You DO know you have to continue this Don't ja!

You can't leave this like it is!
No way to know what will happen next how will the family react ... and what Ranma will do!

So continue!

dennisud

I can already see several problems.
The story feels rushed and is severely
lacking in details.

More.. Its an interesting idea.. How happens between Ranma and the Tendos now. Does Kasumi find out. Do the sisters support Ranma's protective streak.

More.. Its an interesting idea.. How happens between Ranma and the Tendos now. Does Kasumi find out. Do the sisters support Ranma's protective streak.

No nareszcie...Nabiki and Ranma rule!This pai i s the best and i hope to see more chapters soon.
Death to Akane that stupid , crazy , unfemine , flat , srewed B.I.T.C.H

Poor Nabiki, she has a hard time keeping up her cold personality front. I like this story because it's well written.

This story has a lot of potential and has a nice beginning. I hope you take your time and don't rush into a romance between Ranma and Nabiki.It's awful when writers have characters indifferent in one chapter and madly in love in the next. I really Love Nabiki centered fics that are well written and hope this will be one of them.
Keep it up! :)

Sorta right about there not actually being a rape, but it wasn't Akane that beat her up... Hmm... Maybe she hired them to do it!!

well at least its not the rape fic i feared it would be, but you need to add more maybe 20 kb a week for us hardcore Nabiki Fans!!!

Chapter one needs something to seperate the paragraphs and make it easier to read, and I agree with some of the others that it probably should be expanded to include such things as the trip, why kasumi and Nabiki where selected to go along instead of Soun and/or Nodoka. Which could be a matter of simply being a treat for the other two daughters sinse they hardly ever get to go anywhere.

Chapter two, while also brief, is a lot easier to read. It is pretty clear what happenned to Nabiki from your presentation, although you might want to set up some more of her day prior to the incident. For example, while she might have been irritated about being cut off from her direct network, do you really think that Nabiki would be along if she wasn't excited about going abroad? Thus the trip would become a dream come true perverted into a nightmare once the incident with the thugs happens.

I myself am looking forward to more of this story. It's really up to you if you want to keep the chapters so short, but they do feel like you are leaving out a lot: Chapter one does indeed seem like a mere premice or synopsis. Chapter two is okay, if too short for my tastes.

I am looking forward to more of this story.

And please ignore the "Oh, not another (insert type here) story" guy. Really, one may as well say "Oh, please not another fanfiction story about whatever subject." What's the point of reading fanfiction if you're going to gripe about somebody exploring themes that have been done before? Sure, I've read a few (insert cast member here) gets raped stories, but they are not all alike. Sure, some are tripe, but others are quite poignant and emotionally moving.

Oh well, have fun, and I hope to see more soon!

^_^

I really like the description of Nabiki letting the blue swallow her. That's an interesting coping device. Post more soon! ^_^

MUST WRITE NEXT CHAPTER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! That was soooooooo good!
-M4Y D3 L33T B3 WITH J00! (I've been reading Megatokyo too much....)

loks a bit shacky of a start but i'll keep reading. N/R are my fav ranma parings!

you must die!!! Please continue this.

Did she really get raped (you're pretty scanty on the details of what actually happened.) My personal theory is Akane didn't get into the art school so she came home and kicked the *** out of Nabiki