|Reviews for One More Trigger|
| harashien chapter 1 . 9/16
Love the story
| vysirez chapter 24 . 8/27
I have to say I think this twist is stupid. Dragonslayers access to Dragons info means they would know what was being transported. They think they are renegade heroes making hard choices, they wouldn't just release the S9. Not to mention I find the reasoning for shipping the nine off before killing them go be weak. Crawler might need the elaborate death scenario, nobody else does. Kill orders means they would likely be killed in the field without even being detained, much less shipped off somewhere to do the deed.
| vysirez chapter 6 . 8/26
I'm a bit confused about what Lily could have seen that she would need to report about Taylor. Taylor's powers have no visible indicator, the bug controller could have been anyone, Taylor was just stepping up to stand with her friends. Not like Taylor did a whole lot anyways. Emma basically carried things here.
| Guest chapter 5 . 8/11
This is honestly just kind of terrible.
| Guest chapter 2 . 8/11
"He looked concerned. "Maybe you should apply to the Wards?"
"Hell, no," she said. "Sophia's a part of that already. That'll just make her think I'm subscribing to her twisted little world-view, and she'll creep on to me more than ever." She closed her eyes, then opened them. "I'm just going to have to stick it out, protect Taylor, and maybe next year we can go to a different school.""
It's kind of disappointing that this story runs on Emma being literally the exact same kind of "stick your head in the sand and the problem will go away" idiot as canon Taylor. Really killed my interest in this.
| SixFtWookie chapter 29 . 7/28
The scariest part of this plan is that the Chief Director would absolutely agree to it.
| RevDorothyL chapter 34 . 6/19
I'm amazed at what a difference it makes when Emma has a reason to cling to Taylor's normality and compassion following her ABB trauma and reject Sophia's screwed up world view and sadistic bullying. The Samaritans are a wonderful team, with the guidance and backup of their Dad Brigade, and I love to see them growing in number as well as in strength and wisdom. :)
| evevee chapter 24 . 5/9
I know this was written ages ago, but I can't help but comment.
Cutting off in multiple sections, forced antagonistic actions, incredibly stupid decisions from characters, reviving an arc that was perfectly well and closed. It is basic operational procedure to transport HVT's separately, and that never addressed or otherwise acknowledged in any way here?
Your current writing is immensely better, that's been clear throughout the entire fic, but holy crap this chapter shows its age.
I don't mean to harass or flame you, but I just had to comment at how astounded I am that this was a chapter that was written and posted as anything other than an April Fool's joke.
Thank you for writing, and I have enjoyed this fic so far, but I will be frank. I will skip any bullshit around the Nine from here on out, it's padding and a complete waste of time to even bother reading.
| Quatermass chapter 2 . 3/17
(I couldn't post this on the first chapter, presumably as I have reviewed it already, so I'm posting this review here)
Actually, on re-reading this, which is one of your better stories BTW, I picked up on that note that Sophia simply did not listen to certain phrases, filtering out many. There's a quote in the Discworld novel "Reaper Man" about two not-dissimilar characters, albeit more benign and hilarious ones. Namely, Mustrum Ridcully, the Archchancellor of Unseen University, and Reg Shoe, a zombie campaigning for undead rights...
"Windle realised that talking to Mr Shoe was very much like talking to the Archchancellor. It didn't actually matter what you said, because he wasn't listening. Only in Mustrum Ridcully's case it was because he just wasn't bothering, while Reg Shoe was in fact supplying your side of the conversation somewhere inside his own head."
| TheCarcassKing chapter 16 . 11/8/2022
Wow. An exponentially well-adjusted Emma has some BALLS.
| TheCarcassKing chapter 6 . 11/3/2022
Support structure is imperative in order to heal, I'm glad the girls came out all the better for it.
| thrawnca chapter 31 . 11/1/2022
I enjoy a lot of this story. The emphasis on cooperation and training is great, and even if a group of teenage girls trouncing established adult teams can be a bit wish-fulfilment at times, it's fun, and it's fleshed out well enough that it's worth reading. I've re-read it, too, because it was interesting.
The femslash angle does seem a bit over-the-top, though.
It's not so much about the quantity, with every protagonist being female, and all of them over the age of 12 either dating girls, being on one end of a crush with a girl, or dropping lots of hints of an endgame relationship with a girl that neither of them is admitting to. That's maybe an unrealistically high rate, but meh, storytelling. My concern is more about how that's handled.
Madison is pleased to have been introduced to dating girls, because boys, apparently, are just animals, who have "all been about shoving their lips at mine, and then groping me". Then we encounter Greg, who embodies this experience, constantly making himself obnoxious, making ridiculously insensitive and crude passes at Taylor and acting entitled toward her. The idea of dating boys just because they're attractive is brought up as a fun pastime, but never treated more seriously, and never shown, only talked about. Missy's canonical crush on Gallant was apparently politely handled off-screen, with a note about how his girlfriend is jealous, and both of those angles are basically never mentioned again. When Madison called out Sophia, "I've never seen you kiss any boys, Hess. Sure you're straight?" she was quite right, because the whole idea of girls dating boys is given very short shrift.
Perhaps most jarringly, the Dad Squad features prominently, turning up to protect and train their daughters - but two out of three of them are married, and their wives never show up. Surely the girls' mothers would be just as protective and concerned? Surely their perspective on events such as their husbands having to take lives in defence of Emma and Madison would be valuable to see? But no, they are non-entities in this story. The only time we actually see a husband and wife interacting, it's the Dallons - clearly disagreeing with each other, with the smell of a much bigger argument brewing once the children are out of the room. It feels like there is an unwillingness in this story to acknowledge and demonstrate a functional heterosexual relationship.
If a story did the reverse, denigrating and caricaturing gay relationships and conspicuously excluding same-sex partners of major characters from appearing on the page even when they logically ought to be present, wouldn't that be a cause for concern?
| Duchess67 chapter 34 . 10/30/2022
Whoa... And just like that, they know Kaiser and company run the Medhall Corporation? Serious financial backing, indeed!
I've been rereading this off and on for DAYS so that I could properly appreciate the newest chapter. Thanks so much for that! :)
| Rusty Thebanite chapter 34 . 10/12/2022
Kaiser: They have nothing on us.
Team Samaritan: *Hits Paydirt*
I do love a good Overdog.
| CMVreud chapter 1 . 10/6/2022
A shard of ice,
right in the feels,
lamenting what could have been awesome.