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Disclaimer: I don't own Naruto or any of it's characters. I do own all of the characters I introduce and the storyline of this fanfic.
This is my first attempt at a fanfic, or any more or less serious writing, so I'm most likely not good at it. English also isn't my native language so I'll probably make some spelling and/or grammar mistakes. I got some ideas for this fanfic by reading other people's works so if something sounds familiar, it probably is. I do not however copy portions from other works, I simply used the ideas and adapted them for use in this fanfic.
Since I'm not a Japanese speaker, I tend to use the English names for techniques I'll most likely also have some of my own later on and I don't want to name them something funny.
I haven't read the manga, so I'm basing on what I've seen in the anime (up to ep. 88) and read in other fanfics. This story takes place around the time Naruto gets back to Hidden Leaf Village after rescuing Sasuke from Orochimaru. I'm a big NaruHina fan, so this will most likely happen sometime later in the story.
Flames are allowed, but be original and use a jutsu to create them ;-).
UPDATE: Thanks for your comments. Because some things were unclear and Naruto was a bit too OOC to my likings, I rewrote parts of the story. I also wrote everything from Naruto POV now. I'll try yo get the next chapter done once I finish my finals (two more to go, yay).
Someone also suggested that I should get a beta reader, so if anyone is interested, I'd be glad to hear from you.
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Let's get this story going:
A strange man was walking around in Hidden Leaf. He was wearing a black cloak and a black mask similar to Kakashi's. His hair was also the same deep black color. If you didn't look carefully you'd say this man was a shadow. Nobody noticed the man as he was walking around. He was looking for something but didn't seem to find it. He suddenly heard a commotion at the North gate. When he arrived there, a young boy with blond hair and an orange vest came came walking in with somebody on him back. They were both badly injured. He noticed that the villagers were looking at the first boy with hate in their eyes. Over the years he had obtained a keen sense for these things. He glanced at the two boys again. Naruto also noticed the looks of the villagers, but he was used to them. When he looked around, the man had already vanished.
Sasuke heard his friends voice and instantly turned around. "What's Naruto doing here ! I hope I'm not too late, who knows what he's going to do to Naruto. I wonder why he is after him in the first place."
"So we meet again, boy" Itachi said, while activating his Sharingan. Naruto stepped back, but before he could do anything Itachi had used his feared technique: the Tsukuyomi.
Suddenly Naruto found himself back in Konoha. Everyone was watching him with hate in their eyes. Naruto also noticed something else, they were laughing with him. "Foolish boy", he hear whispering around him. He saw several people he knew among the villagers: Iruka, Kakashi even Sakura. They were all making fun of him. "Did you really think you could become Hokage? Did you really think we would allow it?". Out of nowhere, Sasuke stepped up to him, a kunai in his hand, he gave it to Naruto. "You know what you have to do", he whispered in his ear. "Do it, now", the villagers said in unison. Slowly, they started walking up to Naruto. "Foolish boy, end it now and save yourself the grief." They got closer and closer until Naruto couldn't walk away anymore. Naruto squeezed the kunai, slowly raising it. The villagers kept getting closer. "What are you waiting for?" they asked him with a barely audible voice. Than all of a sudden everything turned black.
Author's Notes:
OK, that's it for the updated version. I hope this makes things a bit less confusing and more fitting. I do noticed that it's quite a bit shorter, but I'll try to make up for that in the next chapter. Please review, it's really helping me improve.