Reviews for Namikaze Naruto: The Peace Seeker |
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![]() ![]() Lol |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really like the premise, but i had to stop reading because of the writing. The story has great ideas, but practically every third sentence is a repeat of something already said. |
![]() ![]() ![]() what 'thing' do you speak of Naru-chan? I don't understand. |
![]() ![]() that description of kissing was spot on |
![]() ![]() ![]() dude one thing's for sure, naruto is never the type to get this fucking emotionless freak and u just made that and fucked it |
![]() ![]() ![]() I liked the story alot. |
![]() ![]() ![]() WTH!? IS OROCHIMARU HIGH?! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Poor Kisame... |
![]() ![]() ![]() muito bom. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Dude if you think leaving loose links in the chapter is awesome go read some books. You need it. You have left a lot of important conversation hanging like that and your story is starting to sound like a break dance being performed like a hooligan. |
![]() ![]() the Raijin no Ken is not a normal sword like you describe it is only a hilt that could creat a electric blade when chakra was channeled into it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() You should work on reducing word repetition in your writing. In one paragraph, you repeated the word "shuriken" 7 times, which is clunky and pulls the reader out of your work faster than you'd expect. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Can't wait for Kakashi's humbling. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Yeah Jiraiya's not the bet with good impressions. |
![]() ![]() I don't get why writers of naruto fanfiction write in English but don't say jutsu in English makes absolutely no sense |