I kept running into problems with my last idea and reworked it to its (hopefully) final form.

Basically, I kept resisting the urge to make my OC into a SI but it was very hard. So hard it interfered with my writing. So I then decided to do an SI. Problem was I couldn't come up with a good plot. So then I had an idea. Combine the ideas. ^^

Ok, we have seen plenty of SI out there with writers doing self fulfilment and stuff. But what would happen if a author got sucked into her own fanfiction before it is completed? What if she meet her own OC and had to deal with her bad attitude, not to mention dealing with the utter chaos of being in a universe that operated by a whole new set of rules. What if she had to take a job teaching english to Ranma?

The psudo-SI author would know some of what was going on, but since she never finished the fic it quickly becomes apparent that nothing is going as it was supposed to...because of her. So you have three elements interacting chaotically. Magic will meet technology, tempers will flair, and (hopefully) there will be enough surprises and twists to keep it fresh.

I've never heard of a fic like this, and am really excited to be writing it. ^^

Rachel Kein is the author that gets sucked into the Ranma 'verse. She is a wiccan girl getting sucked into the Ranma universe. She can use magick to a level far past what can be used in RL, but she sucks as a fighter. Being 23 she won't get involved in the wars around ranma and be mostly trying to get back home. She stays at Tofu's place and works at the high school as an english teacher. Rachel doesn't mind the craziness as much as some would due to her own life is a bit crazy itself where she came from. (Truth is stranger then fiction sometimes ^^) She is kinda a McGuver, but only knows the basics of most things. She can jury rig mechanical stuff, but only on a basic level. He fatal flaw however is that she hates dead things, like a certain doctor's skeleton, almost as much as Ranma hates cats.

Basically her most useful element in a fight is her magik, but it is draining and dangerous for her to use in Ranma universe. Wiccan magick is basically working with energy. As far as I can tell, there isn't that much different from that energy and chi, only its use. When she first uses it it basically burns her as the energy levels in the Ranma universe are much more potent then the levels here. This is why you can see energy use there and not here. Her fighting style is to use a bow, and shoot real or mystic 'arrows'. She can do some healing as well. (most wiccan magic focuses on healing i discovered from my studies). But other then healing, can only do one or two spells a day before becoming exhausted at first.

Dani Fears is the OC that the 'author' creates. How she came to be in Japan is simple, she is running from the police in america where she was a gang leader, with some scruples, however her gang is wiped out and she is blamed for it. So she flees to Japan since because of her grandmother she can speak japanese and since she was a gang leader she had developed connections to give her a new identity. This comes up later when Nabiki confronts her.

She really dosn't want to get involved in the NWC chaos, but does because of various reasons. I don't want her to be a female Rambo, but not someone to be taken lightly. Again, in a fair fight Ranma would wipe the floor with her, but she doesn't fight fair. She tends to carry throwing knives as standard weaponry, but is proficient in the use of a Katana and various firearms and owns both.

Detective Keith Stonewall is the officer that pursues Dani to Tokyo. He works with interpol trying to track down the supposed mass murderer Dani Fears. He is relentless in his pursuit of justice, but begins to question if she is the right target as the story goes on. He comes close to catching her a few times, but somehow Dani manages to escape. At least once partly in fault of a meddling teacher named Rachel Kein. He is proficient with standard police weaponry and tactics, and tends to carry a magnum revolver. To Keith, its duty first and foremost always.

I guess it sorta can be summed up in my planned teaser tag:

Angels Fall First: Omniscient beings at a chess board, a relentless organization behind the sceans, a deadly assassin, A teacher from another world, and a girl on the run. Nothing seems connected, but at the center they all meet at the same point; Ranma Saotome.

So what do yall think, sound interesting?

All author OC stories are bad. Don't write it. And if you HAVE to, don't post it on FF.net. Besides, you COULD just as easily just edit out Ranma's invlovement at all and make an original story that you could actually make money off of. Seriously, to you, it probably sounds like a good idea, but it isn't. You're already making the enitre cast of Ranma 1/2 background characters for some lame OC. Just, don't. Walk away from the bad idea and no one will be hurt.

Thank you.

Um, how is it i'm making the Ranma crew background characters? Everything is centered on Ranma. Everything in the plot involves the NWC and their involvement is key to pulling it all off.

So you say, but the major idea and backing of the story is essentially the author and the OC hooking up. And while I'm at it, if the OC is improbably aged and overly skilled you should definitely NOT do it.

Besides, no idea is worth it to have an SI and an overpowered OC running around. The bringing of unecessary "gritty" realism with pretentions to being dark and stuff. Dark fics are, by and large, horribly overdone melodramtic messes of angst that are nothing more than vehicles for the petulant moron to get "revenge" on characters they hate. You have a genuinely GOOD idea here, but adding it into Ranma 1/2 totally futzes the equation.

But again, asks yourself this: Could you do this idea without either the OC/SI or the Ranma crew? Necause if you can't, your idea stinks and needs to either be thrown out or into the rethink pile. You can tell yourself all you want that it's really all about Ranma, but then you'll finish the first chapter which will be littered with your sparkingly super gangster of an OC doing a lot of cliche action girl garbage and won't even get to Ranma until she winds up in Japan and bumps into him. And then you'll see I'm right.

Think it out more, and remember if the Ranma crew really is the star, then the OC can just hide in the background.

Marik, thanks for taking the time to read my posts and come up with an intelligent response to them. I appreciate using actual english and not 733t speak or something to tell me my idea sucks.

That being said, while I understand how you came to that conclusion, that is not how I vision this fic going at all. First of all, its not a SI, its a psudo-SI. This means essentially its one more OC, just an OC aware that the Ranma universe isn't real. To her at least. Even with her 'magic', she isn't really stronger then any of the cast. Maybe smarter and wiser due to her being older (except Nabiki), but not stronger.

As for my 'Action girl', Dani would be about say Akane's level when it comes to fighting. This means against the average Joe she would wipe the floor with them. It also means even with the masters in 'normal' martial arts she could probably win fairly, but against a Ranma 'verse power hitting martial artist, she would lose. She could probably take on Shampoo to a standstill, as I think Akane could if she could hold her temper, but thats as high up the food chain she could fight. Fairly that is. With her background she has no problems using underhanded tricks to win, but she usually can only do that if she knows a fight is coming, short of her firearms of course. As for the guns, she has better then average skill with them, but isn't a commando.

Now for the plot. Yes, I do plan to have some 'gritty' moments. How real they are I don't know, but I plan to do them in the flavor of anime. So yes there will be 'darker' scenes and maybe 'angst' as the OCs reveal past events, and some of it will be warranted. For instance, Dani revealing how it was to grow up a transsexual girl on the streets for her. This is what lead her to be as antisocial as she is today. I do the serious stuff when its needed as its called for, this is my motto for writing and life. To be true to Ranma I plan to have plenty of comedy as well. Such as the result of a well meaning teacher giving advice to Ranma, who misinterprets what she said and makes things worse.

Now the third OC is there, but i'm not sure what kind of role the cop will play. Your comment of the love between them made me laugh though. You see Rachel already has someone, thats one of her drives to get back to her own world. Whether she does or not depends on how mean I want to be to my characters.

Marik I understand your concerns as I've read alot of crap fics myself. I do have a dramatic beginning middle and end to this fic in mind. In my mind as well, its the most logical evolution from the ending of the Manga. Even with the Canon ending there wasn't much resolved, and Ranma had just been forced to 'kill' someone. I know Saffron didn't actually die, but neither we the readers nor Ranma could have known that at the time, and that experience changes you. So yes I feel things will get a bit more 'realistic', but hopefully I can stay true to the ranma universe and cast and still write a worthwhile story. If you want I can send you copies to proofread my chapters so you can help me avoid a crappy fic.

Akane isn't anywhere near Shampoo's level. Or wasn't that abundantly cleary when Shampoo daintly hopped over Akane and hit her with Xi Fang Gao in the blink of an eye. Even if Akane held back her temper, there's never been a single indication that she'd be able to fight Shampoo.

That aside, Ranma-verse martial artist aren't THAT strong and honestly, the fact that you think they're something special is worrisome. Sure, it's visually impressive , but there's not too much else they have on other fighting manga and anime, like Grappler Baki and Fist of the North Star. Secondly, how is Dani actually going to talk to Japanese people since, you know, she's from America? Convient that a deliquent and violent gangster who has her own personal Zenigata just so happens to learn perfect Japanese so as to better blend it. Let me guess, she's a super genius who learns at a high rate from only a few glances or examples? Yeah, no.

You say you've read plenty of crap fics but you're already making a huge one: An OC that impossibly has high level martial arts skills and is perfectly fluent in at least two language, mixed with a "tragic" (read: overwrought) background. And you're mixing grim, gritty with comedy, which unless it's subtle, will just come off forced and pandering. Your idea has merit if it were a crime drama novel, but it isn't. It's Ranma fanfiction, and thus it's bringing a whole lot of extra baggage that'll sink it before you can swim with the idea.

If for nothing else, at least understand that making her an improbably skilled martial artist is the first sign your OC is already bad. Just because there are a good number of wunderkind(or, wonderkid if you don't speak German) martial artists in Ranma doesn't mean you have to make your OC knuckle up to them in much the same manner. Being able to fight isn't always knowing martial arts, you know? Just think it over before you go too far.

*sighs and smiles* You are determined to prove me wrong eh? First here is a link to a previous series of posts that involve this story. You see this story is actually a merge of two ideas in my mind, as I couldn't get over certain gaps seperatly, I used the combination to hopefully cover both. So hopefully that old idea and my newer one will make a better product.

http://www.fanfiction.net/topic/1344/2713544/1/

http://www.fanfiction.net/topic/1726/5675532/1/

As for language, it is possible for an American to know Japanese, even a high schooler. I in fact am learning both Japanese and Chinese, now i'm not 100% fluent, but can get by most of the time. I learned Chinese from my girlfriend (yes i'm also a girl) and I learned Japanese from my exchange student friends along with book work.

Now when it comes to martial arts, how can you possibly say they are nothing special? Both Ryoga and Ranma use martial artist skills that our 'real world' martial artists would get killed just trying to learn. The breaking point is also in contradiction to several physical laws, not to mention medical ones just in learning the technique.

I understand the concern for baggage, but that also pertains to when and how that baggage is revealed. Even full metal panic with the seargent, who did have a very trying childhood, didn't get his exspose until the second season. Yes Dani has a past, but then again if you know anything about transexuals that is almost to be expected. If you don't, you have no idea.

Finally, as for her 'improbable' training. Firearms are not that hard to learn. I speak from experience. Sword fighting is hard, but doable. Now again, she is supposed to be akane's lvl, not akane. Which means characters like kuno would, and will, beat her. A point also that by the end of the series Akane does improve in the manga, to the point I do feel she could take on Shampoo. Now would she win? I don't know, but my money would still be on shampoo. I only said to a standstill, not win.

An OC does not always equal a bad fic. It all depends not only on the idea, but the skill of the writer. Now, i'm not claiming to be the best wordsmith, but I do plan to use the community to help me put forth the best work I can do. I don't plan to rush it, and its gonna take a while to get it all out, school can be a limiter on hobbies. I can point to a variety of OC stories, and even SI stories that made an interesting story work.

You completely missed the part where I deliberately said in comparison to other fighting manga. Not that it matters.

Also, there is a vast difference between knowing and being fluent enough not to slip up and call someone a pig-faced dog who eats dung. Just because you know what this or that means, doesn't mean jack. Knowing of is not the mastery of. And you also didn't disprove my point that your thug gangster super martial

*faceplam.* Yeah, it's easy to point and aim, but what about storing and proper usage for your own safety? Or getting yourself used to the sound you don't deafen yourself? Recoil? Multiple targets? Moving targets? Just because you play Halo and other FPS a lot doesn't mean you know jack about guns.

Yeah, sword fighting is hard, but unless you're a friggin' wonder at it like Kuno, you're not gonna be that well versed at it. And, like I said, Akane got trampled by Shampoo. There's no reason that Shampoo wouldn't improve too. Therefore, end of manga Shampoo still tramples end of Manga Akane. Here's a little math: If your oc is at Akane's level. And someone at Akane's level, you know, Akane herself, gets trampled by Shampoo. Therefore, your OC would get trampled by Shampoo. You can't say that the OC will be at Akane's level AND LOSE TO KUNO and yet say she can fight Shampoo to a standstill, which, unless you have some magic time travelling from 20 years in the future Akane, Akane can't do. Sorry, your OC won't be able to fight Shampoo to a standstill.

And yes, improbable because she's what, 17? 18? And versed in firearms, swordfighting, and some form of martial art to the level of Akane? All while becoming fluent in Japanese? And able to avoid the authorities and escape to another country? All while have a tragic background of being transgendered? Uh....NO. This is bad because there's no way she could go through all this and still do all that. It's just not possible. No wait, let me guess, she trained at all this from an early age? Riiiiiiiight. Uh-huh. Suuuuuuuuuuuure.

Just don't and say you did. It's still bad. Will remain bad. You obviously can't see beyond the perceivied glory of your idea to recognize its flaws, rose tinted glasses such as they are.

I didn't miss it. I was hoping you could tell the difference that this is not 'other fighting manga'. I'm not writing a fic or crossover with other manga, so I won't comment on it. Closest to other manga i've read is Bastard, and as much as I like the story I don't think Ranma and Bastard universe crossovers are a good idea.

I know that there is a huge difference, especially with Japanese. While yes Dani i fluent in Japanese, Rachel is not. She can speak it, but not read it. Rachel will know as well just a touch of mandarin. Just enough to get the gist of what is being said. Course that is a reversal of my own knowledge in RL. Marik you also didn't read the other posts so here is why Dani knows Japanese, her grandmother taught her. Course her grandmother has her own secrets so I can't reveal why she would teach it. But Dani is asian descent, which is why she can blend into the population. If she wasn't, she would be picked up by the authorities because she stood out to much. If you want details please check those links.

Now the gun part I take just a bit of offense at. Please don't assume that my experience with guns is limited to a firing range or FPS games. I know i'm a woman but with the war that has been waged for the last several years, keep in mind that several people out there are fully trained in firearms. I'm one of them. Now again certain things happen so that she gets her training as well. You do realize that a big problem in cities now is former gang members coming back from the military passing on their training to their gangs. I don't think it would be a far stretch to have Dani get the same kind of training from her gang leader.

Sword fighting against a martial artist is different then hand to hand. Don't believe me? Try fighting someone with a knife. A sword, especially a Katana, is a slashing weapon. Fists cause Bludgeoning damage, which to an extent is not as bad usually as a cut. Please don't argue this point, I saw enough of both types of wounds after my stint in the service.

Now granted that Shampoo is also versed in weapon fighting, still, weapons raise the threat level of any fight. So even with both armed, the fight becomes more dangerous the closer the two combatants lvls. Next comes the style of fighting. Shampoo fights straight up usually, but if you have been in a street fight you would know that whatever can be used to injure your opponent will be used. This means that someone used to streetfights isn't as worried about fighting 'fair'. So even with no guns, dirty tricks would abound. If you don't follow the 'rules' its easy to topple a stronger opponent. Case in point is every major battle won by lesser numbers against overwhelming odds. History proves the point time and again. So yes, in a FAIR FIGHT Dani would lose, but she doesn't fight fair. Another point I can make is that i've seen handguns used as brass knuckles, and gun fights getting the fighters much closer then conventional fighting. So if you really want to argue it, street fights in America could be considered their own 'style'. I even saw the odd sword or two, thou not used out in the open usually. Be thankful you have never seen an actual fight, its something I would not like to see again.

Your point about being transgendered is a bit insulting, but for even more personal reasons. Being a transexual is a part of someone yes. It can have overreaching parts to their entire life, but it is not what defines them. I've done more then most people my age, and i'm still a transsexual. It is also possible to have other things going on in ones life then being transexual. The extent that this affects my life day to day is how I interact with people, take my pills, and how I dress in the morning. This still leaves plenty of time for my morning run, schoolwork, actual work, and practicing for the fencing team. So other then the social interactions, which can turn out extremely bad, there is no reason she could not have have the skills she does.

If you really have such misgivings, please instead tell me how I can make it better. Or another idea is to please let me actually start posing the story and give me constructive criticism before you tell me how horrible it is. Your complaints are against an OC who can fight, but what about the OC who uses magic and archery? Or the Cop from America? There is more to the story then just Dani, a lot more.

My complaints are against a poorly thought out OC with poorly thought out excuses given to the veener of pretend intellect. Fanfiction has never, will never, and should never be about how wicked awesome your OC is, and all these tacked on flaws don't really amount to a hill of beans. You have no clue of what you're doing, so stop. Also, convenient backstory excuse that just so happens to explain everything. Hurray, what's next, she's Ranma's long lost cousin? Get real. And Jennifer doesn't matter, as she's not the one who's the super sepcial awesome gun toting sword wielding authorities slipping martial arts gangster billingual badass with tranny baggage. Right. Yeah, that sounds like a greeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeat idea. *rolls eyes.*

Good, because I took offense at the notion that any idiot can become highly proficient with a gun just by pick one up and pointing. If it were that easy, why would we even bother rigorous months of training for our military in the use and care of firearms? The war, your gender, and whatever other bs you put up to cover your backtrack is irrelevent and idiotic. It has everything to do with you flippantly stating something in total ignorance of what you're really saying. Also, gender card? Puh-lease.

*facepalm.* You don't get my point. YOU.DON'T.LEARN.MARTIAL.ARTS.THAT.EFFING.EASILY. It takes a minute to learn to swing a knife, it take months to master how to attack with it without getting dropped like a doofus. Wounds and such have nothing to do with anything I said. Well, if you can't make see where you screwed everything up I guess you would invent a non-existent point to try and make yourself look smarter.

Shampoo vs. Akane isn't a fair fight. Or did the fact that Shampoo put a bib on and washed Akane's hair in the span of a few seconds while hitting a series of specialized pressure points in the perfect sequence to make her forget about Ranma fly past your head and make you believe it was fair? She could have just jammed a sword into the base of her neck and be done with it. Shampoo is far beyond Akane's level. Oh ho, the old, well they won't fight fair argument. A classic. Not that it matters, as Shampoo is very easily of fighting dirty too, or did the explosive laden weapons she gave to Mousse strike you as a fighting fair? And again, your OC is also a street brawler. Why not make her a secret djinn and be able fly too? Since you just like adding more and more accolades and improbable stuff to her.

It's supposed to be. Transgenderism is a very serious thing and all that good jazz, but again, if you're making such a virbrant busting well round main character of an OC, why put her in Ranma 1/2 at all? You're failing to see that the idea of mixing said OC and Ranma 1/2 as bad. You could easily cut them out, and have a nice crook vs. cop, Catch Me If You Can style joyride around the world. Make a real book out of it and make yourself some money. I don't see why you think you have to jam them into Ranma 1/2.

That's all. Seriously, Your primary OC is your typical stock OC who will walk into Nerima and take over everything, as everything will center on how THEY react to HER and what SHE does. It'll be about HER and not about the Ranma cast. I'll say it again, you may think you're different, but I guarantee you the first chapter will entirely be about Dani and introducing her to the audience. And then you'll realize you've fallen into the same trap as everyone else who tries an OC. Maybe it'll be when Dani cracks off one of your favorite one line, or acts out a favorite scene of yours you'll see.

Ranma 1/2 + your idea = chocolate covered turd. No matter how you spin it, it'll still be a turd. But go ahead, write and post and recieve all the empty adulation from people who believe you have to say nice things and smile at everything. This is real criticism, not some fluff they feed you at school. The only way to improve the idea is to divorce the OC from Ranma. That's it. Constructive criticism done.

Now go back to Halo and pwn some n00bs. Or is it Fight Club night?

1. The difference between Akane and Shampoo is comparable to the difference between Ranma and a real world Black Belt. There is no comparison. Akane has one or two fights in the entire series, and she is quickly removed from the fight when she has them. Any improvement she may have is marginal. End of Manga Shampoo would still wipe the floor with End of Manga Akane. If the OC is at Akane's level, then just about everyone other than Akane will hand her her ass on a platter.

2. The OC is ridiculous, but that may be the point. It is, after all, an SI and OC. The SI wrote the OC, thus she's completely unbalanced. However, you should play up to that. Have the SI be practically worthless to balance out the overpowered OC, then have them both be generally confused by how well the OC does in the world. Do the exact opposite of the expected, having her being one upped, ignored and tossed aside frequently. Doing so would make the SI realize that in the 'real world,' such a character would not do as well as she had intended to write her. Oh, and make the SI realize she wrote the OC poorly. That'll help people accept the OC.

Interesting. So what you are suggesting is that a fight Dani is 'supposed' to win as was written by the SI she would instead lose? I think what you also mean by this is that Dani is more talk then she can put forth in the 'real world'? So in essence she was written to be a badass, but in actuality she turns out to be more like kuno. Until she goes bad of course.

Rachel is mostly worthless, yeah she has magic, but can maybe, maybe throw an attack spell or two before she collapses. She makes a better healer, but is still limited. I was thinking of it like trying to take a low voltage appliance and trying to run it off a high voltage line. Rachel's world had less 'free energy' or Ki as it stands. So her trying to draw in surrounding energy for a spell is dangerous and it almost kills her the first time she tries to draw in energy before she tires to compensate for it. The whole gun thing I think I might keep, as it is possible to get marksman status with a handgun as someone grows up. Especially if some of their extracurricular activities as a kid was paintball or something. It helped me at least when I grew up to be a medic and went to get marksman status in the service. But she is more of an intellectual then a fighter and that was her role in the plot. I'm not trying to super power her, just drive home that this is not her world, and operates on a whole different level and rule system.

Interesting. So what you are suggesting is that a fight Dani is 'supposed' to win as was written by the SI she would instead lose? I think what you also mean by this is that Dani is more talk then she can put forth in the 'real world'? So in essence she was written to be a badass, but in actuality she turns out to be more like kuno. Until she goes bad of course.

Exactly.

As for the gun stuff...Where do they get the guns? Guns are illegal in Japan. And even if the gun comes with them from the insert, where do they get extra ammo? Skill with a gun will either be useless or rapidly become useless, as getting guns and bullets isn't really possible in Japan, especially a place like Nerima.

I was thinking that the guns and ammo would be provided by a black market dealer to at least Dani and maybe Rachel as well. If not, then in the first major adventure Rachel would aquire one off a goon as the NWC attack the Yakutza stronghold to rescue Akane. (hope i spelled that right) Either way, the use of guns wasn't to be used often. Rachel as she prefers not to fight at all, and Dani because she has a code of sorts, ambiguous as it is sometimes. Dani would also realize that in situations such as her fight with Shampoo, it would invalidate her win. So mostly gunplay comes into the story when the two would be dealing with something supernatural or in cases such as the assult above.

Only the Yakuza have guns in Japan. No "lol black market" because guns are scarce. Even police in Japan rarely carry guns. And if your characters jacked guns off of Yakuza, if your characters fired off a single shot, the media and police would be all on it, since guns are really really really rare. Even in Ranmaverse, they can't ignore that.

Ok first of all ignore realism, this is a Ranma 1/2 fic and reality has no place here. Kuno can split a tree in half with a sword, Ryoga can splinter a boulder as big as a van with his index finger, Ranma can pull roasting chestnuts out of an open fire without burning his hands, so anything is possable.

Secondly ignore Mariks comments about language, it doesn't matter how Dani knows Japanese. There are pleanty of good fics out there that have the entire Ranma cast all speaking perfect english (the hardest lanuage in the world to learn as a second lanuage) with no rhyme nor reason, its unimportant.

Thirdly the dumber the reason the better the fic. If Dani is strong give a few nasty painful and funny training methods to explain why, check out 'to tell a hawk from a handsaw' for the landing of the drunken owl method or use some of the old fanon methods like running from wild wolves with stakes tied Dani's back or blocking rail spikes while blindfolded and wearing earplugs. If it sounds stupid and dangerious then it should work.

Fourthly balance, if the story is supposed to be comedic then 70% of your content should be comedic. But the serious stuff in sparsly and with plenty of comedy in between. If Dani has had a crappy childhood inject some comedy into it, her mother looked like a man complete with groucho type wiskers. On the street her gang called her mom, a strange homeless drunk obsessed with cheese raised her and taught her a powerful but stupidly named move i.e chedder bullet fist.

Fithly guns, once again don't go for realisim here. Yes it is true that guns arn't legal in Japan and are scarce, but who cares this is fiction. Check out Mana Tatsumiya from negima or Black Dragons Guardian and Millenium fics for ideas. Come up with stupid reasons for her being able to obtain the guns and ammo, they were meant for Hamas and she recieved them in the mail instead, she makes her own from scrap metal using the anything goes school of rapid smelting and construction, she gets them from darkstalkers B.B.Hood as a birthday present.

Power level, if she seems over powered give her a really stupid weakness. Like being afraid of Parmisan Cheese, or an obsession with colour khaki. Then have her kicking ass till the weakness comes up and she gets pummled in hilerious fashion ala Happosai and underwear and being beaten by a mob of woman. Otherwise make her generally weak and give her a one punch knock out move the supprises everyone ala fanon Akanes mallet. Otherwise go with Ryo's idea 'having her being one upped, ignored and tossed aside frequently'.

Finally remember this is your story, do what you want. Ignore the pureists and go with what you think is right and makes sense. Try not to co-tow to those who hate SI's and OC fics as well as the we hate OOC and only Canon makes a fic crowd, unless your a part of it and thats what you wanty to do. If you are worried about your OC over crowding the fic then just use the equal screen method. For every paragraph Dani gets give a paragraph to Ranma. Just to re-iterate this is YOUR fic do what you want, if it doesn't work you can always change it.

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