Reviews for Initiate
HarryPfanfic chapter 38 . 11/20/2023
Another great story! I really like your writing style and the plot line.

That being said, this whole "Sirius died" scenario could have been avoided. Though it made no sense at all, I like the conclusion and the fear that Harry and Lupin experienced. For Sirius though, it felt like a plot armor. If you had just let Sirius to pass away. Harry would have suffered greatly, but at least there wouldn't have been any plot holes.

Apart from that I really, really like the development of Draco. Though, as I said in my review of Innocent, I really don't understand what Lucius and Narcissa want to do with Draco... nevertheless this Draco is amazing.
NinusHideon chapter 28 . 9/10/2023
Man, the scene with Snape and Draco ended with a golden key no doubt. One single word and it made that my favorite scene so far. Amazing work.
Guest chapter 37 . 7/7/2023
Love it I am so HAPPY SIRIUS IS ALIVE
HetaPhiPuffPrincess chapter 36 . 4/20/2023
Bruh u had me in a whole chokehold for the last three chapters, I tip my hat! I legit forgot dumbles needed to be led away. I was in my feels like Remus! You have a master piece on ur hands with this series and I’m only at the end of book 2 I’ve been binging for days first with Innocent and now this one. And if u think I’m not bout to just keep going! Cuz you have given me something phenomenal, JK a could NEVER! All the snaps and all the claps for ur writing skills!
Armiture chapter 1 . 1/4/2023
Well, I wonder what Harry and Hermione will do now? Three people going into an office and only one coming out can look bad for Mr. Benson.
Lord Jawblinneron chapter 8 . 8/20/2022
Seriously? The attempted murderer gets off with a slap on the wrist? Because they didnt know what spell was being used to murser? No pror incantato? Thank god you aren't writing about muggles... "We will let you off this time with a fine since, even though two police officers witnessed you firing your gun, we could not find the bullet and dont know if it was made of copper or iron."
Guest chapter 31 . 8/4/2022
- "Obviously not," Sirius sighed. "I'd have taken him to Dumbledore's office to try to get Fawkes to help, but they had to kill Fawkes this morning, and he won't be able to cry until he's at least a month old again." -

Immortality makes for some weird sentences.
Guest chapter 18 . 8/3/2022
- Croaker said three things; phoenix feathers, unicorn blood, and the Philospher's stone… -

Phoenix tears, not feathers. This isn't Final Fantasy, although so far it's certainly just as good.
Guest chapter 15 . 8/3/2022
You are literally the first person I've ever seen write a straight-up Gryffindor Draco and damn, you pull it off.
sarrylover chapter 9 . 7/16/2022
I’m confused they both wanted this I must have missed something from the previous story because this IS what they planned to do.
TtotheA chapter 37 . 5/13/2022
I do t know why it was so sad to find out the little boy was dead. I’m still processing it a few chapters later.
TtotheA chapter 18 . 5/11/2022
I wanted to review in the previous chapter that how Quirrel and how he became part of Voldemort’s posse in an other timeline was really a lot of fun. I am ducking back into this riveting chapter. I am trying to review more, as the plot, pacing, information and fun musings in the potterverse is extremely exciting and intriguing.
Guest chapter 37 . 4/6/2022
The grammar in this story was way worse than the first one
Guest chapter 27 . 4/5/2022
You've written Harry as a dumbass and Ron as way too considerate
Guest chapter 18 . 4/4/2022
You stop your chapters at the stupidest fucking times. It's not even proper cliffhangers.
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