Sorry this is posted late, but I had to wait until February 3, 2006 to post my chapters because I was somehow breaking regulations ::shrugs:: if you want to read more about it, check out my post "IMPORTANT! Amnesia has been removed!" post. I let it all of my chest in that post.

This chapter turned out to be 9 pages long. This is one of my favorite chapters cause it introduces my favorite OC of the story, Koku. Once you read the chapter you'll learn why I like him so much. Other than that no big news, except my new website is coming along a lot better. Hopefully it will be ready in March. Right now, DatBoyScrooge.com is hosted by GeoCities, but I have a good host in mind that's going to allow me to do a lot more to the site and have members continue coming back. Hopefully you all will enjoy it as well.

Here it is, I hope you all enjoy Chapter 4 and as always please R&R.

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Reviewer's Comments to Entrapment: Ryokai's Diary: Chapter 3

AvatarZERO

2006-02-02

ch 4, reply Hm...

this is a really good story, Especially since i like Ayane.

Which brings me to my current dillema,

I believe you stated this story will be about a dozen chapters long and updated monthly

This story was published last October,

so im assuming it will end sometime this fall

...which is several months from now

I have two weeks before i join the U.S. Air Force

So... this means I have to obtain a laptop.

I dont have a thousand dollars just lyin around, which brings me to one unfortunate conclusion...

I got to go steal a laptop...

Congratulations on turning an aspiring young soldier to a life of crime.

Yes your story is that good...

And if you dont finish it, I will hunt you down, take my stolen laptop and shove it someplace unpleasent.

That is all

~AvatarZERO~

WOW!!!! I'm glad you are liking it that much. I have been putting more into this story for the simple fact I have to keep the chapters longer since it's only a monthly post. But hey if reading this story leads you to a life of crime stealing laptops, just make sure you steal me one... =P i've been wanting a laptop for years now. hehehe - Please keep reading, it gets a lot better.

SugoiByoshin

2006-01-07

ch 4, reply I must've had a lapse of sanity in almost forgetting about this one. Maybe cuz its monthly and i also tend to forget when Lei-Lei goes ape crazy at me for simply asking if she can wash the dishes for once, but either way, reading three chapters in one day is an amazing feat for one such as myself! Dam 5th grade reading level and all. So Nature's course destroyed the two young ladies battle in the sacred meadow? Then it was restored...hm, thats interesting. And now grave robbers?! I'd suspect Bayman but thats just me. I dunno how hard it would be to see my own dead body, but i admire Ayane's courage. Oh, and if Ryokai wants a wooden coffin and not just a plastic bag, he best stop talking back to Hayate like that, hehe, =).

lol, wow...sounds like the story had you stuck as well, you basically summarized the whole story in a few words. now be sure to read this chapter...the interesting OC named Koku, a blind ninja...hehehe and that boy is a badass. lol. One reason why I can say I like this story is because it's all done in first-person. not an easy feat when someone is trying to describe everything to you. oh and btw, let Lei Fang wash the dishes man...don't you want to see her all soapy and wet........oooo better yet, make her wear that french maid's outfit you got her for her b-day, then sit back and just watch. =)

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