'The Queen... I think we might just want to label her a "lost cause" at this point. She may become too overpowering, but I think that is what this story is going to need. If you wanted to gentle her out, maybe you could write a conversation or have a monologue with her showing at least some love for her daughter. A maternal conversation/ monologue if you will. This will show more of the origional character she was, but it must be done carefully to not soften her too much.'

Yes, that was the plan. It is difficult to write about her. I want to protray her as the disturbed mother that focuses by far too much on her child. Her husband was very close to her, I suppose her true love, and to have him killed completely shattered her. In her hair, she sees the way to revenge, but she also sees something so precious, so cherished, she must go to all costs to protect. Hence, the killing of Lady Astrum in the first chapter.

She will sustain a sort of facade in front of her Council, portraying the perfect Queen: wise, just, strong. Behind closed doors, she will be consumed by her desire to see the opposite side fall, to see her own line rise above.

She's a complicated character, but her love for her heir must always be shown, no matter how dark the scene. That is her only thread keeping her from insanity.

In the end, I am not sure how she will fare, but the cold hands of the earth seem to be fitting.

Not quite the same, but something you might want to look into. Anyway, I queen will be a very hard character to write. It would be nice to know how much of her we are going to see. Then we can see how much of her we will need to develope. If you don't use her very much, we won't need to explain her feelings as much. We could label her as power hungary.

Or for a twist, if you don't know exactly which way you're going with this, you could make Serenity something of a "human sacrifice." Her mother could be setting her up to be just like the old queen was, in a kind of hunt for immortality. You could even make it literal and have her be trying to get her daughter ready to sacrifice her body so that the queen could live anohter eon or so.

That may sound a bit crazy... but think about it, at least the first part. Her trying to force her image on her daughter so that no one forgets her when she was queen might work. It might make her a bit more insane, but it could show a great love for her daughter because she will be the next role model of a generation. I don't know if we can keep her sane and desperately conserned about her daughter at the same time...

Oh, the Queen will be in most every character regarding the S.A.C. I plan to have her in at least cameos, to sort of portray a hidden doom looming over the protaganist.

I was actually toying with the idea of having the Queen do something like that, but I set it aside, thinking it too dificult. Now that you brought it up, though, it does seem to be a good idea. I apologize for cutting this short.

Well, I have been thinking that deep down, she is actually out for revenge and power. When members of the L.Clan choose a partner, they develop a very deep bond and the shattering of such a bond could potentially be harmful. I suppose this is the side effect that she received.

Your idea of making her want to sacrifice her daughter to live longer; I have thought about it, but Selenity has lived a long life, as mentioned in the primary chapter. Serenity herself is nothing but a newborn compared to all the other members of the Clan. Selenity is just making her better - not only for prosterity's sake, but mainly for her own schemes.

I toyed with the idea of having Selenity be cursed and she is trying to make a dream or something come true at a faster pace. Looking back, I am not sure of what I was going to do with this idea...

Selenity loves her daughter...OBSESSIVELY. That is what will cause her insanity, if not also the loss of her partner.

Any comments?

She does want revenge for what happened and is trying to completely take over Serenity's mentality. I was thinking of maybe giving the Golden Alliance a special trinket that Selenity believes belongs with the Lunarian Clan. With the destruction of the Golden, Selenity is free to claim this item. She cannot do it on her own, for she does not have that youthful energy that Serenity seems to have in excess.

That is another idea, by the way: Selenity could just be jealous that is was her daughter and not her that inherited so much power - maybe an ancestor wielded the power and it was passed on through the generations and it was highly likely that the power would be given to Selenity, but it did not happen.

Sorry for the tangent.

The idea of protecting her daughter would sound like Selenity...A killing spree would also be in character, but Selenity would find a way to cover up her involvement.

And start a new thread for the object. I have some crazy ideas about it.

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