|Reviews for Perfect World|
| Bradley Yukata chapter 1 . 3/1
Un, the only problem I have with this is that, to my understanding, Flames aren't something conjured up out of the ether, but rather a manifestation of one's willpower based upon certain energies in the body. So, there's that technicality.
Oh, and the unnecessary curse by Byakuran. He isn't really the type to do that.
And then, I get the feeling that Satsuki over-reacted a bit there.
But otherwise, an interesting start.
Un, a character, eh?
Flame Type: Cloud
Box Animal: Belette- a propagating weasel that wields small sickles. It has a small pet-owner type relationship with Garry. Belette is French for weasel.
Life Fiber Synchronization Level- 57%
Kanshou and Bakuya: A pair of short Chinese Falchions. They are blades that have a magnetic attraction only to each other. In other words, the blades will always return to each other. (Sorry, I'm not good at coming up with weapons and considering where I'm taking these from, it's kind of like an inside reference)
He's a martial arts prodigy who doesn't have much need for strategy due to sheer skill and capabilities. He utilizes what he has to his full capabilities. He prefers a straight up fight and despises treachery and underhanded tactics.
Life Fiber Form:
A light leather armor set along with a black duster, white shirt, black combat boots, and black gloves.
Appearance: He is a tall, slender, and pale young man. He has unkempt, light brown hair, and green irises: his eyes have a flat look to them, as if he isn't really looking at his surroundings. He has a defined build. He prefers dark, thin clothes that don't cling, with the exception of jackets.
Personality: A generally reserved and submissive individual. He is of the belief solitude suits him, so he doesn't interact with others much. He is generally calm and level headed, though he's also a rather fierce battle maniac, and will fight for the sake of fighting.
Likes: Belette. Reading. Quiet. Practicing his martial arts. Practicing with his swords. Fighting. People who see logic. Resolve. Tea. Coffee. Bittersweet things.
Dislikes: Idiots. Hypocrites. pride less people. Fools who can't see the world for what it is. Underhandedness.
| Omodor chapter 1 . 2/28
name: Omodora (just a version of my name i use for my unnamed female OCs)
age 17 (i don't care about the age make it whatever you want)
nationality: Australian (simple because i am)
flame type: storm
box animal:a salamander named Silice (Latin for flint) with a small flame on his forehead that look a little like horns (maybe changes into a western dragon if you need a "upgrade in power" moment). has a biting problem so he tends to bite any he can get at, (furniture, trees, people) most of the time he bites Omodora's head. about the size of a cat (big enough to sit in someone's head without being too heavy). body color a reddish orange.
life fiber synchronization level: i don't know just make her the average of all the other OCs (i have nothing to base this off so a may make a choice thats to OP of stupidly small)
weapons: Salamandra ab Inspiratione (Latin for salamander blast) an armored suit, looking somewhat like a knights armor (thinking kind of Fate/stay night saber armor but all metal with dress included), that has six cannon on its back. 2 come over the shoulder, 2 come under the arms at chest height and 2 on both side of the hips. the main form of attack is the 6 cannons each fires a blast of storms flame. each barrel has a 2 second cool down before firing again safely (if fired before cool down is done the barrel will explode and/or overheat leading to a 20 second cool down, which one happens is random).
it's main defense is a bubble of flame to act as a shield, while not very powerful, (meant more to lessen the impact of attacks then stop them) its power can be increased by moving the 2 lower cannons onto her back then unfolding them,turning them in to panels.
it's ultimate attack involves getting down on all fours then having all the fold onto her back then merge into one large cannon, in one of two forms, one with one large barrel, the other with 6 smaller barrels but still connected to the same cannon. the large cannon fires a large beam of storm flames, while the 6 small barreled one acts as a mini-gun. Both are very draining on her flames making it a last resort weapon.
attack style: Omodora attacks form a distance, often from higher ground or other favorable position when at all possible. she use or weapon like artillery strikes when at her maximum range, then switching to a more strait firing cannon style when (or if) the enemy gets in closer. a common tactic she uses to keep her enemies at a distance is to some time fire short of the target in order to get them to back up. in areas were there is a lot of room to hide (such as the ruins of a town she has bombarded) she will hide the fire quick artillery strikes, then hiding some were else, repeating this until the enemy is disoriented, tired or in an area that favors her. her armor has dying will flame boots but are only powerful enough to help her slide/move quickly across the ground. in a close combat situation her only goal is to flee and put as much distance between her and her opponent.
life fiber form: i don't know what to put here. please Privet Message me some thing a little more detailed as of what to put here. if you choose to put something here yourself make it increase her defense or her flame output.
appearance: around Chrome's height and build but a little taller and a slight more muscle (and maybe, seeing as it is kill la kill a larger bust). her hair is black, red or a mix of both, and comes down to her ankles it is slightly messy, with random strand coming out at random. her eyes are unique, they are 2 different shades of red, the inside of her eye is a crimson red in the shape of flames that appear the exploding from the center of her eye, while the rest is a fade, almost pink, red.
as for cloths she prefers dresses or very long loose skirts and long sleeve shirts that cover all of her torso. she also wears arm length gloves. her stomach and arms were badly burned in a fireworks accident, leaving her with massive burn scars, she is very unselfconscious about them and goes out of her way to wear clothes that hid them, even to the point were wearing cloths that will hide them make her uncomfortable.
personality: Omodora has split personalities. her normal personality is quite timid often hiding and running away from people she doesn't know, or clinging to people she, and most other people, see as stronger the her. once people get to know her and earn her trust, she is very open and kind, willing to help them in almost any way they might need.
However in a fight she is a complete sadist, wanting to inflict as much physical and physiological damage as possible. when she becomes like this there is only 2 ways to stop her,1. her opponent is incapacitated, she wont kill and unconscious, "why hurt them is they can't feel it" type of reasoning, but will seek to kill from the start of the fight (unless was order to bring the target back alive) 2. have someone she trusts/likes talk her down, this personality is still the submissive one so the timid personality get final say in what they do, this will be much hard to if she was made before turning sadistic.
likes: fireworks. far off loud noise i.e. explosions. the people she trusts. places she can hide when scared. the night sky.
dislikes: fire (dying will flames are ok, she knows the difference). people trying to control her/ limit her freedom. wide open areas.
misc. info: the burns on her arms she got while making fireworks, which was her hobby/job at the time, despite this she still enjoys and make firework, although much more carefully now, but fears fire. favorite food is ice cream and can sometimes be bribed into telling minor secrets and doing mildly irritating tasks with her favorite flavor, rainbow.
(the next part is just an idea on what to base her past around) orphan then adopted by mildly abusive parents, just yelling and minor insults i.e. stupid, annoying, ugly, no physical abuse, saw fireworks and was amazed, stated making own, explosion from mistake caused house to catch fire burning parents alive in house.
Thats is PM me if you have any question or you choose to use my OC.
good start give a lot of possibilities for the story, hope to see more soon.