Awsome love it, really good twist at the end, it's unexpected but really sweet. im only on chapter 2 and i can't wait to see how everything figures out keep going you're really .

I love how much thought you've put into this! It's really good!

Ooh, this is getting interesting! You're doing a really good job with your world-building here.

Five chapters, and you're still nailing the characterization all the way. Seeing how the District 1 team treats Satin and Zircon - almost as extensions of their own mindsets rather than kids - is amazingly well done. It's a slow burn that's dividing Satin and the rest of the players in the Games so far, and I'm intrigued on where it'll end up going. Awesome few chapters!

Nice introduction of multiple characters here, with both Glimmer in baby form (that phrase does not look quite right...) and Caesar getting into the picture. Interesting to see where both of them go as the story progresses, and especially how Caesar approaches conducting his first Games here. Good stuff - I like the differences emerging between Satin and Salem, as well. They make an interesting sibling pair.

Great opening chapter - and an intriguing way to detail and flesh out District 1. It's interesting to see how the Peacekeepers don't actually approve of Satin and the gang practicing for the Games, even though they do it anyway - and you've done a great job bringing the district out in its factories, streets, and more. Great detail!

I like your characterization too; Satin feels real, and her reactions to how Amelia thinks really makes her seem like the kind of girl who's grown up in an environment that pushes competition and excellence above all else.

Great start! Can't wait to read more.

Yay Satin! But does she know how terrible the arena is? The reaping system is kinda confusing, though. ;)

Oh. My. God. Wow! I like this story! And her aunt's baby is Glimmer from the 74th Games! That's awesome! I love this! ;)

Oh, alliances. That should be interesting. Nice job!

This is really good.

OMG! This is amazing.

CONTINUE! CONTINUE! CONTINUE! CONTINUE! Is Satin Glimmer? Your writing is really good.

This looks pretty good. The story flows pretty nicely, and I didn't notice any huge problems. It should be interesting to see the Hunger Games from a District One perspective. I'm looking forward to reading more!