Reviews for Egoistical
BDDB chapter 1 . 2/5/2014
This looks really promising. I like the start of it. The most fanfics always use an OC who is just as good in basketball as the miracles which is kinda annoying. There is a reason why they are called special after all.
TenraiTsukiyomi chapter 3 . 2/5/2014
Yeah. I'm glad and I understand your love for long, long reviews. Not flames though, I hate flames and I will assume you do too-... that was stupid, of course you hate flames why would someone love them? O_O

Reading every little word in your fanfic is making me smile like an idiot. Like, a really, really, reaaaallllyyy idiotic idiot that looked like she got the lottery. That's what my cousin called me. xD But really, your writing style, description, and every little thing is making me smile like an idiot. I can't help it. Everything is just so cuuuutte. Kawaii. Adorable. Ect, take your pic. You're getting my twisted little heart into it! xDDDD

I squealed when Aomine gave her a bread. Don't mind my fangirling, but it's just... you... he, Mia, expressionless face... KAWAIIIIIIII! Kyaaaaa! I can't stop smiling. I really can't. I also can't stop myself from interpreting Aomine's face as an akward/uncomfortable/embarrassed face.

And the fact that Ahomine read her blush as a crush... I can't forget that. I can't stop smiling. I love it. I mean, it was so blunt and arrogant and so Aomine-ish that I can't stop smiling.

But I guess I also get the kick out of reading Mia's thoughts. I'm relieved you just didn't make it an instant 'maybe he isn't so bad' without reason. Mia's scared shitless bravery to demand (meekly) money for her bread from Aomine, to Aomine ACTUALLY doing it... It's so cute. And I can so see that happenning. Contrary to popular belief, Aomine isn't THAT big of a jerk (be glad it isn't Hanamiya, Mia) and isn't evil. It irritates me to see fics of him being illogically 'evil'. But you, while not making him into a goody two shoes, you still write out a 'nicer' part of him that was so... Cannon? Normal? Average? Cute? Aomine-ish? I'm out of words. b(/)b

And gosh no! I don't mind if the romance is slow. Actually, with how you're writing everything out, I'm very happy. Everything is so normal, yet so cute, and it's so smooth I'm almost envious of your writing skills. Haha! xD

Crap. I'm fangirling, aren't I? Most of the review is of me expressing my love to how you wrote everything out and nothing helpful at all. Must be annoying. Shit, I'm so sorry!

And looking back, I guess I got so caught up I forgot to tell you, but there are some spelling errors. For example, "Not to forget his statue. She wasn't really small-" and ect. It's "stature" instead of "statue". As for grammar, um, I'm self-taught so I can't give you a comment so far, since to ME, it's good.

Don't mention characterization; it's fantastic. The 'plot' is too cute and fluffy and so "Kyaaa" inducing... No comment.

I'm actually surprised there isn't more people favoriting, following or reviewing this. This isn't OOC or dull, it's actually very funny and cute. And one can see something like this actually happening...

Update soon!
TenraiTsukiyomi chapter 2 . 2/4/2014
I like this. I really do. It's not an instant romance, my opinion though. And I love this so far.

The way you describe Mia's thoughts is very, very hilarious. I was smiling throughout the entire two chapters. D I LOVE how you wrote everything out, from Mia's thoughts about being killed, to the descriptions, to the comfort-not motions of Nanami, to Aomine's attitude.

ESPECIALLY Aomine's attitude.

There's just something in how you wrote him out that strung my heart. 8D I mean, many, many fics that have AominexOC are about super, exagerated, arrogant Aomine, not in the way of Cannon, but in a way that made me shut the fic right away. Yours, however... I think it was written maraveously! :D It was so... cannon.

Aomine CAN be scary, mean, and arrogant, but he can also be carefree and... kind? Caring? Possessive? Okay, the last one was random so count that out... Aaaaargh! I don't know how to explain it... U.U But anyways, I love how you despicted Aomine. So far, we've only seen what Mia thought of Aomine, which was based on how he always glared at her, rumours, and the sheer scariness that poured. I would be shaking just like her if I ever, ever, met Aomine.

I like my life... a lot.

...Akashi is scarier, but Aomine is still intimidating, okay!

Leaving that, I like Mia. She's not a Mary-sue in my opinion, so far she's fantastic. xD Reading this is like reading a summary of what I think when there are Chinese classes. Haha. And when Aomine mistook her blush as a crush, I smiled very widely. I smiled throughout every of her thoughts and encounters with Aomine, Sakurai and Nanami. She's so... 'fascinating', in my opinion. She's not those brave-to-the-point-of-stupidity type of girl, but she isn't the super weak pity me princess doll ect type. If I had to say, she would be right in the middle. Well, not in the middle persay, but she was NORMAL. Like, she has survival instincts and isn't 'stupid' aannndd still managed to get scared crapless by Aomine. Can't blame her in that aspect. I think Aomine looks COOL, super cool with yadda yadda in the anime, but he can be quiet intimidating.

I love how you wrote it out. Please update soon.
CopraMeow chapter 2 . 2/4/2014
this is actually turning out great! Aww Aomine was telling everybody about a "girl" how cuuteeee
SomeRandomFemale chapter 2 . 2/4/2014
It's weird how I can actually picture Aomine, Momoi, and Sakarai doing this. They are so in character that its puzzling. Mostly becuase I see a lot of stories where all the canon characters are ooc.
Question. Will this story be following the plot of the anime/manga?
Well, this is really good Keep yp the good work!
TooLazyToLogIn chapter 1 . 2/3/2014
That was great! Ah, I can't wait to read more! I wonder what Aomine will do :P keep it up! it was a wonderful first chapter! :D
CopraMeow chapter 1 . 2/3/2014
interesting...
AmandaVonDoom chapter 1 . 2/3/2014
Ahh so good! I can't wait for the next chapter!
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