|Reviews for Fell So Deep|
| Runecutter chapter 4 . 6/8/2013
Aw shucks! Why did she have to cry? ;) I was almost THAT sure that she would be at the Quidditch stands as for one that wouldn't be a place HE could connect with her, but definitely a place she would think of when HE was the problem she had to solve right now... the bathroom also is a good choice, but there she needs to cry and be miserable and i'd have hoped it didn#t QUITE come so bad down the emotional path. Show's what i know ;)
Oh that word... why has it come to be so central to every description of Mr Potter's mimic and feelings? He's always "sheepish" or "grinning sheepish". It's not your fault, but i've come to HATE that word and all it relates to.
A great story. After the confrontation it ebbs off maybe a bit too quickly and if it had gone at least a further chapter on with that level of detail i think it would have been perfect! so it felt a bit rushed and sloppy, as if when once the important things were told it didn't matter anymore and it does ALWAYS matter... And of course it's a bit one dimensional when they have this very slight well is it a full blown "problem" at all? So when they've got ONE little problem and then all is just wonderful forever after. Another small crisis after they got officially together would have been nice, just to support the "they won't be without friction, but they're strong and good and will settle it in time and continue to be stronger and better" sentiment most good relationship (fics) have :)
But hey, it's already 97.5 percent there on the road to perfection so why whine about it ;)
| Runecutter chapter 3 . 6/8/2013
Okay, for one it is a good complimentary piece to the thoughts of Hermione. Funny to see how he uses much of the same ideas she has moved around in her head to come to pretty much the same conclusions... first that it won't happen, shouldn't happen that he is not in love with Hermione Granger and then... that he IS... ;)
Still, i'm not too sure on the other hand, that it was good to change the point of view... Yes it GIVES clarity about how he feels, but much of the appeal until now was that Hermione's view was imperfect, that it was 100% pure her feelings and nothing else... now we've got this sweet mixture of her's and his' thoughts and they all fit and will have babies together one day and little plot bunny babies will swarm all over the place and be a rightout plague ;) It definitely changes the feeling and direction of the story... and i can't help but feel that a bit longer without clarity would have served your original narrative way better. She has realized the truth, she has panicked about it, she has tried to push it away and then has done something rash, so now she should be all squirmy and insecure about how he will react, should suffer because she convinced herself that it WAS disgust and not surprise and utter befuddlement on Harry's side...
Come on, honestly how could Harry be disgusted by anything she does? They ARE friends. they ARE close. VERY close.
Sure: It matches the situation and Hermione's a million miles a second mind at the moment, but if she ever would calm down it should be clear to her that it does not make the least bit of sense... And that there is a difference between some fingers touching lips just kissed and the flat hand you throw before your mouth when you fear you could throw up ;)
| Runecutter chapter 2 . 6/8/2013
"She always thought such things were mere metaphors and not actual descriptions of what it felt to be in love."
Yeah that's why pretty consistent descriptions are around everywhere. As we all know Hermione does instinctually NOT trust books so why would a thousand books that all report the same tell the truth? :P
Oh this is torture. Sweet, sweet torture. Butterfly-boarding.
| Runecutter chapter 1 . 6/8/2013
Boah she is a whiny little brat... when she doesn't think it's good for Harry to not think and act impulsively, who would be better situated than HER to do something about it and help Harry find another way?
Well be it as it may, this was incredible. It felt really right, just as teenage thoughts would go all over the place, teenage insecurities would nag on your self esteem and Hermione's special flavor of "Logic will ruin it all if you think too much" also fit in perfectly. :)
Awww for McGonagall's words. The old girl is pretty cool when she doesn#t sent Harry out to the wolves without even the slightest bit of help... but this seems not to be like those moments with the stone or Umbridge...
| ATT159 chapter 4 . 7/30/2012
This writing style is adorable. Childish enough to realistically depict their very adolescent thought processes but also mature enough to be readable. Nice work!
| codyw1 chapter 4 . 1/29/2012
Aww sweet. ;)
| timunderwood9 chapter 3 . 3/12/2011
I wasn't going to comment because this was so old, and I tend not to review on things the author has likely forgotten (shit I was 18 still when you wrote this) but I'd noticed the way the run ons captured the iterative flavor of thought, and approved.
| missevilprincess chapter 3 . 6/15/2010
I love how he starts off with a omg, what am I going to do, I don't like her back, and then gets to a omg, what am I going to do, I like her. :D
| twisterblake chapter 4 . 12/14/2008
hey great chapter update soon
| twisterblake chapter 3 . 12/14/2008
hey great chapter update soon
| twisterblake chapter 2 . 12/14/2008
hey great update soon
| twisterblake chapter 1 . 12/14/2008
hey great chapter update soon
| xxxooo chapter 4 . 9/8/2007
AWW this is the sweetest fic i've read in a long time! congrats on finishing it so wonderfully! i loved the last part, i absolutely loved it! you couldnt' have said it any better! great job! it's so deep and in touch with what they really are like. i'm so glad i chose to read this! xo:D
| LOVE ME KISS ME HUG ME chapter 4 . 3/12/2007
“How does forever sound?”
“With you? It doesn’t sound long enough.”
SO SWEET, Itsu mo isshou ni...always together right?
| hpfan47 chapter 4 . 3/31/2006
aww this is such a sweet fic i loved how u wrote about hermione's thoughts and harry's thoughts...u are amazing writer