Reviews for Initiate |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Man, the scene with Snape and Draco ended with a golden key no doubt. One single word and it made that my favorite scene so far. Amazing work. |
![]() ![]() Love it I am so HAPPY SIRIUS IS ALIVE |
![]() ![]() ![]() Bruh u had me in a whole chokehold for the last three chapters, I tip my hat! I legit forgot dumbles needed to be led away. I was in my feels like Remus! You have a master piece on ur hands with this series and I’m only at the end of book 2 I’ve been binging for days first with Innocent and now this one. And if u think I’m not bout to just keep going! Cuz you have given me something phenomenal, JK a could NEVER! All the snaps and all the claps for ur writing skills! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Well, I wonder what Harry and Hermione will do now? Three people going into an office and only one coming out can look bad for Mr. Benson. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Seriously? The attempted murderer gets off with a slap on the wrist? Because they didnt know what spell was being used to murser? No pror incantato? Thank god you aren't writing about muggles... "We will let you off this time with a fine since, even though two police officers witnessed you firing your gun, we could not find the bullet and dont know if it was made of copper or iron." |
![]() ![]() - "Obviously not," Sirius sighed. "I'd have taken him to Dumbledore's office to try to get Fawkes to help, but they had to kill Fawkes this morning, and he won't be able to cry until he's at least a month old again." - Immortality makes for some weird sentences. |
![]() ![]() - Croaker said three things; phoenix feathers, unicorn blood, and the Philospher's stone… - Phoenix tears, not feathers. This isn't Final Fantasy, although so far it's certainly just as good. |
![]() ![]() You are literally the first person I've ever seen write a straight-up Gryffindor Draco and damn, you pull it off. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I’m confused they both wanted this I must have missed something from the previous story because this IS what they planned to do. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I do t know why it was so sad to find out the little boy was dead. I’m still processing it a few chapters later. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I wanted to review in the previous chapter that how Quirrel and how he became part of Voldemort’s posse in an other timeline was really a lot of fun. I am ducking back into this riveting chapter. I am trying to review more, as the plot, pacing, information and fun musings in the potterverse is extremely exciting and intriguing. |
![]() ![]() The grammar in this story was way worse than the first one |
![]() ![]() You've written Harry as a dumbass and Ron as way too considerate |
![]() ![]() You stop your chapters at the stupidest fucking times. It's not even proper cliffhangers. |
![]() ![]() ![]() You've been referring to Hydrus Malfoy as Malfoy and Draco Malfoy as Draco but in this chapter you're started calling Draco just Malfoy to and it's freaking getting confusing. Pick one and stick to it! |