Um...lets do a check

1) Perverted Shinji

2) Insane Asuka

3) Out of Character Rei

4) Out of Character Misato

5) Out of Character Gendo

like So Happy Togethers later chapters. I don' know what show you watched but if you think you're characterization in accurate you're on crack.

I'm all for a good shinji/Rei fic but this isn't one. Asuka wouldn't try to rape shinji. Shinji isn't a massive pervert. Rei is WAY...and i really mean it ,WAY off character.

I don't even want to get started on what the heck you did wrong with Gendo.

try to improve, you have a good style of writing its just WHAT you write need to be better

Somebody's little red wagon just lost a wheel! Or two. Or six. Asking myself whether Asuka's insanity would carry such a hypersexual charge I get only one answer: does it even matter considering that I can't fault you stylistically? That seduction episode is painful to read but it's superbly written: tough, taut and vivid. Your depiction of Asuka in previous chapters convinced me that you were capable of doing something spectacular with her descent into madness and that it was only a matter of waiting to discover exactly what you had in store. Strong stuff. Shinji and Rei's budding romance is really well done too; sexually aware but sensitively handled and with a touching quality of awkwardness underpinning their actions. I don't know what you have planned for future instalments but I'm ready to bet that it'll be utterly compulsive.

Great story so far! I'm a HUGE Rei fan...and Shinji-kun is just so endearing! what with his flushing at calling her Rei-chan and all...How I await the day when he finally forgets about the honorific suffixes altogether can call her plain Rei like Gendou-kun dese. Hey I'm a Gendou fan, so I get to call him that. MUAhahaha. (...actually I just like calling him that because I am, in real life, going out with sb like him...*ahem* anyways!) eagerly awaiting the next installment. ) and please make the lemon parts romantic and not hentai. Onegai shimasu! ..

Im liking this fic more and more!

Okay, where do i start? OOCness is OFF THE WALL. Shinji too brave, Rei too emotional, and Gendo feels. Regardless of the fact you are the omnipotent author and the fact that you know what they think, DON'T TELL US. By telling us how each character you have effectively turned this into a bad fic. I don't want to know that Rei was secretly hoping Shinji would stay, or Gendo thinking outloud that Rei was his "little girl." By allowing Rei to live and reject Gendo's demands, you have destroyed 3I, which is the central plot to the Eva story. Now you can just slap in different names and do a little tweak and it will all be original fic. If you were to do a good story, make sure you pick whose perpective. By trying to portray all, you are treading into dangerous grounds.

shut up mother

love that line

It's short. You might consider merging these three chapters to form one. Far from hurting the fic, I think it'd enhance the developing tension. I'm also curious about your treatment of that lovable scamp Gendo. He seems unusually benign. With that said, it's a pleasure to see spelling, grammar and concision so scrupulously handled. Bash on, BloodyAngel!

This is a really great story, cant wait for the rest of it.

Nice story but it looks like you are going to have to tone it down if you are going to continue I suggest you drop the rateing to an R.

Not bad, but a bit confusing. You stated that the fic splits up from original NGE in the battle with the seventh, but it begins with the battle against the 16th. I assume that an explanation for that comes in the next chapters.

The story itself looks not bad, and the idea is original.

And for the rating: The plot of a story is far more important than some rushed sex-scenes. For those who like plotless lemons are already existing enough stories out there.

So, there is no need to rush things, good character-developing is very important to write a good fic. And if that means that there are some chapters without lemon-scene, it's no problem.

I await the next chapters. Greetings.

Nice start to the story. I be wondering at where this goes (like your other story...sorry about little Videl getting the hots for little Videl...I'm an idiot...haha). Anyway, I'll be watching.

Well, keeping the second advent of Rei alive was exactly the very same thing I'd start rebuilding Evangelion from. It is nise to see yet another writer not without a spark of talent and with sufficient decency to spellcheck. I just hope you'll keep writing, as it looks quite promising. And to hell with the redhead. Rei deserves more. Just don't forget to make her reveal her origins. As for the lemons, please, keep them IC. Which means, no "His stiff member grew as hard as the progressive knife of his Eva as he violently pierced her maidenhood" - that'd be ridiculous. Remember: Rei wants to be loved, Asuka wants to be laid. Not vice versa. I wish you luck on your work.

Get the next chapter up! QUICK! REI WANTS ME!