See! You had the perfect scene for the exposition about Astoria! We would have gotten to discover it WITH Hermione...as it is, it just feels repetitive

This honestly feels more like an essay than prose. The rule is SHOW not TELL

Waaaaaaaay to much exposition all at once ️

It's a good story, but has a lot of unnecessary slut shaming in it. The story would have worked just fine without the bits about promiscuous secretaries. Could have just said they wanted more women to be free to work rather than stay home to tend to kids.

I can’t get past chapter 2..I complied because I was too scared to defy him”.. she is supposed to be a witch, and a bright one at that ..

So if Ron was polyjuiced as the Secretary, does that mean he and Dean...?
I gots to know

ugh this fanfic was so perfect! I love the idea of a "Day Care" school for young wizards and witches, regardless of blood status! Beautiful names picked out for the children and the schools! So glad everything worked out for everyone!

A sweet family story where Draco is fluffy yet strong and Hermione is strong yet sensitive. Will definitely reread in the near future!

awsome story... i luved it sooo much...

Why is every woman that is not Hermione or one of her friends degraded to a whore or a slag? You don't have to put other women down to make you main female character look good. Your misogyny is showing...

Well that seemed very cathartic. Too bad Hermione didn’t get a swing or two in. Good job, Tobias!

See...
it’s almost like she forgets she’s a witch. Smash balls. Stupefy! Incarcerous. Something!
At least she got a happy ending at the end of the day, I guess.

For her to be "the brightest witch of her age" she sure is acting rather dim. What, did Ronald beat the common sense out of her? She can't afford to be this naive with someone else's kid around. She freezes up when she hears his voice. It's not going to end well when he finally corners her, which it's obvious he is, because she's ignoring every sign.

If Hermiones parents are in Australia why would they give a baseball bat set to Scorpius? It would more likely be a cricket set as both Australia and England play cricket only Americans play baseball

absolutely adorable, exciting, enthralling and enraging story! haha, I loved it! thank you for sharing this.