lskdafkjdshg. dang.

beautiful :( very sad.

Obviously this is incredibly AU, but Frayed Misfit put this in the Character Sketches archive, and I thought I'd check it out.

Your imagery is amazing. =D It's sensual, and everything seems so real, and I almost felt as though my tongue was being ripped out (which is horrible, but a definite testament to your ability as an author).

Great work.

Good christ, that was wonderful.

Why?
so.. beautiful yet.. deadly. so...dark tinted with the soft fingers of sorrow and death,... slowly tightening

Oh, so bitter and well done.

It's haunting yet... beautiful, in a way.

I like it. Rather deep and interestingly put. Sent a bit of a chill to me. Your grammar was also good.

Silence is the most deadliest of poisons anywhere

You have a way with words that many people would aspire to have. There isnt much I can say that has not already been. How do you fit emotions into words. I cant even explain why I love this sotry.

Ha ha ha, you named it after a smashing pumpkins song?

'So you dare me to push you? So I dare you to jump.'

Dear god, this was utterly horrifying, but the language was beautiful. I think it could have been better if it were a little longer, a little more fleshed out, but it's still a perfect vignette. I loved it.

As a child she used to spend the summer evenings in her father's garden of the hypnotized roses, counting the falling stars under a sky of ink black. These summer evenings she counts the falling men but has no tongue to make a wish.
Brilliant transition.
She is still standing there when the morning sun spreads in the grey sky like a punctured egg yolk. The wind comes up behind her, wearing a blue cape, bringing a scent of summer, anise and sesame. It says: 'So you dare me to push you? So I dare you to jump.'
I really have no words.

really really really good. scary, freaky even, but awesome. it's a lot like Mad_maudlin_42's story "Fuel" which is better if that is possible. hee hee i love Narcissa.

Its not sweet. Its angry and gothic and grating and hateful and snarling and viscious...
And I love it.