Reviews for The New Bones in my Closet
Fayoken chapter 4 . 2/6
Four words: continue please great story
Mrs. Raditz'n'Nappa chapter 1 . 10/2/2014
Great first chapter. Who will Pan be paired with?
Viva Del Amore chapter 3 . 9/16/2014
Another good chapter
Viva Del Amore chapter 1 . 9/16/2014
Nicely done so far but I hate TxP but Marron is in it so I'll continue:)
HerosReprise chapter 3 . 9/9/2014
Finally read this one, sorry for my slowness.
I love Marrons friends, hehe they are cute. I think I'm just going to claim that IM Varia! ;) so nerrr.
Trunks was a bit of an ass to Pan and Goten then he was a huge gentlemen to the girls.
I think he must like Marron...
I like that you had then spend time together before they figure out ones rich ones poor.
One minor thing:
Speech punctuation should be:
"That's okay," said Marron.
"That's okay." Said Marron.
Don't start a new sentence for words like said. It gets a little confusing. Always have a comma! :)
I'm confused are TP in a relationship? Or are they just intimate flat mates.
Either way I feel sorry for Pan. She's a nag, but I hope Trunks doesn't cheat on her. :(
Goten is a sweet heart as always.
Okay on to the next one !
Writer'sFantasy chapter 3 . 8/31/2014

Awh Trunks and Marron. *wild fangirl screech* The girls seem to nor trust them also I SEE LOTS OF AL CAPONE IN THIS STORY AND IM EXCITED BECAUSE IT'S FUCKING ALCAPONE!

I can see Pan seems to really needs the money and I really pity her and Trunks cause yeah she probably having a terrible time after all.

Guys I really like this chapter kudos to Tiffany for having some inspiration kick in!
Update Soon!
HerosReprise chapter 2 . 2/17/2014
Noice chapter!
I like Marrons friends, they seem like a lot of fun. I wonder if one of them will date Goten... My money's on Mo!
Idasa is creeper, I'm glad she slapped him hehe.
Well done girlies :)
Light in the Dark 2.0 chapter 2 . 2/16/2014
They're going to run into Trunks, aren't they?
MarronChestnut chapter 2 . 2/16/2014
That boy my words How dare you touch a woman with such manners I hope Trunks and goten are in the next chapter back in the day when you wear clothes that covers every inch of you body and when you daddy pick your hubby
Guest chapter 2 . 2/16/2014
I love it the setting of is like Back in the day when they wear clothes that covers everything and your daddy picks you hubby am I right and I hope the next chapter is goten and trunks
C4tloverr chapter 2 . 2/16/2014
Cute story!
Writer'sFantasy chapter 2 . 2/16/2014
Ohhhhhhhh Marron stay away from Idasa!
He's a perv not healthy for gals like you.
Update Soon you two y'all being awesome.
BbyRae chapter 1 . 2/9/2014
Ah, so the roles are reversed, I see. This should be interesting. Hope to see more soon.
Light in the Dark 2.0 chapter 1 . 2/7/2014
I'd have never thought about this. I'm so lame. -.-
Writer'sFantasy chapter 1 . 2/7/2014
YASSSSSS I'm scared for the possible pan-bashing, although I doubt y'all would do that. I feel so bad for Trunks and Marron and Idasa *blehh*

Update Soon!
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