|Reviews for Cousin x Servant|
| Guest chapter 3 . 4/3
I really like your story u absolutely fell in love with it I agree with tomy98 I really want to see a houki ichika pairing anyway hope you keep updating
| tomy98 chapter 3 . 4/1
Good story and is there going to be a pering with ichka if so pleas make it houki since there is not enoutgh perings with and try to update soon
| Stratos263 chapter 3 . 3/31
I'm a little confused I thought ichika was supposed to fight Cecilia
| Fireminer chapter 3 . 3/31
That is a really nice change, actually.
| lajoie21 chapter 3 . 3/31
good chapter . rin vs ichika . what happen next?
| VV chapter 2 . 2/15
Uh maybe you should not use Ye Olde English. It tends to distract people while reading unless everyone talks like that, so maybe a re-write of that part. It took a bit for an update but hey it is an original story and highly enjoyable. So till next time
| ThePhenakism chapter 2 . 2/15
Pretty good story so far very much interested in the next chapter.
| Stratos263 chapter 2 . 2/15
Nice story so far
| Fireminer chapter 2 . 2/15
Pah. Good chapter indeed.
| lajoie21 chapter 2 . 2/15
good chapter. i know some british girl gonna meet a knight and he's gonna show who's is the strongest? what happen next?
| Velshard chapter 1 . 2/12
I'm not sure how many readers started on this story and then shortly afterwards screamed "Abandon Ship!" without bothering to review but I imagine it was quite a few. I know I nearly did.
Let's make something perfectly clear here. No matter how good a story you have come up with, no matter how much time you have spent researching and hammering out plot holes, none of it counts for shit if the story is unreadable. And that's exactly what this is, unreadable garbage. Now I am not a fire breathing troll, but you must be aware that your Grammar, Sentence Structure, Punctuation, and use of Vernacular is ABSOLUTELY horrid from the perspective of a native English speaker. And while not the worst I've seen, it is as though you know in theory how the English language is suppose to work and more or less got things in some semblance of order. Hell, I'd almost swear this was a machine translation... Well whatever I doubt your an android or gynoid. The point being that a good story reads smoothly, having not just a nice flow but is well executed so there are no awkward moments with unnecessary info or needless scenes that disturb the current pace of what your reading.
All-in-all I honestly can't even say how good the story concept was because I was endlessly distracted by the crap editing. I will say that scenes like Ichika & Houki being shown their apartment were terribly awkward to the point of being cringe worthy, mostly because they felt like a C&P job of 'this is what the readers expect to be here' almost like you put no real effort in it. Which I know not to be true since you went to the trouble of creating such a long introductory chapter, indicating to me at least that you want to make a good story. But damn if you don't desperately need a qualified and patient editor, I know I sure as hell don't have the patience to sort this mess out.
As such I do hope to see a future version of this that has been majorly re-edited and my apologies for any hurt feelings.
| Fireminer chapter 1 . 2/5
Interesting! I could see this as a parallel to my own fic. Anyway, nice start, but still too fast.
| reaping for all chapter 1 . 2/5
I love the story it can go far and I mean far but I hope a lot of people kiked it as much as I do I think this is the first kind of story that has this type of well title and plot so hope u continue and this is good
| lajoie21 chapter 1 . 2/5
good chapter. what happen next?