|Reviews for All The Time We Have|
| Guest chapter 1 . 12/6/2014
Very nice! Continue!
| Loverofallthingsmusic chapter 1 . 5/31/2014
Nice job ;)
| heidipoo chapter 1 . 1/21/2014
That was pretty good for your first fanfic!
| cosmicfaerie chapter 1 . 1/20/2014
Just to let everyone know this is a oneshot. I wont be continuing this story.
| Yen chapter 1 . 1/17/2014
| Rhiannon S chapter 1 . 1/19/2014
I love your story. Will you writing more chapters?
| Guest chapter 1 . 1/18/2014
Good story! You should keep going! :-)
| LindseyDanielle725 chapter 1 . 1/17/2014
I think this could be really good! But I was a bit distracted by your format. In story style, when someone else speaks you start a new paragraph. For instance, in your first few lines where Effie askes if Katniss would like anything else to drink,
Katniss's reply should be in a completely separate paragraph/line.
"Would you like some more to eat?" Effie asked.
"I'm not hungry." Katniss replied.
That's the format anytime someone else speaks. Now if Effie had continued talking, her next lines would not have to be broken up like that. Only if the person speaking is different from the previous.
You also need to add paragraph breaks just for the flow of the story. Having no space in your writing can confuse the reader, and be a big distraction! I think you have the possibility of a good story here! You just need to look into getting a BETA. :)