Reviews for The Master Challenge: Intro and Kanto Arcs
Lightningblade49 chapter 19 . 2/28/2014
Faking his death will be handy for a time till the next time the group runs into them, although them operating vastly out of Kanto would be unlikely in most cases.
return of a lot of other charcters more dialogue from them would nice.

When you've finished this Arc and have updated the new stpry simply write and alert on this one.
XxRav3nxX chapter 19 . 2/28/2014
Can't wait for Johto it's gonna be awesome also nice chapter will there be another confrontation with Damian and his posse where Charizard is involved? Lastly would you mind pming me the link to the Johto arc or telling me when it's published that would be great thanks :)

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Zarathos' chain chapter 19 . 2/28/2014
nice chapter I thought that maybe you would have delia catch nidorina so that they can still be close but the way you wrote it is still great like how you did rota anxious for the cliff hangar keep it up if you want a suggestion just pm glad to help great story well written keep it up
Dream Guardian Watcher chapter 19 . 2/28/2014
That was AWESOME! It was romantic, it was charming, it had drama. It was fantastic.
Lightningblade49 chapter 18 . 2/27/2014
The poke speech Id like to see more of in the future,great first Date by the way.

After seeing your poll I don't see an issue with you throwing in some minor events in between the tournament like maybe a Double battle tournament some contests like last Chapter, Pokeringer things like that would be good to see maybe the whirl cup like to see Misty vs Ash again.
irritatedbookwor chapter 18 . 2/27/2014
Hmm. Very tasty. I've been happily enjoying this story since a few chapters before you changed the name on me. It's definitely one I check to see if it's been updated on a daily basis (sometimes even more often!).

I do have a few thoughts on that prophecy and an adventure involving Zorua (sorry, Zoroark) that might well boot the rating up a level due to blood and death. Interested in hearing more about what the more evil side of my imagination came up with. Sorry I cannot use proper punctuation at the moment, something just got screwed in my keyboard.

As for Rota.. I do not know what you will be doing there, but might I suggest something for you to consider. First, when Ash and his two apprentices come forward in the traditional bow of respect, can you imagine Queen.. Ileneňás face when she sees a *blue* and black furred Zoroark in the traditional pose of an aura apprentice beside a Lucario. I also do not know what sort of favors/tasks the Queen might ask of Ash, but I would like to suggest that one of them be sticking him in the traditional garb that Sir Aaron wore.

I can not *wait* for the next chapter of this highly delicious story! Oh. I cannot PM because I am not a member of this site... and as it is, I have no intention to become one.
XxRav3nxX chapter 18 . 2/27/2014
Well done with this chapter I think you wrote the date part well and the part with Omanyte haha it was funny they make me laugh also can't wait for the next chapter when they get to Rota should be interesting

XxRav3nxX
Zarathos' chain chapter 18 . 2/27/2014
hey there is no problem with a few fillers it adds character depth and can be a big deal later on another great chapter keep it up your doing a great job writing this story
Dream Guardian Watcher chapter 18 . 2/27/2014
When will we be seeing some of Ash's Kalos pokemon? Also this was a fantastic chapter.
Guest chapter 17 . 2/26/2014
Nice chapter though it seemed like a filler it was still well written and fun to read keep it up
XxRav3nxX chapter 17 . 2/26/2014
Go Gary haha Damian had it coming also I think Charizard should be kicking his ass next time that would make my day also I like the idea of Ellie for Pikachu keep up the good writing I'm loving this story :)

XxRav3nxX
Lightningblade49 chapter 17 . 2/25/2014
I see how this group will try to take on Ash and co at the league I sincerely hope you do a team battle thing perhaps with 5 trainers in each group to battle with the best 3 out of 5 the winners wonder if there cheating will help and be noticed.

Iris insecure that obvious even in the anime nice to see you address that along with the progression of Iris/Cilan.
Ash got owned again this is getting repetitive no offence.
Gary Earnt back his Pride as a trainer and next stop pallet town wonder what adventure next chapter.
ps: ellie is an interesting addition her role I'll keep an eye on.
Fan chapter 16 . 2/25/2014
Great chapter! If the next region your visiting is Hoenn please get Altomare in the picture. And by Altomare I mean Latias. Also, to prove you hate Buneary, try to make her and Ellie rivals. With Ellie always winning. Looking Foward to more!
Lightningblade49 chapter 16 . 2/25/2014
Now the story has really kicked into gear with this new prophecy you've produced very well executed.
A new baby for the group that's good, Brocks lil bro following in his footsteps wouldn't mind the pair keeping in touch with Ash and co via that new tech in the X & y series or a poketch.
Look forwards to seeing this plot unfold.
Rota the Johto you could do a Pidgeot vs Pidgeot match against Faulkner.

PS: I hope the male Mewtwo can megaevolve like the female but into X form, will others mega evolve?
PPS:I liked the teasing from Misty about his match with Brock wish she did the same with the rest of the gyms.
PPPS: Omanyte reminds me of James's victreebel
Zarathos' chain chapter 16 . 2/23/2014
nice chapter I recognized some of the hearts keep up the good work
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