Got a bit of news on Dokugumo-Ureeru Tsurugi. It's taking a big turn for the better. I believe I now know how many chapters there will be and I know exactly how the story will end. This story will reach a possible 35 chapters (maybe less, most likely more), and for a spoiler...we won't meet Mitsuri (the top-notch boss of the Black Spider Clan) until around Chapter 20. Now for the next few chapters, I'm going to be interchanging the POVs. Without spoiling the story, I want to give some background information out on Mishu as well as providing the insight of the other characters to the readers. It's all part of my interaction that will play a big part in the chapters to come.

Here is Chapter 14 to Dokugumo-Ureeru Tsurugi (and to think, we're not even half-way finished with the story, lol) - Hope you all enjoy it and as always please R&R.

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Reviewer's Comments to Dokugumo-Ureeru Tsurugi: Chapter 13:

Thunderxtw

2006-02-17

ch 17, reply Great. Ayane is free of the weirdo's control. I thought Ryu would have killed her, but then again, we all know that wouldnt happen. I still snicker at the thought of her being naked. Its just funny to me. I dont know. I guess I'm strange.

Well, drop another update soon, friend!

Are you sure you're finding it funny or is it the image you get of seeing that sexy female fightning naked? hmmmmm...lmao j/k. Now Ayane's free, she woke up into a serious tantrum, and now Mishu is leaving the group. What do I have planned out next? hehehe...only time will tell, but I can promise it will be worth the wait. Take care and thanks for the review. =D

DOAgirl

kitkatmeo2007@yahoo.com.au

2006-02-17

ch 17, anon. Nice story, iam waiting to see the next chap

Hey and welcome. Foremost, thank you so much for your review and I hope you enjoy this chapter and the new ones to come. There's a lot that's going to be revealed in this story and I hope you don't miss out. =)

Lady_Midnight

2006-02-15

ch 17, anon. WOW! There really are no words to express how awesome this chapter was. I was TOTALLY into it and at the very end...ah! IT WAS SO GOOD! Great job once again on character portrayl...you're incredably talented.

WOW! Thanks again so much and I'm glad to see you have been enjoying the story as much as you have. Please continue to read on and see what's new in story for the groups.

Hassun

2006-02-13

ch 17, reply Good fight!

Mishu suddenly seems a lot weaker than Ayane and Ryu, although that's probably because he was holding back against DokonAyane.

I can't wait to see how Ayane will react when she wakes up and hears what her real body has been doing while she was being mentally abused.

That could cause some serious trauma...

You're right Hassun, Ayane definitely did wake up on the wrong side of the bed. Now everyone knows just how serious and demented the Black Spider Clan truly is. This is definetly going to take a new lead onto things in the upcoming chapters.

As for Mishu being weak, you're right again. Even though I was trying to portray that Mishu was a strong fighter, I was having him hold back A LOT due to the fact, well of course, he didn't want to kill Ayane, but I'm glad to see you was able to see. Thanks a bunch for reviewing AGAIN and hope you are enjoying the story.

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