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Freehugs41
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Rated: K+ - English - Romance - Cindy V. & Jimmy N. - Reviews: 100 - Updated: 08-24-08 - Published: 06-03-08 - Complete - id:4299043
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Hurray! This is the First Chapter of my First Fan Fiction! I am so Super Excited! I hope you like it... It is okay if you don't though... I understand! Please Reply! I don't care if you hate it, I still want to know someone read it! Here it is, after the disclaimer...ahem I DON'T OWN JIMMY NEUTRON OR ANY RELATED CHARECTERS! Thank you! Now, here is the First Chapter:

Cindy and Libby were overcome with excitement as they prepared Libby's basement for what they wanted to be the biggest boy-girl party of the year. Libby picked out music while Cindy rearranged the furniture and set up all the party supplies. "I am so excited!" Cindy said, looking over the arrangement of the room, "What do you think Libs?"

"It's great Cin! I just picked out the perfect CD, Men Pretending to Be Boys Greatest Hits! This is going to be great! What time were people supposed to start showing up again?"

"Seven…hey Libs, can I have a look at the guest list?"

"NO!"

"Please," Cindy pleaded with a puppy dog pout, "I want to know who you invited."

"I already told you it is a surprise! Now, do you have everything ready for people to show up? It's almost six thirty and the people with no lives should be hearing any minute! You know how they always say their 'fashionably early' and-"

"Libby," Cindy said in a dangerous voice, "Did you invite Nerdtron and his two freaky friends?"

"Oh come on, they're not that bad…well Carl is…but Sheen is cute and you know you like Jimmy!"

"Do not! I told you not to invite them Libby, they will ruin the night for me!"

"Meaning, that you will be so worried about Neutron finding out you like him so you will spend the whole night arguing to mask your true feelings and he'll think your even meaner then he dose now!" Libby said in a bored voice

"Yes," muttered Cindy abashedly, "and plus Quinlan is coming and you know how jealous I-"

"Hold that thought," Libby said, walking over to the door, "Hey Sheen, Hi Carl, Hi Jimmy."

Cindy groaned from the corner as Jimmy Carl and Sheen piled into the room 'fashionably early' as Sheen was probably dying to see Libby, Carl had nothing better to do- like he ever does- and Jimmy was, kind of, looking forward to seeing Cindy. But every time Jimmy even thought about liking Cindy, he automatically denied it, although he knew, deep down, that he was lying.

Cindy didn't want to see him because she got butterflies in her stomach and her heart started jumping for joy…but she would never tell him that, as far as she was concerned! She would just argue with him to mask her true feelings, and she knew in her brain that boys like Nick Dean would make much better boyfriends, but she still liked Jimmy in her heart. Of course, Libby couldn't offer much help because she and Sheen had a pretty clear-cut relationship, they both liked each other and had openly admitted it, and there was nothing to hide. Deep down Cindy was envious because she wished it was that way for her and Jimmy.

After the boys entered the room, they began to talk amongst themselves and Cindy and Libby joined in. Then at seven, the time people were actually supposed to start arriving, lots of people from school began to show. There was every one from their class there, except for the bullies, but they wouldn't exactly be the best people to invite to a party. Anyway, some people arrived late, like the attractive and popular Nick walked through the doors a little late, but not too late, as the festivities were just getting started.

"Gather around for Truth or Dare" Called Libby, as people began to fill the chairs and couches arranged in a circle by Cindy. "Who wants to go first?" Libby asked, once they were all in the circle.

YAY! Thanks for reading, PLEASE REPLY!

Note: This is the revised version. I would like to thank Pumpernickel Muffin for her review, as she pointed out many grammatical, plot, and just all around errors. I wrote this story a while back, and this story scares me a little and gives me the incredible urge to face-palm myself, but I've decided to attempt to revise it as much as possible without making any huge plot changes, just mostly grammatical changes. The OOC-ness of the characters, along with the many errors I made, is now apparent to me. I'll try to improve this story as best I can, but I have to say that I am considering deleting it. Either that, or completely deleting this story and re-writing it all around. Please PM me if you have any thoughts on either of those potential actions.

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