I finally got my new Ayane FMV done, and I'm going to start posting it tomorrow. Just as soon as I take care of a few minor edits, but it looks to have turned out great. I spent most of my weekend working on it (as well as the past few weeks) and it'll finally be ready tomorrow.

As far as the story goes, we've been making great progress, starting the next chapter, we will finally be seeing Ein enter and participate into the DOA Tourney. And I'm taking a different route with the tournament as to which I will explain in the next Author's Note. So say goodbye to Hitomi for now. She'll still be in the story pretty regulary, but just not as active as she was in the first 10 chapters. Hope you all enjoy the "Goodbye"

And as always please R&R....it's much appreciated.

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Reviewer's Comments to Amnesia: Chapter 9:

Arm-Slave

2005-12-31

ch 9, reply Just started reading this fic, and I really like it. I'm a fan of Hit/Ein so you get extra points for that. But after playing DOA4, there's something I need to ask: HOW DID YOU KNOW!

WAIT!!! WHAT DID I KNOW!!! What did I get right from DOA4? Was Ein (Hayate) really beating to a bloody pulp from DOATEC? Did Hitomi and Ein really fall in love? YOU GOT ME CURIOUS!!! What did I get right?

As much as I would love to say I already knew the DOA4 storyline, because Itagaki sent me a first-class plane ticket to play against a human Ayane model (grins mischeviously), I must say that I know very little on the DOA4 storyline. Hopefully I'll be able to get the 360 & DOA4 this month, but for now this is all my own interpretation. So please respond and let me know what did I get right from the game. =D

Colleen

2005-12-28

ch 4, anon. Pretty nice. BUT! I didn't really enjoy the way u made Hitomi. She doesn't seem to be either of those types u mentioned. She is less annoying than the non-stop rambling girl u made.

But overall, it was ok.

First off, thanks so much for the review. I'm glad you are enjoying it, aside from my derived Hitomi personality. In a way, I can see what you mean about making her this annoying girl, but I wanted to create an unusual characteristic about Hitomi that Ein was attracted to. I wanted to provide something different, rather than the same ol' beautiful, extravaggant, wonderful woman, that any man would be attracted, I wanted to come up with something that's rare and different that'll help keep the reader interested in seeing the relationship progress. Hope that explains it and I hope you continue to read on. It gets a lot better.

Eyes of Brown

2005-12-26

ch 9, anon. great chapter! i'm a little disappointed that it was so short but hey, beggers cant be choosers...

hehehe, yeah sorry for the short chapter, I'm trying to make the next few longer without adding any useless information. I try to get as much of the useful stuff in without rambling, and some chapter (VERY UNFORTUNATE) end up being short. But it's finally getting to the good stuff and I can promise the chapters will be getting longer. Believe me, I don't like short chapters either...hehehe. Ein is heading out for the tournament, and I, personally, think I did a pretty good job at challenging Ein's & Hitomi's relationship while he is out searching for who he is. Just wait until you see the new chapters posted =D.

Thunderxtw

2005-12-26

ch 9, reply Cool. Now the DOA tournament is coming into play. Nice. You set the mood perfect with the conflict between the two, with Ein wanting to go join the tourney and Jonas being against it. That's kind of mean for Jonas to hold back his daughter like that. I know he cares for her, but I don't think he should make her believe she is allowed to participate and then later announces she can't. I hate it when parents do that all the time. It gets rather annoying.

I like the ending too. I can tell Ein can't wait to get back at Lisa for what she and the guards did to him while they held him captive.

Well, I'm off. Update soon cause I'm looking forward to the next part.

I can understand where Jonas is coming from. First off the tournament is called "Dead Or Alive", that's not a tournament I would want my daughter to attend. And if it was my daughter and I knew that other women were prancing around wearing practically nothing, then I wouldn't want her to go, even if she tells me she just wants to fight. Oh well, I think I would be overprotective like Bass...hehehe

Between me and you (and whoever else is reading this =P), I want to see the responses from Chapter 12 - COMING SOON!! ;)

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