|Reviews for Return of the Past|
| Guest chapter 3 . 8/23/2014
Love it! Update soon!
| MafiaAngel chapter 2 . 4/19/2014
It's different, there's certainly that. You don't have to use a key (thought it was thoughtful for you to put one) as it disrupts the flow of the story. I'd also recommend not putting the setting in parentheses. Most books refrain from doing that, again , because iit pulls the reader from the flow. I'd also recommend putting thoughts in italics.
If you have trouble with the crossover, I could help? Used to be a huge Naruto fan and ATM, am currently doing a Fruits Basket/Attack on Titan crossover, so I'm currently honing my skills for upcoming action scenes. If you need help with action, I can help . good luck!
| Kyuubineko chapter 2 . 4/19/2014
So basically Naruto is born the cat and Kushina is still alive... Then maybe Sasuke as the Rat and Maybe Kiba as the dog? Ten Ten as Dragon? Actually Konoha 12 plus one more person fits well... Maybe Gaara?
| idea.getthe chapter 2 . 1/30/2014
Until now I still unsure what kind of story are you trying to do but if I ignore chapter 1, it seems like a perfect fem naru story without crossover.