Reviews for Observations: The Investor
Guest chapter 1 . 2/21
Love it. Well written.
annejoy chapter 1 . 6/11/2017
I enjoyed this very much. It's unusual POV was a great choice.
Thank you!
Doc Yewll chapter 1 . 1/3/2015
Quantos filhos? Me perdi...
HalfjeFijnVolkoren chapter 1 . 5/16/2014
"I wondered if she was even literate" put an evil smile on my face. I loved this story, it's original and extremely well written. Thank you! Keep writing!
JamieRobs chapter 1 . 2/1/2014
I can't believe I loved a story where KJ is barefoot & pregnant! This story was so witty and funny, It felt very much like the reader was in on the inside joke. Enjoyed it very much!
TKcloud9 chapter 1 . 1/29/2014
This is a marvelous story. As I was reading I could totally imagine this happening.
Lisa chapter 1 . 1/23/2014
I love it! I hope there is more to come :)
Chloe W chapter 1 . 1/18/2014
So cute! Kathryn so content to be caring for her beautiful family. Thanks for sharing. :)
gawilliams chapter 1 . 1/18/2014
This was great! I love how the whole story is developing, and can't wait to see how he deals with Janeway now that he knows who it was who had initially greeted him. Gregg.
Trish chapter 1 . 1/18/2014
I love this!
Missyhissy3 chapter 1 . 1/18/2014
I thought the perspective of your 'relatively junior executive' was very entertaining! :)
Laura W chapter 1 . 1/18/2014
How did I love this? Let me count the ways.

First, Point of View. I get fairly obsessive about point of view in my own writing, and so I'm always thrilled to find someone who takes it as seriously as I do. It's probably the only useful thing I learned in grad school: Choosing the right point of view and sticking with it religiously can make your story sing. You chose an unusual POV here and you adhered to it throughout. Kudos. And that leads me to...

Second, voice. The POV you chose led naturally to the voice. Dr. Fellows is an ass. That's clear from the outset. He's naive, prejudiced, self-important and intolerant, and that all comes out in his voice. Kudos again. But that leads me to...

Third, tone. Fellows is a jackass, but your tone is so playful that even when I wanted to hate him, I didn't. I was snickering to myself with each of his nasty little asides, just waiting for his comeuppance to, er, come up. That playfulness and humor propelled me through to the end of the story, when I suspected Kathryn would be revealed for who she really was. Kudos for that. Which leads me to...

Fourth, character. Bravo. I couldn't quite picture Kathryn Janeway barefoot and pregnant, until she informed Dr. Fellows that his first lesson would be patience. The Janeway we know from canon is not a patient person, which is partially why I couldn't picture her as barefoot and pregnant. But the patience comment told me that she'd changed, probably as a result of living on Trebus and raising children. And then I could picture her, no problem. And as for Chakotay smiling all the time as if everything he saw delighted him? That is a perfect little summation of how I think he would wind up. He found Kathryn delightful from the start; you can just see it in him in unguarded moments. He lost some of that along the way, but I would think that after their journey was over and after she agreed to live with him and raise a family with him, that delight in his life would come back. So kudos there as well.

All in all, just extraordinarily well done. A well-crafted treat of a story by any measure. Thank you for sharing your talent with us all!
Liz chapter 1 . 1/18/2014
Oh, I really enjoyed this. Excellent! Great imagery. :). Not to mention, a sequel to The Ring? yessssssss!
Ladymegs chapter 1 . 1/17/2014
Love!
Guest chapter 1 . 1/17/2014
I LOVE it! I hope she gives him the death glare! Please do another chapter! So ORIGINAL. Murphycat
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