Author has written 3 stories for My Little Pony, and Code Geass.
--Profile v2 currently under construction ;)--
Hello! My name is Rarity, or Royale, or RR, or my real name Emma. I'm a fifteen year old Aussie girl who likes neat handwriting, cookie dough and the colour orange, and dislikes basketball and aggravating people.
I am a concritter and a proud member of Critics United. If you have any issues you want to take up with my group, or you just want to have a look around our forum, please go here.
I also write (or at least, try to write) my own stories, mostly one-shots, although I would like to write a multi-chapter fic soon. Please feel free to give me some constructive criticism, if you have any!
I will try to help out with anything, but my main fandom is My Little Pony. Other works that I am familiar with include Pokemon, Glee, Neon Genesis Evangelion, Azumanga Daioh, Gravitation, Code Geass, Haruhi Suzumiya, Durarara, Happy Tree Friends and Battle Royale.
If you would like me to beta or review for you, just send me a message!
Rarity's 10-Minute Guide to Making Your My Little Pony FanFic Freakin' Amazing:
This section is under construction.
1) Proofread and check over everything before you click publish.
This is actually a site rule. Spell check all story and poetry. There is no excuse for not performing this duty. Proofread all entries for grammar and other aspects of writing before submission. 'Hot off the press' content is often riddled with errors.
They're completely correct. Nobody wants to struggle to get through a story that doesn't make the slightest bit of sense, and it editing doesn't take as long as you think.
Before you publish your chapter, read it to yourself and make sure that everything flows properly. Check for spelling mistakes. If English isn't your first language or you absolutely suck at spelling and grammar, use an online spell checker or find a beta reader who will help you.
And one last note -there will always be at least one mistake you miss, and you will always find it the very first time you read through the story after you publish it.
2) If you're writing a 'Human in Equestria' story it better be damn good.
I'm going to very blunt here: Most 'Human in Equestria' stories are not that great. Maybe the first person to write one was being clever and original but the rest are not. Why? Well for starters, most of them are self-inserts. That is, the human character is basically the author ponified, and that just doesn't make for good entertainment. The reality is, you're boring, and no one wants to read about your life. That's just the way it goes.
The other reason is that many of them are extremely cliched and predictable. Usually the human character ends up getting together with one of the Mane Six -Rainbow Dash and Rarity seem to be the most popular for this. Other cliche's include: Twilight/Celestia spells-gone-wrong opening up a portal to Equestria, Discord or some other villian returning and the human hero having to defeat them, and incredibly awkward, icky sex scenes.
That being said, if you have a HiE idea that is so mind-blowingly spectacular and original that it will blow every other story out of the water, go for it. Just make sure that you know what you're doing and how you will make it work.
3) Summary is everything.
How many times have you seen a story in the archive where the summary is something like this:
"16 year old Jim wakes up in Equestria one day and gets the Mane Six to help him find his way home."
"I'm bad at summaries sorry but please read it's about my OC."
"this is my 1st story plz read and reveiw"
Summaries like this are not going to earn you readers. What will earn you readers is a clear, concise summary that lets us know what your story is about. If you're struggling, try picking out a section of text that best describes the story and use that as a summary.
And going back to point one, make sure your summary and title are free from spelling and grammar errors! Each word in the title needs to start with a capital, unless it is a conjunction like 'and' 'the' 'a', etc.
Wrong: pinkie pie and the great sugarcube corner robbery
Wrong: Pinkie Pie and the Grate Sugarcube Corner Robery
Wrong: PINKIE PIE AND THE GREAT SUGARCUBE CORNER ROBBERY
Right: Pinkie Pie and the Great Sugarcube Corner Robbery
Never, ever say any of the following in a summary:
"This is my first story!" -If you say this, people will automatically assume it's bad, and you don't want to scare away readers, do you?
"Please review!" -You don't say? People will think you're begging for attention.
"No flames!" -Seriously? This is just inviting flames in.
"I'm bad at summaries, sorry" -Again, potential readers will assume it means the story is as bad as the summary.
And remember to spell check! Again, if this isn't your strong point, use on online or ask someone to help you.
4) If your story features an OC, for the love of Celestia DON'T make them a Sue.
A lot of bronies like to invent their own original characters, or OCs. It's fun to create your own character, especially when you can actually make them with Pony Creator and similar software. There's nothing wrong with this.
But a lot of peoples OCs are what we refer to as 'Mary Sues,' or 'Gary Stus' if they are male. The short definition of a Sue is a character who is boring. The longer definition is that they are a ponification of the author or who they would like to be. Usually the author has no idea that their character is a Sue until someone points it out to them.
Sure signs of a Mary Sue/Gary Stu
-Unusual coat, mane or wing markings: How many solid black ponies have you seen in the show? I can think of exactly one (Thunderlane), and his coat is closer to dark grey than black. Black would largely clash with Equestria's overall palette. If you want your pony to be solid black, ask yourself just why you want them to look this way. If you answered 'because it looks cool' then you probably have a Sue on your hooves.
Same goes with mane colours. Apart from Rainbow Dash and Celestia, there is no pony who has more than two colours in their mane. If they do have a third colour, it will be in very limited amounts, like Twilight's pink and purple streak in her mane and tail.
If your character is a pegasus, for goodness sake don't give them dragon wings or anything like that. It looks stupid and it would be very unlikely to happen in the MLP universe. Yes, I know that Luna's guards have dragon wings. Why don't you write a story about them instead of giving your own character bizarre features?
-Alicorns: Unless your character is royalty, they should not be having both wings and a horn. If they are royalty, make us believe that they are royal. Enough said.
-Dark and tragic past: Common cliches involve abusive parents, friendless childhoods and accidentally killing the one they love. Please, unless it is absolutely crucial to your character, try and think of different motivations for your characters thoughts and behaviours.
The abusive childhood route is probably the most overused example, as it is a lazy way of showing that your character is shunned or that they have difficulty interacting with other people. And since most people didn't grow up in an abusive home, and therefore have never actually experienced what they are writing about, the description reads as unnatural and unbelievable. This goes double if you're planning on making your character a victim of sexual abuse and have never actually experienced anything like that -some portrayals can come of as incredibly offensive if it is clear that the author has no idea what they are talking about, and most authors don't realise this until someone else points it out to them.
That's not to say that you can't use abuse as backstory, or that only victims of abuse can. Just make sure you do your research -look up stories from victims on the internet and make sure that you understand exactly how an abuse victim feels, and remember this as you write. Realism is the key.
-Hooking up with one of the Mane Six, a Princess or a popular background character:
-Everypony loves them/Spotlight stealing:
-The only one who can save the world:
Unsafe External Link