Okay the morons who have been leaving bad comments on my fanfiction here's a news flash! They were written two or three years ago my writing has improved! So don't bother commenting on things from three years ago there is NO POINT!
And to Poison Pen to answer your questions:
1. Please don't write like it's a script. Fanfic is for writting. Later on, this story WILL be flammed because of it's writting style. Literaly no action is put into the story and It's mostly words. You did do a good job of incorporating the canon characters personalities into your story.
My writing has been flamed, I only wrote in the script format because I saw other members writing like that and I thought it was O.K. Secondly there was no action because I was still learning how to write, combining action and words was difficult for me. I'm sure at one point your fanfiction was crap!
2. Japanesse and English. Don't put them together, it's just annoying. If it's an English show, use ENGLISH NAMES, and don't use moves you saw from anime shows! That's a bit sad.
Think about Japanese and English, Kuki Sanban is Japanese and she has a Japanese name in an English show, also I'd like to point out that Sakura is a commonly used name in Japan and to me it's a bit sad that your spelling sucks!
I have a question too...How come the title is She's Back, when she never left? she just joined...
She's back in another fan fiction.
Oh and one more thing to Poison Pen and all the other flamers out there, if the people who are on your black list have such horrible fanfiction, then why don't you have any fanfiction on your account are you afraid you might get flamed?
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