good chapter. not cheesy at all. e-mail me when you update it

moved? i looking for a house. Good Chapter.

good

alittle cunfusing

good chapter kind of weird

i feel so sorry for you feel better. good chapter

mood swings?

Ok that was Vegeta never i repeat NEAVER calls Goku, Goku. Two so funny!

Keep writing! _

Intresting. This has all the elemnts of a humor fic: Trunks and Goten killing something, Goku eating bulma out of house and home, hostile mental takeovers, ect. But it seems to be more dram than anything. Not a bad one, of course. Quite good, in fact.

But of you want to SERIOUSLY boost the caliber of your stories, there's a great way(Geez, I'm begining to sound like an infomercial). Simply Let you chapters stay on your hardrive for a few dats before posting. That way, you have another whole day to edit and mend. I give this advice to all of my fans. It's wjhat makes my fic so great. A beta reader is your best freind(Sometimes, in more ways than one.). Always try to put in as many ideas as possible into your chapters.

Hee! Poor Veggie! Great fic! I'm sorry about your friend. I hope you write another chapter!

I'm really sorry to hear about that. My best guy friend had a friend that just commited sucide last week and he's been going through a hard time too. I know that it must be incredibly hard to deal with and I can't imagine how you feel. Again I'm sorry.

Please write more I am begging my heart out!

I think Vegeta is possesed...again! o.O

Hey...love the stroy but the system seems to be doing what it kept doin to mine...messin up the spacing! You want me to proof it and send you a word doc thing with the spacing fixed? I'd be glad to, I get annoyed when it does it to me!

Lol! Funny story! XD