Longtime reader, more recently writer of fanfiction. Fandoms: Buffy/Angel, Harry Potter, Torchwood.I also have an account under the same username at fictionpress.com for my original fiction.

Feedback of a single word or more gratefully accepted. Detailed feedback very gratefully accepted.

I lost everything I had written and was in the process of writing in 2010, and have suffered some major writer's block since then. I am beginning to write again, but am only working on a few short stories.

In the House of Slytherin (revised 9/12/11)

This will go from first through seventh year. Something happens to a young Harry; he ends up growing up away from the Dursley's under another name. The wizarding world does not know where he is and what happened to him, and do not recognize him when he finally comes to their attention.

Events in the timeline will deviate from Canon. The version that is up is a draft, and already-posted parts may be changed. I will change the title and description to remove the draft status when it's done.

I am currently working on this fic, but am having to do some revisions to the plot due to discovering that I was incorrect about something that an early part of the plot hinged on.

A few things that drive me nuts when I read them, in no particular order:

"Person A speaks." Person B takes action.
"Person B speaks."

I know people were taught to 'make a new paragraph when a new person speaks, but that presumes either pure dialog or that speaking precedes action. A better way to say it is to 'make a new paragraph when you change to a new person'. The correct (and much less confusing to the reader) way to do this is:

"Person A speaks."
Person B takes action. "Person B speaks."

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Preformed. The word you want is 'performed'. Perform is when you do something; preform ("pre-form") is when something is formed ahead of time. Coin wrappers, pond liners, and most things made out of plastic are preformed; a task is performed.