Reviews for Emerald Coven
Ethan76 chapter 19 . 4/8/2018
Its depressing that it's incomplete. It was a unique idea for a harem, I mean Coven, fic. I liked it.
Guest chapter 14 . 3/8/2018
So I'm thinking that the singles are Voyeur, Exhibition, or strange masturbation. Really good stuff, the Dom sub play was wonderful, although when it got to the bondage femdom it kinda lost me. Really enjoying this though
H. Automata chapter 19 . 2/28/2018
This is fun - a little bit of shameless porn with plot, a story actively focused around sex and romance but not exclusively about those things. There's still worry about friendships, personal struggles and maturing young individuals. I really, strongly appreciate finding a narrative that's as open about sex as this one, yet one that's also concerned with portraying characters with real, flawed personalities. There are different shades of intimacy here, with how different the characters themselves are, and I think that's worth congratulating the author.

On a personal note, if I where to draw a comparison, the previous bond fic I just read, The bonds of blood, is more story-heavy, but in many ways also needlessly tragic, overly woeful. Emerald Coven is more consistent in that it's a story about sex in a magical world. Sure, there are still problems, Voldemort is still a looming threat, but the focal point is exactly what the read can expect based off of the first few chapters, that is, blossoming relationships and the effort to preserve them and expand them. And, based on the plans of the budding coven, I'd wager sex is literally going to end up being the salvation of the world in the narrative, and that couldn't be any more fitting.
Guest chapter 11 . 2/25/2018
harry and hermoine are such bad friend, ron never throw levendor in hermoine face, she was the bitch that stop talking to him, attack him.

and harry should have at least the respect to tell ron the truth.
Ozcrack chapter 19 . 2/20/2018
This is just fucking fantastic
Mikotal chapter 19 . 12/21/2017
Great story, can't wait for more.
I also like the way you put Daphne in the story
Eating Upside Down chapter 19 . 12/1/2017
So backpacking off my last review, Daphne wasn't in the story, then boom. I think the problem I have with the story is really the rather abrupt change of pace from book 1. I quite dislike book 2, but maybe because book 1 was either so different or set the standard so high, I believe there's an argument for either case and even both.

I also think the way sex is portrayed in the story has changed. It went from something special and moving to more of a role like quidditch. Sex went from symbolic of a relationship stage to something less important and/or meaningful. I think this change really cheapens the story, not to say sex was always handled well. I did think the way Gabbys fetish was introduced and explored was handled terribly. I mean within the span of 4 or so months Harry goes from shy virgin who barely can speak to girls to master dom is a HUGE stretch, magic or not. Also you've made the point to talk about how conservative this magical society is, but almost every teen seems to be sexually liberated and pretty open minded. I think that's too convenient for the story. Ginny's resistance was nice to see, but I could barely take it seriously since it was too clear that Ginny was going to be involved in the coven one way or another. (Just another example of forcing a character into the story hurts it)

If the only interesting portions of this story become relationship drama and dealing with Volly, then book 2 is vastly inferior to book 1, which was fresh and ripe with intrigue.
Eating Upside Down chapter 17 . 12/1/2017
Your story seems to force Ginny into the equation. Not only does it leap off of the poorly written canon romance, but the whole Ginny narrative dominates the Gabby Harry screen time. We went from Hermione noticing Harry becoming more confident, to Harry tongue-tied and outspoken by everyone. Hermione herself goes from asserting herself to deferring. Gabby seems to go from most important girl to tag along. It's like the Ginny factor forces the main characters to take a developmental back step... And now story changes from a growing group of special romances to well, every other harem story every.

I do like the Ginny characterization, but the character interactions between her and Harry seem more cliche than special. They barely speak outside of sports, and Ginny isn't even as fleshed out a Hermione or Gabby and yet she's bossing everyone around. "Bossing" is a bit strong, but it seems like Harry isn't taking control of this thing like he was in book one, and that just highlights everyone else's actions. Luna seems thrown in. Tonks is just here now. Cho is now featured. I think it's really weird for you to create a world in which you spend so much effort developing 2-3 characters and then throw 3-4 more characters at us and expect us to accept that the new characters have equal, or higher narrative value in the case of Ginny, than the originals.

Also romance because of a purpose isn't as compelling to read as a purpose for romance. The whole disclosure thing was just a terrible scene, next to the group discussion on the train or Fleur yelling at Gabby scene or even Slughorn's party scene. These scenes don't seem like they were written any differently than the rest of the story, which is a bit of a shame. Moments in the story don't seem as special or unique- Harry meeting Gabbys mother feels the same as Tonks crashing through the door and that doesn't seem quite right.

TL;DR You forced Ginny and new characters in way too fast, Harry, Hermione, Gabby don't seem as relevant and take development back-steps. Also story is becoming/became bland.
omh666 chapter 19 . 11/27/2017
Can't believe it took me this long to realize there's been more chapters added. Great story, thank you for writing it.
Guest chapter 19 . 11/11/2017
HeWhoReviews
I really like this and it is a brilliant story as well as the lemons. Luna is at her Lunaist which is always a joy. More chapters plez
Guest chapter 7 . 11/8/2017
Good story so far, though it's somewhat disheartening to see you fall into the old 'Hogwarts and magical Britian is backwards whilst everywhere else is progressive and advanced' troupe. Nowhere is perfect, not even 'advanced nations', and it's a weird occurrence I see in HP fanfics to dump on magical Britian and then to go to other nations and treat them like nirvana and without flaw.
soggy noodle chapter 12 . 11/7/2017
Such an explosively vigorous session that was. I thought he was going to burn out her damn mind and reduce her to a cataleptic state.

I would feel sorry for Kreacher - having to clean up all the drip-drops along the way to the final destination as well as the massive Rorschach's blot of sexual fluid on the bed and its linens - but house elves seem to enjoy being made use of. And magic must make it simple.
soggy noodle chapter 4 . 11/6/2017
What'd you have for lunch?

Hermione: Soup.

Harry: A sandwich.

Gabrielle: Sausage~
soggy noodle chapter 3 . 11/6/2017
If made to describe that scene in one word, it would be intense.

Plot - check!
Keeping in character - check!
Humor - check!
Raunchiness - check!

You have earned another follower and favorite.
OoOXylionOoO chapter 19 . 10/1/2017
Great work.
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