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Rated: T - English - Mystery/Adventure - Jack S. - Reviews: 288 - Updated: 04-07-09 - Published: 05-07-08 - Complete - id:4242665
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Ok...it's finally here *falls over from exhaustion* Well personally, I didn't really like this chapter. I just don't think it turned out the way I wanted it but then again I've edited the crap out of it and I'm tired of looking at it. So I really need help from the readers when you review. Is there anything I should change? Something I need to improve on? Please let me know, it will be greatly appriciated.


Jack evaded his charge, but only barely and was thrown a little off balance. Dracula quickly came back and punched him hard in the chest, causing the skeleton to land with a thud against the ground.

"Umbra redimio!"

Suddenly, the vampire felt his arms bound tightly at his sides. A long black shadow had forcefully wrapped itself around him. He hissed and looked to the side to see Amelia with her hands facing toward him and her own silhouette extended on the ground which had been used to bind him.

"How are you able to speak!" he growled angrily and tore his arms out of the shadow.

He launched himself at her but she swiftly ducked and kicked him in the stomach, causing him to grunt in pain and stumble backwards.

"Orbis de incendia!"

Dracula suddenly found himself surrounded on all sides by a ring of fire, but he was able to peer through the flames and saw Jack in a familiar fighting stance, indicating that he had cast the spell. The vampire let out a deep cackle.

"You think this pathetic fire can withhold me?" he sliced his arms through the air which dispersed the flames. "In my former body maybe, but not anymore." He stated as he disappeared into the smoke.

The dark cloud had suddenly grown larger and became thicker until the two sorcerers could barely see their own hands in front of their faces. Amelia covered her mouth and started to cough violently. Her eyes stung and became watery, impairing what little vision she had left. Jack, being a skeleton, was better off and immediately could tell that she was defenseless.

'Oh no.' he thought as he realized just what Dracula was planning.

The Pumpkin King quickly moved in front of Amelia to shield her from any possible attack, but because of the smoke, he wasn't sure where the vampire was going to strike from.

All of a sudden, Jack felt something hit him hard in the back causing him to fall forward. However, he quickly turned his heel just in time to regain his balance and to see who had struck him.

"Amelia! What are you doing!" he asked incredulously when he saw her in a fighting stance.

"I'm sorry Jack! It's not me!" she tried to explain but unwillingly launched herself to punch him in the face. However, she narrowly missed for he had stealthily dodged it just in time.

"He's controlling me!" she tried to hold back but to no avail.

"What! How!" The skeleton man quickly jumped back to avoid the sudden furious punches and kicks from the sorceress.

Jack had to be fast on his feet in order to avoid all of her advances. He could tell that she was trying to stop herself but her struggles were of no use. He kept side-stepping and dodging, not wanting to defend himself for fear that he might accidentally hurt her.

"Alucard you coward!" Amelia shouted angrily, "Quit using me to fight your own battles! If you're so strong now then why don't you prove it!"

She suddenly found herself able to control her own movements again and ceased her fighting. But then the two sorcerers' backs were slammed together and neither could move as if some invisible rope had tied itself around them. The smoke began to clear and they heard footsteps nearing them. Dracula stood in front of the sorceress with an angry scowl.

"You will not call me by that worthless name again and nor shall you question my strength!" he ordered.

The Armonia winced in pain as the familiar shock ran throughout her body.

"What have you done to her!" Jack demanded to know, all the more reason to beat him to a pulp.

"Oh nothing bad really," the vampire chuckled as he nonchalantly sauntered over to the King of Halloween, "just a simple curse that forces her to follow my every command."

He smirked in triumph as the skeleton man gave him a fierce glare full of hatred and his bony hands clenched into fists ready to strike him.

"You will be sorry for ever stepping foot into this town." Jack's eyes narrowed as he growled angrily in a dangerously low, quiet voice. Even Amelia was taken aback by his sudden dark tone.

"Ohh, protective are we?" Dracula held his hands up mockingly in defense.

Miraculously, the infuriated Pumpkin King managed to break free of the invisible bonds and swiftly punched the vampire in the face. Then he gave him a sharp uppercut to the jaw, followed by a blow to the stomach, and finally he swung his leg underneath him which caused the vampire to lose his balance and fall over in a heap on the ground. Dracula groaned in pain but was able to stand back up. He growled angrily at his opponent, determined to not be made a fool of.

"You're smarter than you look, which is saying a lot." The vampire spat. "But that's not going to be enough to stop me!"

He moved to punch Jack, who swiftly put his arms up to block, but instead Dracula quickly sliced his hand through the air which called forth a violent wind, almost knocking the skeleton over. Taking advantage of his unbalance, the vampire then swung his leg underneath him, causing the king to fall just like he had done to him earlier.

But Jack quickly got back up as his silhouette discreetly slithered behind the vampire and suddenly shot up, split in two, and each shadowy arm grabbed hold of the enemy's wrists. Dracula tried to break through the bonds but found himself unable to this time. He hastily glanced to the side and noticed that Amelia had used the same spell to reinforce the strength of the shadows. She had even split her silhouette into four to wrap around his ankles as well as his arms. Needless to say he was trapped.

"There's no where left to run, you vile, second-rate, worthless excuse of a vampire." The Pumpkin King growled angrily with such a vicious glare, that it if looks could kill, Dracula would have been dead in an instant.

"So that pathetic sorceress over there is actually that close to you? I never would have guessed." The captive smirked, flashing his sharp fangs, knowing he had hit a soft spot in his pride.

"Why you!" Jack was about to throw a punch at him when Amelia beat him to it.

She had hit her now ex-boyfriend hard in the face and probably broke his nose. The tall skeleton stumbled back a few steps and looked at her with a bewildered expression.

"Sorry, he made me mad!" she said and then grabbed the vampire by the collar, her eyes fuming with hatred.

There was a brief glimpse of fear in his expression, but it was replaced almost instantly with his normal smug look.

"And just what do you think you can do to me?" he asked, his broken nose already beginning to heal.

"Incendia!" she shouted.

There was an abrupt burst of light in his face, causing him to hiss in pain. He clenched his eyes shut, but they shot open when he felt a severe burning sensation on his stomach. The light was gone from his face and Amelia's fist was surrounded by a bright flame that had been punched into his abdomen.

"AHH!" he screamed from the intensity of the burn. Jack had even jumped back in shock, and possibly even in slight fear, when the sorceress had unleashed her fury.

The vampire yelled even more in pain when she pushed even further. She finally removed her hand from him and his head hung as he seemed about to collapse if it weren't for the shadows that still held him up. Jack called off the binds around him and Dracula fell to his knees clutching his stomach and flopped onto the floor on his back. Amelia smirked in triumph as she put her hands on her hips, but then his hand suddenly gripped around her ankle and pulled her to the ground.

The Pumpkin King made a dash over to them but fell backwards when he collided with something hard. He shook his head and opened his eyes as quickly stood up to try and run toward them again, but there was something invisible that was blocking him. He pushed his hands against it and found that it was a shield that Dracula must have put up just before he grabbed Amelia. Jack's fist became surrounded by a dark shadow as he started punching at the force field.

"Laedo!" he cried over and over trying to break the invisible wall. "Laedo!"

"Never knew you could be so unforgiving." Dracula said to the young royal while he clutched his abdomen and staggered a little as he got back up on his feet.

"Get up." He ordered and stood up straight as his wounds miraculously began to mend themselves.

The unwelcome surge of electric shocks ran through the sorceress, forcing her to stand. He brought his hand up and smacked her hard across the face with such a force that she collapsed back onto the ground.

"Don't you dare touch her again!" Jack shouted angrily as he stopped trying to break the shield momentarily, but his words went ignored.

"I said get up!" Dracula ordered.

Again, she had no choice but to obey. He then roughly gripped her chin and made sure that they were both in plain sight of the Pumpkin King who continued hastily to break through the invisible wall.

"Never again will you attack me!" The vampire commanded fiercely, sending the familiar painful sensation throughout her body as she winced from the torture.

"Now, if we don't complete the spell soon then I will revert back to my old form." He stated as he leaned in closer to her, "We don't want that to happen now do we?" he taunted more or less to Jack than to Amelia just to make him even more angry.

His hand moved away from her chin and then he tightly gripped her shoulders. He gazed into her eyes one last time, which were conflicted with emotions from hatred to grief.

"Hold still." He said, and of course the electric shock forced her to do so. Dracula leaned closer to her neck and hissed as he exposed his sharp fangs.

"Amelia no!" Jack shouted in terror, but then he felt his furious rage take its hold again and he punched the shield one last time.

"Laedo!" he yelled as he struck it with all the force he could muster.

This time, the wall glistened a little before it shattered into thousands of tiny fragments, then disappeared completely for the spell was finally broken. Dracula made the mistake of pausing to see what had happened because then he was knocked away from the sorceress by a swift kick from Jack. Before he was about to fall, the vampire used his quick reflexes to back flip and land safely on his feet, then turn toward his opponent. He made a lightning fast dash toward him, as did The Pumpkin King. The two were now sprinting at blinding speeds toward one another, each ready to silence the other for good.

Amelia couldn't do anything for she was forced to obey the vampire's command. All she could do was watch helplessly as Jack Skellington and the infamous Dracula were about to kill each other.

Suddenly, time seemed to stop for the distressed sorceress, though oddly enough, she found that everything had apparently frozen around her yet she could still move. But even more strange, her pendant began to glow once again, however she had paid no mind to it.

"Jack?" she walked up to the said unmoving skeleton man in mid-run.

She waved her hand in front of his face. Nothing.

"Jack!" she said louder, hoping to knock him out of the weird trance.

But then, her pendant levitated itself out in front of her as it shone even brighter. A bright blue beam shot out of it and the strange light took the form of a young girl. The figure materialized more, though it seemed rather ghostly. The pendant slowly lowered back down but still shone brightly as ever.

Amelia was now standing in front of what looked like her own reflection. It was Elizabeth Brave who appeared before the startled sorceress with an eerie, misty azure glow about her.

"The Gem of the Armonias has once again been awakened and its power unleashed." She gently spoke.

"Awakened? But how?" She questioned her ancestor, slightly confused by her words as well as her odd, sudden appearance.

Elizabeth moved to stand next to her descendent and simply stared at Jack.

"Wait…is this because…" the young sorceress pointed at him and a pink blush crept across her cheeks.

"He has captured your heart, hasn't he?" the Victorian asked as she turned to her, and smiled in amusement when she received a look of embarrassment from the young sorceress.

"When he neared you after the revelation of your true feelings, the stone activated." She explained. "Now you have gained the ability to control the ancient power of the Armonias."

"Th-that sure is a strange way to go about releasing 'ancient power'" Amelia stated sheepishly, the light blush still present on her face.

"I will restore time and you must use the gem to fight against…" she paused and her eyes narrowed as she turned toward the frozen vampire.

"Him." Her voice was laced with obvious hatred.

"But how can I do that! I can't fight!" the young sorceress tired to tell her ancestor the problem at hand.

Elizabeth turned back to face her, her once bitter expression now replaced with a happier one as a small smile graced her lips.

"I know you can do it Amelia. You have the strength of generations of sorcerers behind you."

With that, the Victorian Armonia closed her eyes and transformed into the foggy blue mist like when she first appeared, and then was absorbed back into the blue gem.

Like she had said, time was returned to normal and Jack was able to make his attack before Dracula could. He sliced his hand through the air away from him and the vampire was thrown against the wall by an unseen force. The dark lord slid to the floor and just as he was standing back up to launch another attack, they both heard…

"Orbis carcer."

Dracula suddenly became engulfed in a blue orb which slowly began to shrink. The more he struggled, the less space there was left in the sphere.

Jack turned and stumbled back in surprise at what he saw. Then he spoke softly in astonishment.

"A-Amelia…?"


Yeah I know, I know. Another cliff-hanger. I had a great ending for this chapter honestly but if I put the rest in, it would have been 8 pages long on Microsoft Word and with it, the chapter just seemed rushed to me. So I cut it out and it'll be in the next chapter so you're not missing out on anything lol!

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I'm asking for help on this chapter. I just don't think it came out to well, but then again I've read this thing so many times I could probably recite it from memory. I don't really know what's wrong with it, but it just didn't come out right in my opinion. If you guys could please tell me in your reviews anything that you noticed, something that might help me, something that needs to be changed, etc. I really would like constructive criticism on this.

And one more thing, about the next chapter. There's going to be a change in Amelia's appearance, but I can't decide on how much I should change. Should she have a "costume change" because now she has activated the Gem of the Armonias? Or should it be something simple like she being surrounded by a blue glow? If anything, please tell me what you think in your review!

Thank you all SO much! And thanks for being patient with me...I really appriciate it :)

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