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| Heian Edenwood 2007-09-30 ch 1,  | abuseHowdy. =) First things first, I'd like to say that I like your ideas. Just a little comment (not to bring you down, but to try and help you improve): You need to work a lot more on your description and detail. Right now, you're kinda narrating... so yeah. It kind of lacks the emotional depth that you could actually have potrayed (since i'm sure that it's within your ability). You need to show what's in your mind. Not tell. I'm kinda disappointed with it... since you don't quite seem to be showing your fullest potential. Looking on the bright side, your latest story is quite interesting. It's an improvement there. ;) |
| raindropsX 2007-02-24 ch 1, | abuseomg aww. i think i have already read and reviewed for this story but i can't remember. so anyway i am just saying that i loved this story. |
| Kit Thespian 2006-12-23 ch 1, | abuseAww, that was so very sweet! Squall can so awesome sometimes! No, it wasn't too mushy. It was very thoughtful. |
| viiruz 2006-06-28 ch 1, | abuseOMG! That was so sweet! ^^ Keep up with the writing. :P |
| Jayliyah 2005-10-23 ch 1, | abuseWow! This was so sweet! Aw! I couldn't stop smiling after I read this. Although it was short, you still made it romantic and mushy, which I like. |
| Midnight Cinderella 2005-04-26 ch 1, | abuseWow...if a guy would propose to me "ON AIR", I'm even going to have the strength to pick up the phone! This one's nice! I like it! |
| Mika 2004-12-29 ch 1, anon. | abuseaw if a guy did this to me i'll never let him go! *squeals!* |
| Iain R. M. 2004-05-17 ch 1, anon. | abuseI LOVE ALL SQUINOAS! Yeah for this fic! |
| forgivenpast 2004-04-22 ch 1, | abuseE! *Squeals* Omigod...that was so sweet! Squall's love for Rinoa is SO strong...^^ It wasn't too mushy. *Pauses* Well, maybe it was, but in my opinion, the mushier, the better! Heehee! ^-^ I wuvles this fic! |
| Griffin Knight 2004-03-17 ch 1, | abusethis was INSANE! god I can't believe that he proposed over a radio. that caught me off guard well more squinoa plz! |
| Almasy11 2003-10-29 ch 1, | abuseThis is a good story, though like the others, the thought of Squall singing is a bit funny, anyway the thing you said about it being mushy, who cares if it's mushy, I mean come on really, I kind've like mushy storys. Anyway, great job |
| chibi-san 2003-08-04 ch 1, | abuse*sobs* that was so sweet ;_; |
| Lovely Angel 2003-08-04 ch 1, anon. | abuse::Crying uncontrollably:: THAT-WAS-GOOD~!~ I love the song Anchor!! I listened to it while I was reading this ficcy!! Twas good!! |
| Ashbear 2003-03-21 ch 1, | abuseI don’t suppose the thought of Squall singing should have made me laugh…but darn it, I couldn’t help myself! Anyway, cute story and the song fit perfectly. Sap and mush can be good in a world where it is rare, and I think that’s why we all come here sometimes… Keep it up! |
| RPG-Adam 2003-03-13 ch 1, | abuseNot bad..praposed again but not bad |