|Naruto and the Giant Pomergante remake
Author: Shadow-DJ PM
This is a edited version of the original story I first made. Let me know what you think. If you want the plot, read the one from the originalRated: Fiction K+ - English - Adventure/Parody - Chapters: 3 - Words: 4,503 - Reviews: 11 - Favs: 2 - Follows: 2 - Updated: 11-23-09 - Published: 11-21-09 - id: 5525196
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This is the revived version of my first story; Naruto and the Giant Pomegranate, tell me what you think.
"The attack of Radar"
Naruto and the Giant Pomegranate
We see three boys, three girls, and a dog and a toad. The first one is a 10 year old boy with blond spiky hair, blue eyes, strange whisker marks, a black shirt under a orange and blue jacket, orange pants, black sandals and a pair of goggles named Naruto Uzimaki, was skipping rocks across some water.
Next to him, skipping rocks with him is a 10 year old girl with blue hair, pearl colored pupil less eyes, wearing a gray jacket over a black tank top, blue pants with a few white bandages on it, blue sandals. She's Hinata Hyuga, Naruto's best friend.
Watching them was Sari Sumdac, a 8 year old girl in the body of a her teenage body, with light brown skin, wearing a long yellow dress with a small blue sphere as a neck-brace, blue eyes, and also yellow knee high boots.
Next to her was another 10 year old boy, he had brown hair, green eyes, wears a white shirt with a horizontal black stripe, green jean shorts, white and black shoes and a strange green and black watch, his name is Ben Tennyson, the wielder of the Omnitrix. "Nice one, dude!" said Ben, seeing him do a good throw
The third girl is Ben's 10 year old cousin, Gwen, who has a blue shirt with a darker blue cat head on it, white pants and shoes, red hair with a small green pin in it, and also a strange bracelet. She was reading as she watched with a small smile.
The Third boy is 11 with a fire style hair, blue eyes, a black shirt with a toxic-sign on it, with a blue vest, green jeans, black sneakers, and also a cool looking digital clock, his name is Johnny Test, and near him is a brown dog with a strange baboon-like face, who 's name is Dukey, Johnny's pet talking dog and best friend.
The other animal is a red toad with yellow eyes with sideways silts, a blue vest with a Japanese sign, a few blue lines and markings on him, his name is Gamakichi, Naruto's pet talking toad and partner.
man's voice talk: this is Naruto Uzimaki, he lives with his mother and father out in a beautiful house by the sea, along with his friend's residents visits, he is one of the happiest kids on earth.
Then a man that looks a lot like Naruto, named is Minato Namikaze, Naruto's father, grabbed him from behind, bringing him and his friends to Naruto's mom, Kushina, and she said, "happy birthday Naruto." bring him a cake with a small nine-tailed fox candal with 10 regular candles, and Minato said, "know blow out the candles before the wind does."
then Ben says, "but make a wish first, pal." Naruto smiled at him as he closed his eyes
Naruto thinks, 'I wish I'll be with my friends and family forever', and then blew out the candles. Hinata smiled at him, knowing he made a good wish.
Some time later, they all laid out on blankets, watching the clouds while the narrator comes in.
Narrator: It was a wonderful life, they had each other and their dreams
then Naruto said a few clouds seemed like a camel and a train engine, then Minato, asks, "know do you see the tallest building in the entire earth"
Naruto seems to have trouble, but says, "um, dad, are you sure your not seeing things, because I don't see anything."
Kushina said ,"try looking at that cloud another way."
Naruto nods and turns his head and sees a cloud version of the Empire State Building, and says, "oh, there it is"
Then Minato shows Naruto a travel book for New York, and tells him, "that's where we're going, you and your friends and us, we're going to the top of that building (pointing at the Empire State building)" then chuckles, "imagine, us, at the top of the world."
then Johnny asks, "are there kids there, like us?" he wanted to know, just in case.
Then Kushina opens it, showing kids playing in Central Park, then says ,"there are hundreds of them, its a wonderful place kids, the city where dreams come true." after saying that, something strange happened, they all see a large Gray cloud the shape of a large gorilla come towards them.
The kids run while Kushina and Minato try to fight it with their Jutsus, but the creature merely shot them with some lightning.
narrator: then, one day, a terrible thing happened. A insane weather controlling ape named Radar, came out of no where, and killed both of Naruto's poor parents, their troubles, if there was any, were ended in 25 seconds flat.
The kids see the ape glare at them, and them and the animals run away, not looking back. The monstrous Gorilla roars as he saw them run away
Then we see them as they are now, 5 years later, Naruto and the others are now teenagers, and they wake up scared out of their wits.
Naruto hides his travel book to New York under his pillow while his only relatives, came in while the
Narrator: but Naruto and his friend's trouble only begun, now they live with Naruto's terrible cousin, Azula...
then a Teenage girl with armor named Azula comes in screaming, "wake up, you worthless creeps."
Narrator:...and her mother, Bonnie
then a woman comes in with a disapproving look comes in, she has brown hair, green-blue eyes, wearing a bath robe right know, she was Bonnie Rockwaller, Naruto's mother's sister, and evil aunt, and she points to her watch, saying, "You brats wasted four minutes, look at them Azula, logy-gaging in their own littler worlds, when work is needed to be done."
Then Azula says, "yeah, with all the weeds and wood to chop, now get to WORK!!" the last part is what both Bonnie and Azula said. Naruto and his pals luck has hit rock bottom.
End of Chapter one
Well, there's the revived version of the first story I did. And please Read, Review, and suggest.