I love your story. its sooooo eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

Please continue!

CONTINUE! I NEED TO SEE WHAT HAPPENS ON MY DATE WITH DAVE!

Please continue writing it I think it was amazing

I am loving this fanfiction! COULD U PLZ WRITE A ERIDAN X READER FANFICTION PPLLLZZZZ your x reader fanfic skills are beautiful (eh probably cuz I play lots of video games too jk them skill be amazing) and its fun to imagine myself in these stories and there aee no fun eridan ones

Plzzz continue :333

so awesome

Do you think it's a little coincidental that I have a cold? (Don't worry it's minor)

Wait, don't go! You're doing fine! Sorry that my last review was a little negative; constructive criticism is hard to pull off without sounding rude. I'm still enjoying the fic, there's no reason to stop writing! Besides, you can only improve through practice. Even if you're having a little trouble, i'm sure that'll disappear over time! Anyway, i hope you're still writing this, 'cause i'm looking forward to the next chapter!

DON'T STOP YOU'RE AMAZING AT THIS AND I WILL CRY IF YOU STOP THE STORY

hey no nononoono you're doing fine! sure the texting is a little off but rest assured that you are doing fine! i'd love it if you could continue, but that's your choice :/ oh and take your time on it too! no need to rush through so relax and do what you thing is good :3 and sorry about your bad weekend too

I think the only criticism i can think of is that the pace is somehow too fast, and too slow at the same time. I guess it just seems that she's making friends too quickly. It's one thig to be friends with the beta kids since she alreay knows them, but she got into the trolls' "clique" way too quickly, and interactions don't last very long. I guess everyone is just being a little OOC, but there are so many of them i can understand why it would be hard to get them all right. At the same time, it also seems that a lot of time is spent on inconsequential things. (However, i don't normally read "school" stories, so that could just be the way they are. I never had enough patience for school politics) the real question is, what kind of plot will this story have? That's half of what makes a story! Anyway, i like the idea (i have a soft spot for Dave x reader fanfictions, i just can't seem to resist!) and i can see the potential for something really good here, so i'm looking forward to next chapter!

hahaah hey imma invite myself over! hey, same here! YAY heheh i just find that funny, but its okay, take yo time, gather your ideas, write them down, then use them into the chapters

*whispers* (amazinnnnnnng)

"Shut up and go make me a sandwich" . You are amazing update soon please! and for a date idea they could go for a hike in the mountains... you know... ironically. .