chapter 8,9
As Bill would say....YEEEEEHAAA![or something like that] I don't know what makes me like him, I just do---I think it's his voice... And your characterization of him here is right on target.

Mya really sparks my interest too. She's really not the type to back down is she?

I've probably said this before but it's one cool story. Looks like an enemy's lurking.... I eagerly anticipate the continuation.

Hmm, an interesting development for those characters... It actually works quite well (I always find scenes not involving operations or combat difficult, at best) since they say that when people fight, it's because they care about each other... or something like that.
Anyway, to the point, I think this goes further with the characters, and the scenes involving Venomian characters are always welcome, building suspense as they do.
I'm also guilty of jam-packing my stories with characters- but it's been proven by the greats that plenty of main characters can also be a good thing. I like it- keeps the show from being a one-hero-saviour-of-the-galaxy thing. Keep plugging away at it!

Now this chapter was a nice break from the usual--good characterization on this one especially, but one thing I've learned is not to load a fic with too many characters or people get lost in what's happening. Try sticking with just a few [or even bring it down to one---hard as that is for me I don't know how I dare advise anyone else^^] Anyhow, limit the POVs at first then the others will come naturally as the story moves along. This is still one of the coolest stories here!

Hey, I'm still reading it (despite a comlete absence from the internet for a while).
The story so far has been pretty great, and I especially like what you're doing with the characters, going into their lives and such. Keep it up!

Again, nicely done. I must be keeping up with this more than any other here((well except one))because it really is well-written, not cluttered with unneccessary garble and such--like mine^^;..and just a note: I'm an Air Force brat so I give you a definite thumbs up for finding time to write, especially these days.

You've got a nice story going on so far. Try to work on a bit of charetor descripion, though.

Well edited and paced! The characterization is great, the dialoge does what it's supposed to do instead of being pointless fluff, giving a good idea of who Keeve and James are. What's 'Fur-made'? Abundant sheilding is a weakness? Do your expiriences in USAF go into this?

That's a good piece of work, Ginny! I see you also have a fascination with Husky Squadron- and you too have read the Rogue Squadron novels. It's nice to read your style. Keep it up!

Yes! You're continuing!*claps* Please keep going, It's good and so far I haven't found much on Bill in other stories. I'd like seeing something develop and unfold around his character for a change.

(sorry I had to 'unpost' mine, my interest fell off somewhere after the 5th chapter and pretty much died out afterwards, so I'm doing a rewrite)

This story has lots of potential! [in hopes the author will return to finish]. What a tragic ending for that pilot. I'd love to read more on the relationship between James and Keeve.

Hmmmm....... Pretty good. I like it! Well, I noticed something in this story. Keeve is good at basketball, right? Well, Keeve Bryant= Kobe Bryant. Are you a fan of Basketball?

A Good chapter again! Try Reading my starfox stories.

I wanted to review this earlier but got interrupted--It's really good, love the style and pace of it. Hope to see more!

Good story. I know what you mean when you play the starfox adventures demo, I play it alot to and am looking foreward to buying it. Well write more.