The dialogue is fairly jumping off the page, it’s so full of life and in-character. I really appreciate how you read between the lines in the original novel and saw an interesting story to tell. That’s more than can be said for a lot of P&P fanfic. Nice work.

I love how eager everyone was to retire early. :)

Really nice Jane/Bingley scene. :)

I loved Lizzy’s final question. I’m enjoying the medical mystery you’ve got going on here, and nice job drawing in the earlier “offhand” reference you’d made to Mary’s miscarriage when she visited Pemberly. I’m thinking something in their diet—perhaps the water or a local plant that the cooks think is a good idea to eat?

Of course once Darcy talked to Elizabeth, she’d pulled his head out of his ass and drag him off to have a good time. :)

I feel like shouting at them both as if they were toddlers: “USE YOUR WORDS!”

Oy, haven’t they ever considered the idea of sexual activity that doesn’t involve the fear of conception? Someone needs to educate these two. :)

Ooh, interesting! The plot thickens! Is there something in their diet while they’re at Pemberly that is encouraging miscarriages?

Everything feels so in-character and lovely.

I’m glad Lizzy is getting better and the good doctor told Darcy to avoid getting her pregnant for a good long while. I could easily see this scenario happening in that era if an early miscarriage in their marriage had led to untreated anemia that was only compounded with each new conception, and Darcy hadn’t realized that he was part of the problem.

I loved the description of the wildflowers, and the reaction to the news of Lizzy’s poor health, given how hale she’d been in canon. Looking forward to a Scottish getaway with fewer servants and responsibilities. :)

Oh, I ache for them both! Lizzy was so hale and hearty in Austen’s novel that the description of Darcy being able to feel her bones is making me ache.

Nice pacing. I like how you’re not belaboring things, but carrying us efficiently through them.

Oh! So sad...

Let us hope it is something so simple as anemia!

I like Angus, and how Darcy knew Angus would just get louder if Darcy resisted opening up to him. Yeah, I like Angus. :)