Goon

i hate you for not make Naruto learn fuinjutas

I don't regret reading this, it had some really really really low lows but it overall is good.

shame no epilogue

death flags so many death flags.

Betting now before reading, asuma dies, tsunade dies and iruka die also kakashi and perhaps sasuke.

seriously? fucking Onoki gets to die by a fucking pill? all the shit he did, the damage and pain the caused and gets the painless way out?

bullshit and unsatisfying.

the fact that you have a rip list straight up tells me you are just checking up names for "shock" value

listen, is fine doing all this but iwa and kumo better stop existing after it, it would be dumb to paint them specially onoki as absolute worse of the worse and somehow have the villages survive.

you really just like to kill characters left and right, it really doesn't add anything to the story or gives tension like you think.

I kinda wish you would actually let us have some time with the characters instead of "hey remember this person? yeah dead now lol"

At least he died better than in the manga.

This is really good man, you are fantastic at writing fight scenes.

alright sasuke, here is an A-rank, assassination jutsu, absolutely crazy, strong, fucking wicked right?

ok naruto, here is some 360 fart, weaker than the last yes, have fun.

at least teach naruto the rasengan, it would help with his chakra control massively.

Mannnnn... i really liked this story, but not utting them in the exams is really killing the enjoyment i had. especially since im pretty sure that the teams can stay together even if they all, or even just one or two of them, become Chunin.

Like, theoretically I understand Kakashi's reason, in practice it doesnt make sense. Naruto and Sasuke are going to be targets, no matter how strong they are. Sasuke is oneof the last Uchiha, so people will be going after him no matter what. Meanwhile, Naruto is an Uzumaki, a clan that THREE marjor villages worked together to wipe out, looks exactly like the 4th, and is the Jinchuriki of the Kyubi. and before you try to claim its a secret, everyone who is 6 or 7 years older than him knows... and many treat him poorly because of it. Realistically, any spy worth their salt would know about it, they wouldnt even need to trick people. all they would need to do is see how the people ostracize Naruto, find out his birthday, and boom it s ovious as hell. so either way, both are going to be targeted.

on the other hand, if he lets them participate, they are VERY likely to pass, abd then they will have access to more training materials due to their higher clearance. they also wouldnt need to be sneaky about trying to get B rank and up missions, meaning more in feild experiance. overall, it amost feels like youre just doing it to have a clear divergence from cannon, and while I do like cannon divergence, this one feels forced.

to be clear, im not flaming. its your story and you can write it how you want. Im just pointing out that the reason given feels kinda flimsy at best, especially considering that this was THE CLOSEST to a safe chunin exams Kakasi could have asked for, because they would ave the home feild advantage. if the next one is in Iwa, Kumo, or Kiri you CANT send them. Iwa would make Naruto have an "accident" because of how much he looks like his dad. Kiri would try to kill any bloodline wielders, and Kumo would try to kidnap them.

I wonder if the people who write these type of fanfics even like the source material.

It'll be cool if Sakura chooses assassin. I'm way too late for this fic to actually vote for to be an assassin so I guess I just have to wait to see which one she chooses

Yeah this story is on a downhill spiral.

You are shafting Naruto on his heritage. Neither Sasuke or Sakura should be the fuuinjutsu expert.