Poor Asha, she just can't catch a break, can she. Nice reworking of DT. I enjoyed very much looking at it from the opposite POV - Asha's that is. I'm so glad you finally finished this. Well done. :)

Sorry to see this come to an end and have Asha fade back into oblivion. Maybe you'll revisit her sometime. Hope so.

Good job of emphasizing at the end how Max and Logan ignored Asha. I kind of expected a little more introspection wherein Asha realized she was being booted out of Logan's life (at least romantically) because of Max, to be honest; that part seems to go by rather quickly. Still, it's true to character that she would mourn the relationship in the hallway. Good job showing the meeting between Max and Asha--some suspicion and jealousy on Max's part, but quickly she puts Logan's welfare first. I can only imagine what it's like for Asha to be seeing in the flesh this woman that she's heard about and seen only in photographs.

Thanks for writing this story. It was good and I really enjoyed reading it.

Great story. Bittersweet, even if we all knew how it had to end for Asha. I liked seeing Max through her eyes, that was a great moment. I smiled at the description of Max as "skinny," with "lank hair." I also enjoyed the domesticity.
I very much enjoyed the story, thanks for writing it.

Ahhh, so Logan finally knows what Max went through as a kid. He's had some idea, of course, thanks to what she's told him and what he's seen...but this is the first time he's found out the whole story. Question, though...why would Lydecker tell him *everything*? I know he wants it over, as he said here, but I was guessing he'd keep most of the story to himself and would just give Logan the information he needs to bring Manticore down. Well, maybe it was all necessary, or maybe Lydecker figured there'd be no harm in telling if Manticore was going down. Still, he seems to me to be more the type to keep almost everything secret...just in case.

How would Logan know the pants were comfortable?

--When was the last time you were shot at?
--March, April, something like that.
Heh, this actually made me stop and try to remember when that last time was. Must've been IAIAAC when the hoverdrone had him in its sights.

"At least she had had a few happy times"...and the ones he lists just all happened to involve him. Not at Crash, not with her other friends, just him. Hee hee.

Asha tells Logan he can relax...so he goes and does some work. That's just like him.

Logan finally cries! That's so touching. But is it just me, or did it come on kind of suddenly? His voice hadn't quavered, he wasn't pausing in his speech to think about things, and neither he nor Asha said anything particularly upsetting. I suppose just the word "peace" and the subsequent thought of Max were triggers. At any rate, it's about darn time. Wonder what Asha thought as Logan started crying? Did she know he was thinking about Max? Guess I have to wait to find out. :)

Can't say enough good things about your Asha. She really is shaping up to be an appealing and fascinating character. Great atmosphere in this chapter--can almost smell that salmon cooking. Great to see Lydecker again--at his evil and complex best.

You've created a very interesting feeling in this chapter. Logan seemed detached from the events of the day, dispassionate. His mind and body were doing one thing while his heart was focussed on another. It wasn't until the final sentence that the two converged. His tears at the end were unexpected yet completely appropriate as the stress of the day and the grief of the previous months finally spilled over.

Good chapter, thanks. One of the things I like about Logan's character is that you can use him for a conduit(while he's thinking his deep thoughts) to examine some of the more disturbing aspects of the show. Lydecker seems to have emerged in fanfic as some sort of kindly uncle, perhaps because he started using the phrase "my kids," with respect to the X5s. Personally, I found that totally sick. You don't refer to someone as "my kid," and then shoot him/her and ship him/her off to autopsy. Lydecker was what he was, and that was great--scary & creepy, but great--and I don't like the way his character gets dumbed down in fanfic.
Logan really made a deal with the devil, when he teamed up with Deck, I guess he thought he had nothing left to lose.

Nice work catherder. I like how you've brought Asha out of the wallpaper and turned her into a human being for us, and here she is looking after Logan with a meal. Sweet.

I had to think twice about whether Logan would or would not cry on her shoulder. He's had a hellish year and one helluva bad day. He has cried before - for Nathan Herrero and for Max. I eventually came down on the side that said yes, and he may be able to open himself more to Asha because she isn't so directly involved and she is an old friend.

Well done!!

I'm sorry you had to change your rating to keep the story on FFN. I have always enjoyed this story and you need to finish it soon!

This is still a sexy, bittersweet story.
I don't have the power of total recall, so I'm not sure how much you've changed it. I'm angry you've had to change it at all. FFN is really barking up the wrong tree with this new policy, especially for a site that has the tag line: "Unleash your imagination and free your soul."
I don't quite see how they figure it's the responsibility of a mere venue to censor the very writers it's trying to attract. And this is such a terrific community, too. I've read some great writing here(at least in the realm of DA fandom, anyhow). Sure I've read some stories that made my eyes bleed--in particular I read a misogynist hate crime of an NC17 story over on the Farscape board--but that's my problem. Nobody made my fingers type in NC17, I did that all by my own self, sheesh.
Oh well. This is a great story, as are all of yours, thanks for writing it.