|Reviews for Drivel|
| ms24 chapter 10 . 3/23/2014
Jonathon pulled a bottle of hand sanitiser from his pocket and began rinsing his hands...
| ms24 chapter 9 . 3/23/2014
It doesn't look good for Chase.
Jack stop sleeping and go save Chase!
| ms24 chapter 8 . 3/23/2014
I might come and watch, I enjoy watching you work. It should be educational...
Oh no, Chase isn't having a good day either!
Jack save him!
| ms24 chapter 7 . 3/23/2014
Taking a deep breath, Kim began her story...
This is a surprise, Kim being mature.
Poor Jack isn't having a good day either.
| ms24 chapter 6 . 3/23/2014
Do we leave him, or do we get him out?"...
Get him out of there!
| ms24 chapter 5 . 3/23/2014
"Oh thank God," she said. "My dad said a CTU agent was undercover...
Oh Kim, please be smart
...The tears mixing with her blood, Kim couldn't stop crying ... but oh dear, she doesn't deserve this.
Wake up Nick!
| ms24 chapter 4 . 3/23/2014
"Jack, it's the security detail. Kim's missing."
I knew it!
| ms24 chapter 3 . 3/23/2014
"Okay, but Chase be careful, don't take any chances, these guys are killers."
Chase, listen to Jack!
| ms24 chapter 2 . 3/23/2014
... and Jack, please make sure your daughter knows the importance of this. We don't need another... Kim episode."
Haha, but isn't that Kim's role? to get kidnapped?
Dark writing here, it reads like an episode of Hannibal - and I mean that as a high compliment.
| Skyfullofstars chapter 19 . 3/20/2014
Again, you have really hit your stride with this story.
Excellent writing. Fast paced, to the point, the pacing matches the actions and thoughts of the characters...very well done.
Fav line: "...but please don't make Kim pay for my sins..."
| Skyfullofstars chapter 18 . 3/20/2014
I'm impressed with Jack's thoughts on getting therapy for himself and for Kim, possibly joint sessions. And that he is obviously deeply concerned over how Kim is handling the events with Teri. Good father behavior right there !
I read this chapter twice because I just knew there would be a clue here. Actually, 3 clues. But I'll just mention the 1 that really stood out for me...the tape was there but now it's gone. This bothers me for some reason.
Is Chase having (understandable) reactions...or is this enemy action?
| Skyfullofstars chapter 17 . 3/20/2014
I would never have thought of that trick with the tape! Most excellent!
I admit, I put off reading this chapter for one extra day as my pulse was pounding during the last few scenes and I feared the worst.
Jack is such a seasoned agent and remains focused, despite realizing what his kidnapper probably has in mind for him. His quick look around gave me the heejeebies ( you may quote me.) He's always professional...but loved this little bit which showed his inner turmoil..."by focusing on Teri and Kim, he found the tears not far away..."
Good scene here. Really well done!
| Skyfullofstars chapter 16 . 3/16/2014
(I'm typing in the dark as the power just went off for the 2nd time in 11 hours but thank goodness for bright computer screens and flashlights, lol.) I want to post this and not wait as I've read thus far and it's engrossing.
Kim's feelings come across as spot on. This is what any normal person would think and feel given these circumstances. (I must say I like Liz's character, a lot.)
I do like the way you portray Kim - very much an unusually brave young person trying to remain calm in the face of so much danger and emotion...but breaking down at the last minute when faced with the man who saved her life. Again, very human. And achingly young.
Fav lines here are the last ones..."...and she didn't feel embarrassed, or stupid, or guilty, or judged. She just felt safe."
| Skyfullofstars chapter 15 . 3/16/2014
Everyone is very concerned over Chase's condition...but Chase, his youth aside, is an agent and a darned good one! Of course, he's going to want to stick around and help in the search for Jack, if possible.
and very good! I, too, had forgotten he didn't even know who the young woman he'd rescued was!
(I was impressed that Tony thought about Kim possibly not wanting a male around her just yet. That was understanding.)
The scenes with Jack continues to keep my nerves on edge...
| Skyfullofstars chapter 14 . 3/16/2014
First, a bit of heartening news but I won't ruin it for readers who go to the review box before they read the chapter.
Annnddd here is where you really hit your stride, so far, in this story. This was just intensely disturbing to read and I've read it twice over to make sure I haven't missed any clues.
Not disturbing because of the writing, gosh no! But because of the subject matter and the build-up to the horror that is to come. You build it slow and steadily so that by the time your readers are nearing the final paragraph here, we are inside Jack's head, listening to his thoughts and wincing at his memories and realizations.
But despite the horrific situation, Jack remains the consummate agent: wondering if his current circumstance is an aberration - a deviation from the prior and why.
Seriously, my heart was pounding when I read this...