|Reviews for A Sitch in our lives|
| Guest chapter 2 . 7/3
It's really not bad, the grammar is something to over look the story is unique and you're trying. I would like to see a Beta get involved to help you and improve your language skills. Also Lord Dream isn't someone you need to listen too as they didn't read that English isn't your native language, and you're trying.
| Lord Dream chapter 2 . 6/2
I gave it one more chapter. What was a C- is now an F. You have GOT to fix your grammar errors. If this had been turned in during school, I would make you re-write it. Sloppy, very sloppy.
| Lord Dream chapter 1 . 6/2
Fix your spelling and punctuation! A for effort, but to many errors brought it down to a C-.
| Guest chapter 19 . 12/24/2014
U should do a chap to see what happen to big shego
| Mr. Average chapter 19 . 11/19/2014
Very nice ending. Overall, this was a great story and I really enjoyed reading it. Keep up the good work. Peace
| Kings119 chapter 19 . 11/14/2014
I love your story, i actually cried a little because of the happy touchy moment. Your definietly my favorite(even tho i wonder what happen to the future shego
| Brown-Eyed-Fiend chapter 19 . 11/10/2014
well done, I really enjoyed reading this story and its character developments. Looking forward to your next work :)
| Guest chapter 19 . 11/9/2014
Ron and Bonnie I love them. Hope it's as good as this. Can we have Ron go all super monkey in this one and I mean like no one know he has the power untill it's like all POW
| D.E.J chapter 19 . 11/9/2014
Loved it great story looking forward for the new Ron/Bon you're working on
| BartWLewis chapter 19 . 11/8/2014
A Rongo and now an Ronbon...my two favorite pairings.
| Joe Stoppinghem chapter 19 . 11/8/2014
Great story, great ending but sorry to see it end.
I do appreciate that Kim wasn't made to be the heavy or bad guy or just an all around evil person to Ron.
Can't wait for your take on a Ron/Bon.
Maybe down the road, Kim/Ron too?
| CajunBear73 chapter 19 . 11/8/2014
Ok, quite a few questions answered about the why Shego did this, whew, glad it got there...LOL!
Maybe some of Shego is now with Shena, but maybe only Ron could tell the difference these days. Hmmm?
Still, after the big 'conference' amongst the three teens and the elder Shego, the aftermath seemed a little rushed. Four years later, a teaser about a wedding, cleared up quite quickly by their place in it, but nothing about what they are doing in their lives since that day.
A bit of a background about their current state of post-high school activities, their career-tracks, college or more would have been good. And what of Kim? What had she been doing since that day and of her life without Ron as a romantic interest, or career path? Did Ron have his MMP moments, jealousy of both ladies in Ron's life of a certain Yori, perhaps? And then there's the Lowardians, did they visit and threaten people close to Ron?
But a good tale nonetheless, and all questions, otherwise, answered.
Some word choices to contend with here and there in the chapter, but we got the idea of what you were saying.
And now a Ron/Bon? Ok...but do you 'do' Kim/Ron, too?
| jim89 chapter 19 . 11/7/2014
You got me there. The end is upon us
I'm rather surprised we finally got the full story. It was awesome
Of course it wouldn't be a fine overview without some dangling threads. If you will
What the heck happened to Kim? All she knows about the future self is that Ron had a bad breakup and her future self start hunting. Shego after she got revenge and the Ron's killers
Some reason the new future with Ron and shego happy
what happened to parallel shego? Was that meant to be a mystery for all time
and lastly, what happened to Kim in the new future?
What's her job, education and who she's dating etc.
your four years in the future . Gives us nothing on Kim and what happened to her
if you want to be negative here, they could argue gave Kim the shaft
but I doubt that. So parallel shego has shaped Ron, shego and Wade live
for the better. And shego family for the better.
And hell in a way it feels it's worse for her.
Or am I wrong from these you left us hanging by not mentioning it
That's my only problem here, which I think is a minor one
like people that Nick Peck about odd spelling mistake or grammar.
It's it's minor concern at best
So my recommendation before I give you an A for this chapter
and great ending
So my request, if you will
Write another five lines saying what happened to Kim?
If you're stuck message me and I'll give you an idea or 2
And next story of Ron and Bonnie pairing. God help me and the rest of us
just say I've never had good experiences with those two in the mix
but I'm hopeful that you prove me wrong
We shall see
| The Keeper of Worlds chapter 19 . 11/7/2014
| smith5576 chapter 19 . 11/7/2014
This was a great story. I love this alternate timeline. Just one question though, what happens to Kim at the end?