|Reviews for The Metronome|
| Hiryo chapter 7 . 2h ago
A great chapter and great character development.
Still wonder how it goes further especially with Ranma and Rei . Want to know as well about the others. ;)
| suntan140 chapter 7 . 11h ago
awesome chapter wonder if rei will ever give them a chance? update soon
| Bookeater-otaku chapter 6 . 2/23
Still good. I like how Haruka meddle with Ranma and Rei. And the last general is a yakusa? Could be helpfull and not so much at the same time.
| Meech Macko chapter 6 . 2/16
Short chap...no probs here...
The only beef is, Ranma is still a damn womenizer Akane would be right about him bieng a casanova perv)...which does not fit his so called honourable personality...
I just hope he comes to his original character and comes out of the womenizing stage...there is absolutly no way Rei will like an immoral womeniser.
Ken seems to be on the good side of Rei...
| Bookeater-otaku chapter 5 . 2/13
I like Ranma new personality. Still obvious to situation around him, still arrogant but his new love of women and now is appreciation for fine clothe make him... interesting. Its like a normal evolution. He had women trouble, he goes around dating left and right. He was always dirt poor, he buys nice thing.
I dont know if is personnality turned for the worst or Ranma finally got a break from being the butt of the story but its interesting none the less.
I am pretty sure Hotaru 'death scythe' as name. You should do some reaserch and use the proper name of the Sailor Senshi attacks and items.
Ranma should do some of his old technique and you should make up new one. It would spice up the fights a little.
I liked Hotaru personality in this one. She seems realy mature. But she made a mistake: She called Ami by her name while she was in sailor senshi mode, giving away her identity to Ranma when she tryed to hide it. In general the girls call themselves by their alias when in costume so that the general population dont learn their name.
It was a good chapter and i hope the next one will come soon.
| Meech Macko chapter 4 . 2/4
It seems there are super powered OC here...if the are too super-powered they will turn into gary stu.
From what I can predict is; Rei will fall for this Metro guy and Ranma has to suffer even more heartbreak or rejection despite he only loved her in the past life...and this is present...Rei is maybe having initial attraction to Metro guy and its almost similar like Akane going mushy on Ryoga and not knowing of his curse.
IF Rei is anything like Akane...being too temperamental and untrusting. I seriously doubt Ranma being interested in another one too much like Akane.
It would seem fickle of Rei to fall for Metro OC here and then go for Ranma...
Is Kurama an OC...? or is he the Kurama from Yu Yu Hakusho.
I hope Ranma is the main character and not Kurama stealing the spotlight...hoping the OC wont tread to gary stu levels and upstage Ranma.
Ranma has more raw Skill and experience than Senshi who depend too much on Magic...in their NORMAL form they are not even Xian Pu's level Combat prowess.
Just my thoughts...
| Hiryo chapter 4 . 2/1
Huh I get confused a bit about the emotions of them changing so fast without reading why.
About 'Ken' being sheltered by Rei in the past was out so fast, would be nice to have been mentioned earlier and less confusing.
Anyway still am hungry for how this story develops and love still it
| pizzigri chapter 1 . 1/30
As a die hard Ranma and Sailor Moon fan, I do not agree at all with the reviews that you got in earlier chapters. Fanfiction is exactly this: an author's take on a story that features his (or hers) favorite fandom, characters and setting. It is up to you to make it or not OOC or different from canon as you like. It is up to the reader to appreciate it or not. In this case, I personally enjoy and like the premise, the setting and how the story is unfolding. I will wait for your updates!
All my best
| Hiryo chapter 3 . 1/28
lol I love how you wrote the fight scene as well about how the fight ended
Wondering only about the Senshi that they couldn't transform anymore which is kinda strange but waiting until you've explained that part
Looking forward to more chapters of yours!
| Ranmayamabushi chapter 2 . 1/23
Very interesting start
| Meech Macko chapter 2 . 1/22
It seemed rushed a bit but still ok bet Ranma NOT turning to a girl every fight which kinda ruined the heroic effect.
He could use a sword and Ki attacks as his weapon of choice than bare fists to fight Youma and pure fist fight would take longer to get effective than a sharp weapon that will do with quick work than punches.
Rei is a Miko or Preistess not a nun and Setsuna's hair colour is dark green (please get the facts of the senshi right before posting)
Ranma has the "potential" to defeat a Demi God (NAMELY SAFFRON...but that's at the end of the manga after he mastered more Ki ranged attacks with hard work.)
I would say Ranma's training is all hard work unlike Senshi who are already simply gifted with magic powers ...he had to work through sweat and blood to earn his power...So Ranma got more skills and experience...but that's after he mastered Ki attacks...
The difference between (comparing original canon Ranma after Saffron where he was at his peak power is that the senshi simply had magic power but bare minimum martial art skill like Ranma who trained all his life from very early stage and hardships, So Ranma can beat the Senshi coz he has more top class skill and experience...pure skill and tactics can overwhelm anyone with more power but very low skill and finesse)
Why would Ranma call Rei a common wench ?...its as if he is suddenly Kuno or just became pompous rich...doesn't match his original speech pattern...seemed OOC there.
Would he search out for his mother who did have role with the seppuku contract?
Anyway aside from minor spell problems and OOC moments the fic is good.
| Selias chapter 1 . 1/21
Firstly, it's spelled "nun," not "none." Secondly, she's not a nun, she's a miko.
| anon chapter 1 . 1/20
Setsuna does not have brown hair. Her hair is a dark green. It's that color in the anime and also that color on the cover of several of the manga's.
This is a major mistake. You got Rei's hair color correct and even Haruka's but not Setsuna's. Other than this glaring flaw the story is pretty good. You just need to fix the error.
| Meech Macko chapter 1 . 1/19
Hoping here that Ranma WONT turn into a girl forever and relinquish his true gender...There are too few fics with Ranma as a true hero as in not in a damned fuku.
| BlackBelt chapter 1 . 1/19
Your writing is on top as always! Enjoyable to read, easy to imagine, perfect characters and character interactions. You have not lost a single bit of your writing talent. This was a brilliant start to a brilliant story! :D love it!