Talk to you another time!
Sondilyn

I found one or two errors in spelling, though I don't remember where they were. It would help a bit if you put something between where one story stops and ends. Like if you go from something about Skim and then to say Pike. Put something between that so it isn't as confusing. I meant to say that earlier but I forgot...bad memory. Anywho, other than that I really like how it is coming along.
Sondilyn ^_^

I love poes. ^____^ I like Pike too...he has the wheelie chair guys. That makes most of the comic releif. ^_^. I'm gonna keep reading.
Sondilyn ^_^

Wow! The return of the swivel chairs! I love. Anyways, I like the flowsteel and Rej. I think poes are my favorite monster in the game. Therefore there is Draeb...^_^; I gotta read more!
Sondilyn ^_^

I like the description and the little men in swivel chairs! ^_____^ I fell over laughing. I like the Lizaflos and their blood.
Sondilyn

WHOO! The review works now! I couldn't get it up before... Anyways... I got a bit confused with Dagger and Skim... still am... but I really like the cuccos! ^_^ Well, I'm off to read more! Bye!
Sondilyn ^_^

Ohhh...SCRIBES!!! I like how there are two different kinds! I'm gonna read more! That and I have to find time to read the Pokemon one you have ^_^!
Sondilyn

Ne, some of the story was confusing in the begining...I have no idea who Dagger is/was O.o
I have no idea what Pike looks like. In future chapters, try to distinguish Pike from his body control...ok, that kinda sounded strange ^^; But I think the little people are funny. Rej is my favorite character so far ^^
I dunno if I helped or not, I think I confused myself...I want to finish this story!

Ack, one thing right away...I don't wanna take credit for the Volcanians, that is all © to Sond. Sond! *surrounds Sond in flashy lights* Woop. Jus' making that clear ^_^

Now, for comments...

-Pike's a bit...er...slow, eh? Not that that wasn't established in earlier chapters. This just kind of clinches it.

-Good idea on the leather armor. No Goron Tunics anymore, after all.

-A wild boar with a sore throat? Interesting analogy. Always though Poe voices were reedy, though you did mention Rej's being a bit deeper than most.

-'the motley,' nice name for the group in general ^_^

-Hehe, Volcanian pickpocket! Yes, some of them are rather good at that...

-"Nicking!" That's SO great...*falls over laughing* They WOULD call it that, too...Kudos for crazy accents! I loves crazy accents.

-Ooh, an Ocarina...gray one. Is it the Fairy Ocarina? Is it? Is it?

-Ooh, I liked the scary interlude, vague as it was. But vagueness can lead to its mystery. You've got me wondering, anyway. Just who is 'Maw,' and 'Eire?'

-Woah! Lon Lon's hit the Industrial Revolution! Must be Terminean influence, they seem aboard on the whole 'technology' thing, what with the clocks and the cameras and so on...

-Pike is funny. Haha.

-"One mooed softly at Skim, who politely returned the greeting." ...Skim speaks cow?

-He's playing the Song of Storms! Kudos on being able to describe musical notes in words. It's a difficult thing to do.

-Heheh...Kit seems a bit grumpy.

Ack. Good chapter, mom wants me off the phone!