You've an amazing talent... I must admit you did a great job on this story.. It seems as if you knew what had exactly happened in Touya's life. I loved your style of writing.. It's so cool.. Your imagination is superb!

Amazing. You got everyone's character down to every little notch, you created a beautiful story about Toya and Kaho. I was absolutely glued to the screen. To top it off, it seems absolutely possible. Great work. Not many Toya/Kaho stories out there, and I'm sure this one blows most if not all of them out of the water.
You'll do great things with your writing skills!

i wasn't about to read this cuz it's about tory but...wow. I'll reconsider my absolute annoyance at my baby sisters now, except they're nothing like sakura (wish they were!) heh heh, excellent depiction of baby sakura and tory, sakura was completely adorable and i wish i could trade off with caitlin (4) for her (wait, i would never do that, she's still my sister!) hehe great story!

Simply beautiful. Thank you for a heartfelt story.

Tella

"Bits and pieces of Japanese?" What a joke; you don't know any, from what you've shown. Just because you use random Japanese words doesn't mean you know the language. If you want to learn it, why don't you go out and study it properly, instead of corrupting your work with (misspelled) Japanese phrases? Either write it in English or write it in Japanese, not "Wapanese." Oh, getting off the point here... Yeah. My point is, you don't know Japanese, get over yourself.

Why does it appear that Touya can sense Woody (in the Sakura trees of chapters 1 and 7) and Watery (in the aquarium in chapter 4), if at this point in the story's timeline all the cards should still be sealed in the Book of Clow? Touya's comment about despising the job of feeding penguins was an aptly inserted touch of ironic humor. i find the moments when Touya cares for Sakura despite his feelings toward her very touching and even cute. As Touya himself says, ' And no one is cuter than Sakura.' i especially like chapter 13: Touya realizing and admitting his love for Sakura is so beautiful; it almost made me cry. That just doesn't happen with stories.

This is one of your best stories, and you're one of the best out there in the CCS fandom. And this definitely deserves more reviews than it has.

This was one very enjoyable, very believable story. If I didn't know any better I would have to say that it was canon and throughout the entire story I could picture every little thing, just as I would be able to if I was watching it as part of the series. Kudos for a beautiful job well done! :-D

--Marie K.

This was really something. I think you could have made the end a bit stronger, but you incorporated things in there that I'd never thought of before. You should be very proud of this story.

"Are you sick Tory?"

"Not yet."

Hahaha...nice. :). I just had to comment.

THIS IS AMAZING. i first started reading this story a couple of years ago...um...well...a long time ago but then i stopped in the middle because i felt it was a little too intense for me but two years later- i started reading it over again and i was addicted. i read the whole story in two sittings and i absolutely love the way you developed his character. from another perspective, he might seem really surly and negative but the way you developed him made his character sympathetic and likable to the reader. well anyways- i'm off to read your other stories. i just wanted to stop by and show my appreciation.

Nice. Couldn't be improved. It's interesting seeing things from Touya's(Tory?) perspective. I never gave a thought about the fact that he might feel something other than brotherly protection for his little sister. But nobody's perfect, I suppose. Good job.

This is wonderful! I really like how Touya (sorry, I usually stick by the Japanese names) matured throughout all of this. It's subtle.

I can see a huge difference between your writing now and your writing in this. Touya's narrative is frank, matter-of-fact, and it's believably canon.

Lol! Statutory Rape for Mental Health, I wonder why psychiatrists never figured that one out. I thought that story meshed very well with the anime cannon, even with those minor discrepancies that I would never have noticed had you not written them at the end of the story.

Wll thats six stories down, and six to go. (Unlike you, I watched the english version of the show, but can only associate the japanese names of the supporting characters with them. I don't know why, but Tory will always be Touya to me.)

wow this story is just so amazing. this could be for me the best theory(that's how i call it) of touya's past ever. i actually cried often everytime i read about touya's mom.