Author: snowangel420 PM
When Linguini finds his 18 year old daughter in her room, sobbing, he sees that she has been cyberbullied. After reading the negative reviews she has gotten for two of her fanfics, they come up with a plan for revenge. One-shot.Rated: Fiction K+ - English - Hurt/Comfort/Family - Words: 1,969 - Reviews: 10 - Favs: 7 - Follows: 3 - Published: 01-28-13 - Status: Complete - id: 8955586
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Summary: When Linguini finds his adopted 18-year old daughter sobbing in her room in front of her computer, he sees that she has been cyberbullied. After reading the mean reviews she has gotten for her fanfics, they both decide to have a little revenge. These reviews are real, and have been revised a bit to fit my noncursing style, but they are otherwise the same. This is a way of expressing myself. After each one, I will have an Author's Note with a response if necessary. Alfredo Linguini will be known as Linguini and Colette Linguini will be known as Colette. And just so you know, I would never flame anyone's fanfic, or anyone at all. And didn't I say no flames on any of my fanfics? Yes, I did!
It's been a busy day at La Ratatouille, and Alfredo and Colette Linguini want nothing more than to go home to their adopted daughter, Becky. She was about 15 when they adopted her from the foster home. 3 years have passed, and Becky has become a Daddy's girl over the years.
When the Linguinis got home, Alfredo immediately goes upstairs to his daughter's room. It has been a few hours since Becky had gotten home from school, and she usually gets her homework done before her parents get home. This high school senior is kind of an overachiever, and strives at her job as a waitress at her parent's restaurant.
But what surprises Linguini is the sound of sobbing coming from his daughter's room. He slowly opens the door to find Becky on her bed, her face in the pillow, with her laptop near her. Her laptop is on and her email is open to a series of reviews she has gotten for two of her fanfics. Holding his daughter close, Linguini reads the reviews.
1) F you:I hate your fanfic. I hate tinkerbell. I hate dragons. I hate life. (A/N: Just...*sobs*)
2) Guest :The first part makes NO SENSE!
The second part makes even LESS SENSE!
By the third part, I'm completely CONFUSED!
Why are you such a terrible writer?
Who is Lily and how does Terrance know she's pregnant THE SECOND after a rape?
Also historically inaccurate.
As ppl prsn pointed out, blood tests weren't around than. I did a report on
Vikings in 7th grade, and they did everything naturally. If you wanted to know
if you were pregnant, you either waited until the first kick, or had a lot of
people squish and rub your belly.
Toilets were invented not long ago, so no urine tests were taken either. HECK!
Science wasn't even considered an option!
If I were you, I would either get a beta, or start over on a NEW series of
fanfictions that don't include dragons or fairies. Becky doesn't even have
Freaking WINGS in your story!
One more thing, just because she is in your story, doesn't mean Becky is a
REAL CHARACTER'S GIRLFREIND! not only that, but she is best friends with
HECK, NO! (A/N: I can't even begin to DESCRIBE how much this person irks me! Especially with the "Why are you such a terrible writer?" question. Do you guys think I'm a terrible writer? Be honest! And it's TERENCE, not Terrance! MY STORY! HELLO! WOULD YOU STOP BEING SO IMMATURE? My story. My life! I hope you'd get out of both.)
3) Bunny:Why wa Becky cast out again? I didn't quite catch that. (READ THE STORY!)
(okay that one's not really hateful, but still)
4) Who:Two characters I don't know and would like cleared up:
.who is blue? (Astrid's dragon. Didn't know her name at the time)
.who is Lily? (READ THE STORY!)
(again, another nonhateful one)
5) :... Pregnancy is only 9 months. Not 10. (A/N: I made it so Lily would be 1 month old!)
:Whoa, whoa, whoa! Love moving WAY to quickly! Hiccup for about 7 chapters,
Snotlout for about 2 chapters, and now, TUFFNUT!? Who's next, Fishleggs? (A/N: It's FISHLEGS! Get your facts straight!)
7) :Let me get this straight:
Love hiccup, than snotlout, than TUFFNUT, Than hiccup again? What is this, the
twilight saga? (A/N: One, I HATE Twilight, and I am glad it's over. Two, it's MY story, and yes, I knew I put it out there for people to criticize, but that doesn't mean they have to be mean about it!)
8) Nope : Not excited for chapter 13. You are HORRIBLE at cliffhangers!
9) FuzzyExorcist: Okay, now, there are a few things bothering me here. It doesn't matter who
Sophie's real dad is as long as Sandy helped raise Sophie then technically he
is her father, especially after Sophie learns her biological father abused
her. Why would Sophie think Becky isn't her mother? How would a mere mortal
manage to get all the Guardians tied in chains? They're Guardians. As for
Bunnymund, he could EASILY take out Howard. Now if Howard were somehow not
human, then there's a chance. Now for the other part, why is it written like
script for a movie? Heck it isn't even movie script. Were is the description?
The detail? This chapter is more like a page. There needs to be more to it. It
all seems too rushed. In order for things to come out as they should, you
should never rush writing, it's like art. I understand if you are in your
teens, sometimes writing can be difficult for the younger crowd. On to the
next chapter. (A/N: I am an 18 year old SENIOR!)
10) FuzzyExorcist: Wait...didn't Bunnymund just say she'd die if they told her about the threat?
Why would he go and tell her anyway after saying that? That makes no sense,
even if he had an ulterior motive. Bunnymund indirectly killed Becky's baby,
he must be hating himself now. How would she not know how to tell Sandy about
being pregnant when they've already had one other kid? Pitch and Tooth? I
didn't even see any connection between then in the movie, nor are there in in
the books. How does that work? She shouldn't even be getting out of bed after
miscarrying, she should be taken to a hospital, unless someone there has a
medical degree, then that's fine, but i doubt they do. Need more description
11) FuzzyExorcist: See, I still say Howard would be better if he wasn't mortal. No mortal would
cause so much trouble for the Guardians. Storm and Hope wouldn't be Guardians
until they went through the horrible ceremony Jack went through. They aren't
Guardians right off the bat. They'd have to find there calling. Like Jack did.
The other Guardians didn't know that Jack is the Guardian of Fun until he
found out himself. This is getting to be a soap opera.
12) FuzzyExorcist: No one falls in love that quick and gets married like that. No one. All of a
sudden they forget about searching for the girls? Seriously? That should be
the first thing on their list. Howard not mortal. Just saying. Why is it
sounding more and more like Days of Our lives?
13) FuzzyExorcist: 3 months is too soon to have another child after miscarriage, the body is
still too damaged. It has to heal. Otherwise at 6 months, you go into labor.
Why would Storm go into labor? There is nothing wrong with her. I mean I can
see her going into labor at about 7 1/2 - 8 months, but her babies would be
seriously premature and they would need medical attention. They would need to
be in incubators and be fed oxygen to keep them going. You can't just have
premature babies and everything is all hunky dory here. (A/N: If you recall, when Sandy and Becky made the announcement about the baby, Storm and Jack made the SAME announcement! And both Storm and Becky were 3 months along when they made the announcement!)
FuzzyExorcist: Three years have passed and Becky had another baby? With Jack? How did it go
from Becky and Sandy being madly in love and Jack and Storm being madly in
love as well to Jack and Becky cheating and having a love child?! Now wanting
to get back together with each other after getting married to other people?!
Soap Opera. Sandy should be livid. No way would anyone, even the Guardians be
okay with cheating. How is no one as angry as Storm is? I mean seriously? Now
Becky is blind? She isn't going to turn into a blind, deaf, mute is she? I
mean that would just add to the Soap Opera. 6 Chapters and everything is the
same. You need some work honey, you got potential going on here, but you need
to pay more attention in writing class. The lack of detail and description is
astounding. I hope to see chapter 7 with more paragraph like details. (A/N: I took a writing class the same year I met my first and second exes)
When Linguini finishes reading the reviews (if you can even call them that), he holds his daughter closer to him, letting her sob.
"Shh. I'm here, sweetheart. Daddy's here." A few minutes pass, and Becky's sobs weaken a little.
"Sweetheart, how long has this been going on?" Linguini asks, stroking his daughter's hair.
"I just got them this morning." Becky says, breaking down again.
"Sweetheart, these reviewers crazy to say that. They don't know what you go through at school. They don't know you get picked on for being short, or for not cursing, or for not doing drugs, or not drinking, or not smoking. They don't know you get called the b-word or the w-word or the h-word or people saying that you're going to get "laid" this year. They don't know your second ex-boyfriend threatened you and you have reoccuring nightmares about him raping you and you getting pregnant. Those reviewers have no idea what you're going through." Linguini holds his daughter close.
"Daddy, what am I gonna do?" Becky asks.
"First, we are going to get some crème glacée (ice cream). And then we're going to come back, tell your mother about this, and think of a way to make sure those reviewers don't bother you any more." Linguini says.
"Thank you, Daddy." Becky says.
"You're welcome, sweetheart."
Becky and Linguini go for ice cream. Becky gets chocolate ice cream and Linguini gets vanilla. Afterwards, they come home to Colette waiting for them.
"Where have you two been?" Colette asks angrily.
"Colette, something's come up." Linguini says.
"And that would be what exactly?"
Becky and Linguini look at each other with tears in their eyes. Before the tears can threaten to spill out of Becky's eyes, her father squeezes her shoulder.
"You'd better come with us." Linguini asks.
Colette follows the two upstairs.
As Becky boots up her computer, Linguini puts an arm around her.
"I got them this morning." Becky says as each review comes up.
Colette reads the reviews, and as she does, a few tears fall down her cheeks. Becky does her best to sob quietly as her father wraps his arms around her.
"All right. We've got to do something about this." Colette says.
"But what?" Becky asks.
"How about we write a true short story with the reviews and about what just happened." Linguini says. Becky and Colette nods.
And so, the family of three write the story.
What do they call it?
Okay, there's my story. I practically poured my heart out to you guys. Please, please, please! No flames, at least not for this story, if not for all! What I put in there about the getting picked on and the threat from my second ex and the nightmare, that is all true. I didn't lie about a single thing!