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marisol
2006-05-21
ch 1, anon.
abuseHi, I'm marisol and I own and operate Amortentia{DOT}Org (
Possum132
2005-10-25
ch 7,
abuseWhat a delightful, convincing story of Filch's youth at Hogwarts.
erosgirl
2005-02-02
ch 7,
abuse"It's spring. You'll understand soon enough." Hahahaha. I laughed at that one.

I LOVE this story! Exquisite, masterfully written with emotion and reality that (nearly) replicates that of J.K. Rowling. Magnificent!

(It's fun to be a critic.)
CookieJunkie
2004-12-31
ch 7,
abuseThat was wonderful! You've managed to make me like Filch a lot more! Well done!
icanreadncount
2004-01-23
ch 7,
abuseAw, that's a cute story! You have an interesting view of the HP stories, I never would have thought of Filch as a candidate for a story to write about. But, everyone gets their day!
Aristophanes1
2003-12-05
ch 7,
abuseI love this fic! Your Hagrid was excellent, very, very, in character, and of course, Filch was wonderful to read about. We really don't see enough of him in fanfiction!
The last chapter was so much fun, too. I especially liked the part when Filch was trying to convince the unicorn to heal Mrs. Gerrity. And the bond between man and cat was so cute! I have a cat. :)
RavenLady
2003-10-16
ch 7,
abuseYou write characters and emotions so well . . . I don't know whether to laugh or cry. This is an amazing story.
oolagirl
2003-09-20
ch 1,
abusethe"z story's "R" SO cool. thank you



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rosemage
2003-08-09
ch 7, anon.
abuseFilch would get attached to the meanest, most unsocial cat around. I guess Mrs. Gerrity is Mrs. Norris' grandmother or great-grandmother? Filch and Hagrid's conversations are funny.
Feronia
2003-08-09
ch 1,
abuseI've only read the first chapter so far, but already I really like this story! Very, very well written, and making use of one of the less often used characters! This is great. You have made Filch very believable! I'm definitely going to read to the end.
Moriel Malkin
2003-08-06
ch 7,
abuseLovely story!
Found your stories by way of Jinx and Rabbits page.
I'm reading your stories in the 'order' you recommend on your author page, and i'm looking forward to seeing what you do with Olive Hornby, if you include her at all- I Play Olive/ Olivia Hornby over at the Livejournal RPG community "Lightningwar".

Love your story so far!
MD
2003-07-03
ch 2, anon.
abuseI saw your squib fics recommended over at fiction alley park and I must say they are very original and you have taken a great deal of effort to follow canon. It’s always nice to give minor characters the back story they deserve, and even better still to make a ‘bad’ guy more three dimensional by giving them real feelings and motives. You have done both of these things enviably well. In detail I particularly liked:

-The character voice and speech patterns that you gave Browly – they fitted in with canon wonderfully! And the way she changed from subservient with her masters to accusing with the ghost.

-The way you’ve given Filch a reason to want to be at Hogwarts.

-The way you’ve shown that Filch has learnt from Pringle that corporal punishment is the best way to keep children under control.

-The way you’ve given Filch decent reasons to dislike Hogwarts students and Peeves.

-The research you’ve done on poltergeists. That’s a very interesting theory and it makes sense.

-The way you’ve given both Filch and Pringle redeeming qualities. Filch is honest, shy, sympathetic and good at heart. Pringle does what he thinks is best even if he thinks he has to be cruel to be kind and harsh to be deterring and he’s also strong and cunning.

-The character faults you’ve given your characters. Filch is weak, clumsy, shy and awkward while Hagrid is assuming, rash and underestimates the danger of animals. Pringle is cruel, grouchy and ill, etc.

-Peeves character voice. It sounds like him.

Criticisms:

- I think Filch throws up too easily at times, and too often.

-McGonagall is significantly older than Filch and I get the feeling that Filch is a lot older than Hagrid. So I don’t think McGonagall would have looked that young, even then. They live longer in the HP world.

Overall I’ve enjoyed reading this fic and I it’s good to see Filch as a more three dimensional character.
SinhoBadaro
2003-05-28
ch 7,
abuseI love the way you write cats! I could clearly see Miss Gerrity in my mind's eye as I read the story. Even before I read your stories of Filch I thought that the man must have a soft spot in his heart - loving a cat demands that!
Alchemine
2003-05-26
ch 7,
abuseHi!

Lovely chapter, as always. I felt so sorry for Miss Gerrity, and for Filch, as he tried desperately to save her. His interaction with Hagrid was great ("can't take yeh anywhere" - LOL) and I loved his plea to the unicorn.

It's a wonder poor Pringle hasn't had a stroke by now with all the worry Filch puts him through. Somehow you manage to make me sympathize with him, even if he is a foul-tempered man who beats Filch and the students. Good thing Dumbledore is there to balance him out.

The last line of the chapter really made me smile. Thus begins Filch's ongoing problem with feline breeding habits!
Bridgie
2003-05-25
ch 7,
abuseOkay, to me this chapter absolutely epitomizes what makes your work so appealing. I'm not sure where to begin...I think all your work has a pervasive feeling of love for humanity, particularly in your treatment of Filch. He's human; he has noble and ignoble characteristics. Here he reacts with fear to the acromantula Hagrid has sent to help him, he is somewhat less than polite to the unicorn, he disobeys his master, he's terrified in the forest, BUT his love for this grouchy little stray Kneazle keeps him going. Through his eyes, you make your readers really want Miss Gerrity to make it.
Hagrid, as well, comes across beautifully here, at home in the forest and sympathetic to Filch and Miss Gerrity. Even Mr. Pringle, who the readers have less cause to sympathize with since he punishes Filch pretty harshly here, comes across as someone who genuinely cares for young Argus.
And you've managed to do all this without glossing over the fact that evil does, in fact, exist here. The mangled state of poor Miss Gerrity when Filch finds her is a powerful image. But she survives after all, as does Filch. Good triumphs.
I could ramble on some more here, but I think I'll take it to your livejournal. Suffice to say, I think this is my favorite chapter of any story you've written yet.
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