Great story!

this was an awesome story. it actually make me like frank which is a good thing i guess. are you going to add more to this story or possibly a sequel?

I really loved this story. I've always wondered how Jamie would handle being in the future. Very good writing. Good job!

good fic

I liked it. It was sweet, and gave a good display of both Jamie and Claire's personalities.

Yay! aw.

very good but I wish it were longer.

"His relationship with Black Jack Randall had not been a good one; in fact it had been ugly and disgusting."?

I like AU, but your story's a bit too simplistic, and doesn't even attempt to explain itself. Obviously you're not trying to write like Diana Gabaldon... just about her characters? Whatever. I say keep the concept, kill the story.

I liked this version of the saga but am confused about what it is, is it a book on it's own or just an idea of something she is thinking about. if it is a book in itself i want it. i would prefur her to work on the sequel to snow and ashes. I don't think this is her usual writing, jamie doesn't speak with slang. sharon

Fantastic story! I loved it!

Nice concept. I think we all secretly wish Jamie could have gone back with Claire to see his child born. I don't think she would be quite that mean to Frank though, I think there would be quite a problem with that situation seeing as how her feelings for Frank would still be there, she still cared a great deal for him even though she chose Jamie.I would work a bit on the accents- the scottish and English feel are lacking a bit, Nice attempt though and entertaining to read. Thanks!

I liked this one!

I'm afraid to say I didn't think this was much of a story. It seemed as if you were writing "The Jamie and Claire Story: compressed to under a thousand words." This was devoid of any character description, setting, or plausible plot. While some ideas, such as Claire and Jamie being able to use their old coins and Claire inquiring about a possibly hysterectomy, were quite good, I feel you missed the essence of the characters. Claire is a decent person and would not have treated Frank that way, yes, she would have been frank, but she would not be indifferent to his feelings; she loved him for years. The abrupt dialogue and changes in scene did not allow for you to develop Claire into the person you obviously see her as. This "story" seemed more like a re-telling of a Friday night out with the girls over the phone than a true attempt at writing. Hopefully you'll look towards improving your future writing.

The story line was good but short. You needed to fill in some of the blanks. Add some drama.

As for some of the other reviews, I also think Jamie would have kept his Scottish accent. He may have picked up some slang from the 1940s and 50s though, but adults rarely lose their accents. Besides the accent is part of what defines him. We love it!

Brianna was pronounced BREANNA with the accent on the BRE. I don't recall if it was pointed out in the book. If not it may have been the Outlandish Companion.

As far as Jamie going through the stones or traveling forwards rather than backwards - this is fiction. And that is what's known as creative license. As long as you make it interesting enough you can take a story anywhere. Look what Diana did.

ermm i enjoyed it but i was just wondering how old brianna was when brian was born and also your story is a bit confusing but i enjoyed it alot good luck in the future