Great just when I thought things couldn't get worse you go and make the Twins of all people smart. You have doomed us all.

So cute and Awkward moment for Elsa and Hiccup

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The last few chapters were a bit exposition heavy for my tastes and I hope that the plot begins moving along soon. That being said as a whole I've quite enjoyes your story and look forward to more.

Story should be rated K rather than T, since treason is ok with a group of warriors that are willing to resort to armed thievery if need be. Oh and since treason is seen as justifiable, I guess stealing, lying, and everything else short of killing should be punished with a time out. Because that's how Vikings in the middle of a civil war act right? Or how an overtly stressed leader who is forced to kill his own clansmen reacts, right? I'd love to be 6 again so I can live in this world, where the most evil thing you could do was not let someone join in on a game.

I think I'm rereading this story again, but I'd didn't realize state secrets were openly discussed with potential rival leaders. I also didn't realize Vikings tolerated any form of insubordination, something about showing weakness etc. I think of kids who act bad in public, parents have to be way more severe with the punishment. Like stealing a cookie from the cookie jar compared to stealing a candy bar from a store. If the kids are not raised right, it shows. Same type of case with the twins and Hiccup. If personal advisors want to seek outside help against the leader's consul, he has a right to be pissed. If no doesn't mean no, how can you lead a country, much less one that's already divided? I like how you framed the story, but it's completely uh "Disney Channel" type of writing, rather than the more mature theme I think you are going for.

This is really good! There were a few times where words were mixed around and I had to re-read it a few times to understand it, but other than that, its awesome! I know its been just over a year since an update, but I do hope you'll continue this. You've set up an amazing plot and I really do hope it'll see its ending.

Can't wait for more, should you decide to update!

Lovely story, plot and character development...now why haven't you updated? Continue with the story please!

So... you are dead or alive?

It has been a year since I've started reading this story... And until now, I'm still waiting for the updates. But still, awesome story dude:)

You're story is too good. This isn't fair. I have half a mind to write you a strongly worded PM about this!

dude I first read this story like last year and it still hasn't updated yet IT'S A REALLY GOOD STORY YOU MUST UPDATE

What's with the bionicle reference at the beginning of chapter 5?

this is a great story so far and I'm eager to see where it leads

Keep it up

Draconous S.